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AuroraExecutionchan β€” The Seagull
Published: 2009-09-21 15:18:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 967; Favourites: 23; Downloads: 11
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So far from the ocean
can be seen your whitened wings
even in the greyest sky
you never cease to sing

Your feathers bleached by summer sun
and smoothened by rainfall
your voice is loud so all the world
can ever hear you call

You are like me, a wanderer
with nowhere to return
knowing that each different sea
is something new to learn

Take me, oh friend seagull
on a journey β€˜cross the seas
fly me through the rasping gales
and storms you pass with ease

I want to see the ocean waves
crest and spray the ship
I want to see the faraway lands
you visit on each trip

But tell me, little seagull
do you never tire of flight
do you never wish to settle down
and sleep a bit at night

For though the journey gives you joy
as below the waters foam
when others stop, you must continue
for wanderers have no home

And when you sing so loudly
is it really joy you’ve cried
or is it just to shut away
the loneliness inside

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Comments: 28

rochan925 [2017-09-29 21:50:05 +0000 UTC]

This poem is SO beautiful <3 Well done!

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seagullson [2017-03-04 11:51:14 +0000 UTC]

i hope dis is about ME.....
i'm a seagull!

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Cibbwin [2009-10-06 09:46:42 +0000 UTC]

I was expecting something childlike, with some folk imagery, but you did one better: Made something incredibly personal and touching out of something very ordinary.

GREAT work!

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Cibbwin [2009-10-06 23:50:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm very grateful you took the time to give me a constructive review of my poem, and I'm incredibly glad you liked it so much. Thanks for the fave, also~ ^-^

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Mystique-Rider [2009-10-03 03:22:36 +0000 UTC]

lovely poem, especially the end

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Mystique-Rider [2009-10-03 03:53:20 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! And for the favorite as well~

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RedSky-atNight [2009-10-02 09:36:57 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful poem , was a lovely read.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to RedSky-atNight [2009-10-02 22:06:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Blomsterhumlan [2009-09-24 15:28:18 +0000 UTC]

I really like this poem, especially the ending, which (I felt) was unexpected and fresh.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Blomsterhumlan [2009-09-24 16:05:05 +0000 UTC]

Yay!

I personally really liked the way this poem turned out, but I wasn't sure if it sounded too cliche, so I'm glad you thought it was fresh~

Thanks for the favorite, also. ^-^

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Blomsterhumlan In reply to AuroraExecutionchan [2009-09-24 18:24:57 +0000 UTC]

You are very welcome , and no you don't have to worry about that! At least, I for one, didn't think it was clichΓ© at all.

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kindfullove12 [2009-09-24 01:43:49 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to kindfullove12 [2009-09-24 16:04:14 +0000 UTC]

thank you~

thanks for the fave too ^^

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cesura [2009-09-23 18:03:42 +0000 UTC]

I really like it. I'm not sure what else to say, I just like it.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to cesura [2009-09-24 16:05:14 +0000 UTC]

Haha, that's fine. I like it too.

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Fire-Chan9490 [2009-09-21 19:30:51 +0000 UTC]

I really love the last two verses.

Maybe it's just me, but I tend to feel irked by rhyming poetry (aren't I weird?) so the beginning of the poem isn't my favourite, but the last two verses are AMAZING. I don't know... they just feel very... real and natural?

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Fire-Chan9490 [2009-09-22 04:18:14 +0000 UTC]

I dunno. Sorry. I like rhyming more than free verse, so I generally prefer my structured poetry to my unstructured poetry.

I'm glad you liked the ending in spite of your rhymophobia.

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Fire-Chan9490 In reply to AuroraExecutionchan [2009-09-22 19:52:20 +0000 UTC]

Maybe it's just because I'm jealous. To date, I have never written a piece of completed rhyming poetry.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Fire-Chan9490 [2009-09-22 23:00:45 +0000 UTC]

Just...keep trying? I get inspiration at weird times.

2 am last night, for example. >.>;

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Fire-Chan9490 In reply to AuroraExecutionchan [2009-09-23 20:03:44 +0000 UTC]

Whoa. That's inconvenient. Did you write it down?

Last night I got into this art phase and drew from 10 to midnight... instead of doing the homework I'd forgotten about. >.> Not too smart of me.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Fire-Chan9490 [2009-09-24 16:04:00 +0000 UTC]

Oh, yes, I really liked how it sounded in my head, so I ended up writing the poem out. It's on my hard drive, and will probably be posted here next. Like, tonight. Or something.

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Fire-Chan9490 In reply to AuroraExecutionchan [2009-09-24 20:02:29 +0000 UTC]

Cool. Can't wait.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Fire-Chan9490 [2009-09-24 20:33:32 +0000 UTC]

>.>

...it rhymes, though...

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Fire-Chan9490 In reply to AuroraExecutionchan [2009-09-24 21:11:52 +0000 UTC]

I don't really care... As long as it doesn't sound horribly forced (like my English teacher's example of "what-rhymes-with-purple") I'll probably still enjoy it.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Fire-Chan9490 [2009-09-24 23:31:57 +0000 UTC]

Nothing rhymes with purple. Or silver. Or month.

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Fire-Chan9490 In reply to AuroraExecutionchan [2009-09-26 15:47:25 +0000 UTC]

Or orange, apparently.

So... yeah. As long as it's not like that, it'll be fine.

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AuroraExecutionchan In reply to Fire-Chan9490 [2009-09-26 19:32:26 +0000 UTC]

so...try not to rhyme colors, is the moral of the story.

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Fire-Chan9490 In reply to AuroraExecutionchan [2009-09-26 20:57:05 +0000 UTC]

Exactly. Colours are difficult to rhyme...

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