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Pasta Name: Forever Mine (Original)

Publish Date: February 25, 2011

Synopsis: A Shaymin named Skye becomes insane after her release and desperately attempts to win her trainer’s love back with becoming her sky forme after failing to obtain the Garcidea.

Fun Fact: The action replay codes used in this pasta like Pokémon modifier one that involves having master balls equal to the Pokédex number of the Pokémon are legit and work, as ridiculous as it may sound.

Highlight: C H E C K P L A T I N U M

Quote: “I told you that you’d be mine forever.” -Skye

Oh boy, another requested pasta and it's another "Pokémon goes insane from conflicts with their trainer" type of story. This review took a lot of time to make, not gonna lie.

Now as requested by sparklingdemon, please check out their remake involving anything with Skye the Shaymin or Forever Mine. They are more proud of that version compared to this version: Forever Mine Remake

As promised, I will review the remake too. They will be a separate review because they are very different from one another and DeviantArt also has a kb limit for their descriptions. As for the original, well people including sparklingdemon, want me to rip it apart which is what we're doing today. However, I still would like to try to be as constructive and fair as possible.

Before reading this pasta after a long time, some people have said this pasta is if you mixed Pokémon Dead Channel and Prevention of Evolution together and added in a Shaymin.

1- I can't quite agree with that (which I will explain in my further thoughts proportion on why), even though there are some similarities to them.
2 - As far as I'm aware, Forever Mine came before Prevention of Evolution. So if anything, EEeEE would be ripping off of Skye if there's any similarities, but hey, some people don't like having their characters with others. So, let's be a bit considerate to the authors of these pastas. Not to mention, the idea of a story could repeat on others without knowing each other
3 - Unoriginal doesn't always mean it's bad. There are plenty of franchises out there who aren't bad and could arguably be better than the originals using their concepts. For example, there was a game called Hydline which came out before Legend of Zelda, and they both have a lot in common, but of course, Legend of Zelda was more successful.

So the story starts off like this...
"I just wanted a Sky Forme Shaymin... I didn't want this..." So our protagonist has this desire to have a sky forme Shaymin and I had the same exact desire at one point too. They weren't a dedicated Pokémon fan at the time, so the event for the sky forme event passed on by without their knowledge. I hate how some legendaries had events with due dates too like the Victini event - the deadline passed for me because I had no internet connection at the time.

Anyway, the protagonist was devastated for a sky forme Shaymin and they had to get Action Replay as their only chance to get them. For those who don't know what an Action Replay is (even though I have talked about them in other reviews like Prevention of Evolution) it's a cheat device where you can put codes in to modify the game for you whether to make things easier or sometimes harder for you. I had one back then too and they are fun to use, but sometimes they may be game-breaking as in making the game too easy for you.

The author didn't bothered to look for a super long code online to get Oak's letter, so they used the Pokémon modifier code. Which is going to bite them in the bottom eventually for you'll find out later. I've been there before too.

Lemme explain: the Pokémon Modifier code that they are using would give you 493 Master Balls if you held down a certain button while walking through wild Pokémon spawns you can get a certain Pokémon to spawn based on their Pokédex number which connects to the number of master balls you have. I have tried this exact same code before and believe it or not, it works as random and ridiculous as it may sound. I mean the code had to have some variable to match up and grab with the National Pokédex entry number. So, it gave 493 Master Balls because Sinnoh had 493 Pokémon in the Pokédex at the time.

So the protagonist dropped one of the Master Balls to have 492 for Shaymin's Pokédex number and a wild Shaymin appeared in the tall grass. The protagonist was thrilled about this and used one of the Master Balls to catch the wild Shaymin and obviously the Shaymin was caught with no problem. The protagonist nicknamed them Skye after their sky forme Shaymin plushie. Remember that detail right there. I'm surprised they didn't just spawn an Arceus and use a Master Ball. They'd have one less either way.

The player also had the "learn tm/hm" code on. Another code that I have also used before and it worked. You know how it tells you which Pokémon can or can't learn the tm you have selected? Well with that code on, all of the Pokémon will say "can learn" no matter what. So basically it makes all TMs compatible with all Pokémon.

So with the "learn any tm/hm move" code activated, they want to teach Skye how to fly. Hold on let me do some quick research because I thought Shaymin could learn fly anyway. The only flying type move Shaymin could learn (keep in mind, this is platinum we're talking about) is air slash
and that's only for their sky forme too. Also, teaching the move Fly to Shaymin is more fitting than when I taught Hail to my Bronzong back at the time. I don't what I was thinking either.

The move fly with for their sky forme, and so they flew to Floarama Town to go obtain the Gracidea Flower. Surprised, the NPC wouldn't give the gracidea flower to the player. They were frustrated by this sight.
Actually, as what I remembered and experience, you have to go through the event process with Oak's letter or had to get it as a mystery gift from Game Freak to obtain the Gracidea Flower. I did the same thing a couple years ago and the NPC wouldn't give the Gracidea flower to me because Shaymin was modified in instead of being an event Pokémon. So, I'll give points to the author because this can legit happen to you in the actual game.

The protagonist was disappointed and stared in agony at the screen. The NPC wouldn't give the one item to achieve Skye's sky forme and just repeated their dialogue over and over again. The player opened up the Shaymin's summary and murmured "I'm sorry, Skye. I tried." at the screen even though she couldn't hear them. Heh. At least they acknowledge that the Pokémon in the game aren't real a lot earlier in the story.

A few months later, the protagonist got bored after beating the game, grew attracted to Heart Gold. They dug out platinum and started playing it again and thought about resetting the game. They had a bunch of good Pokémon that they didn't want to go to waste on platinum though, including the legendaries.

With their sister's DS, they traded with their Heart Gold game and transfer all of them from Platinum to Heart Gold. They'll be safe there, so they did so that. They transferred Skye as well.

But didn't you use action replay? I don't know which version you used but I'm pretty sure Heart Gold and Platinum codes worked on the same version especially since the games were like a year apart from one another. So, why couldn't you use the Pokémon modifier code for Heart Gold? Well, I guess IV's and stuff would matter. Plus, there are some Pokémon that you can never release no matter what. But, I think I spoke a bit too soon for this next coming part.

They just got finished with using Celebi in order to fight Giovanni.

I was going to ask if they did the event on time since I think you need the event Celebi to get the event to work, but it turns out Celebi was cheated in. This is a nitpick, but why didn't you use the code for the Shaymin event in Platinum? So, you typed up the code for the Celebi but not for Shaymin? I know how much of a pain it is to type out those codes though and you have to make sure they were typed in correctly too.

I know sometimes action replays comes with default codes to start off with but I don't recall the Event Pokémon being one of the them. As far as I'm aware, the events only work if you get the exact mystery gift or retrieve Event Pokémon because last time I checked, it tracks this kind of stuff going by the ID of the Pokémon. Yeah, you all probably thought the ID numbers your Pokémon had were useless? They actually have a purpose like for these. I know I'm probably looking too deep into this.

Not many of the legendaries they had were legit and were cheated into the game, so they released most of them.

The protagonist noticed there were two Shaymins in the PC. They decided to release one of them them and this textbox popped up: "Skye was released. Skye sadly said farewell." The protagonist was shocked by this at first, questioning if it was possible for it to say that in the games. they shrugged it off though and turned off the game, they needed sleep.

I've had people on discord comment on how stupid it was to release legendaries and the other Shaymin especially if they had an emotional attachment to them. To be fair, I think they were just cleaning out their PC and felt bad about cheating them in. It's like cheating in a shiny, it's fun but ruins the adventure in putting effort in finding a shiny. But I can agree that out of context, it does seem like the protagonist just released a Pokémon they had a bit of a bond with. But, in fairness, there were TWO of them to be exact, and having two Shaymins could make you since like a cheater, so I can kind of understand where the protagonist.

So there is a bit of a purpose for the other Shaymin or at least I think there's a purpose of the other Shaymin being there. By the way, the release happened on Heart Gold.

The next day, they played Heart Gold and checked their pc and was given a surprised by what they found in the PC. There were 13 sky forme Shaymin inside the PC. They questioned on if Shaymin can be in sky forme while inside the PC.
I tested this out recently and I can confirm that they can still be in their sky forme within the PC, but it depends on the time of day though.

The protagonist looked at the summary, the first Shaymin was named "C". They looked terrified and their cry was quiet too. They went to the next Shaymin named "H" and their cry was louder this time and their ears were bleeding as well. The player went to the Shaymin after and they were named "E" and they noticed they were a bit bloodier and their skin was peeling off to expose muscles. The protagonist noticed as they kept moving through the Shaymins, they got gorier and more gruesome with each one. it escalated with skin tearing away and muscles exposed, and limbs being torn off.
OH NO! IT'S THE RETURN OF THE VIBES OF THE SCALELESS PURPLE MAGIKARP FROM POKEMON DEAD CHANNEL! RUN!
By the time they got to the last Shaymin named "M", it was a gory mess of a sky forme Shaymin with its front legs, tail, and ears missing. They looked at the letters again and they noticed it spelled "C H E C K P L A T I N U M".

Now as cheesy as this is, I kind of like this part because I think the part with the player checking through the summaries of the Shaymins with the sprites getting worse and worse to spell out a word with the names is kind of well done. I think it handled blood and gore a lot better than a lot of other gaming creepypastas. Plus, it has a bit of a purpose to it which you will find out later on.

The player turned off the power and hid their DSi underneath their bed. They woke up at night at 2 am and couldn't go back to sleep, they went to turn on their lights so they could see only to trip on something soft on the way there.
I hope you didn't wake up any family after that trip because falls from trips can be loud.

They turned on the light and saw that it was just their LAND forme Shaymin plushie. Hold up! Wasn't it a sky forme plushie like it was earlier in the story? or is this a completely different plushie? I wouldn't be surprised if it was a different plush because I'm sure some people have plushies of different forms of the same Pokémon like the gigantamax, holiday-themed, and mega evolution plushies for example.

But OH NO, the Shaymin plushie came to live with bloody sky forme Shaymin ears, tail, and front legs and killed our protagonist. Just kidding, that doesn't actually happen... thankfully...

But what really happened was the protagonist murmured "Get back in the Pokémon pile where you belong!" and throw the Shaymin plush at their large pile of Pokémon plushies. You have a large pile of Pokémon plushies? Lucky you. Also, are they on the floor? My dogs or cats would've used them as chew toys if they were at that reach. Not deducting point for this, by the way. Just a comment.

So, the protagonist went to play on platinum because they wanted to CHECK PLATINUM and for some reason, they started out on Seabreak Path even though they recalled saving at a Pokémon Center... The protagonist went to check on their Platinum version because of the message of the 13 Shaymins spelling out CHECK PLATINUM. They started out on Seabreak Path even though they recalled saving at a Pokémon Center. it was the opening path to the flower garden, the protagonist tried to turn back but the ways out were blocked off and they couldn't leave the place as if their character walked through the walls with a cheat code. They had no choice but to walk up the path instead.

As they walked up the path to go to the flower garden (which is a very long path in the actual game) the player noticed that the water was escalating with a red tint the more they walked up the path. Oh, here we go! The path also slowly started to turn red as well. They had no Pokémon with them either. No team, nothing.

The path and water became more and more red, eventually the player stumbled upon Pokémon organs and bones on the path, the player felt sick to their stomach but continued to proceed. Also, isn't the path covered in flowers for Flower Paradise? So, did the bones and organs replaced the flowers on the path?

When they got to the island where you meet Shaymin in the games officially, the area wasn't called Flower Paradise, it was called "???" instead. There was no surprise a Shaymin in the middle. The player interacted with them and the textbox said "I knew you would come back." a wild battle started. "Skye attacked!" No Pokémon available for the player but the game treated it as of they were in the Great Marsh.

"What will [REDACTED] throw?"

There was no mud, bait, or run options. all they could throw was Skye's Master Ball at that cursed Shaymin.

"[REDACTED] used Skye's Master Ball!"

The ball shook once, twice, three times.

"Skye was caught!"

There was no exciting music played after Skye got caught and the player opened her summary.

"Her?" I have nothing against gender identities, but isn't Shaymin considered genderless in the games? Well, I believe this involves the player doing a RP type of thing. I mean, there were times where I also have assumed genders for certain Pokémon. I can see Shaymin being gender neutral, to be honest. I have seen Cresselia as a female, Darkrai as a male, etc. I understand that gender assumptions are frowned upon in some societies, but it's something I thought I may point out. Also, fun fact, Lugia was meant to be female but the movie didn't think so, which actually made her creator depressed.

Skye's sprite was covered in blood with a sad yet angry expression.

I know some of you are like "hmmm... build up to bloody corpses and bones of Pokémon, red-colored water and ground, Pokémon felt abandoned by their owner, and the main focused Pokémon gives sad and angry expressions. That doesn't sound very familiar, right?" Like I said before, just because there's similarities doesn't always mean they are bad.

Skye still knew fly and the player tried to get her to fly somewhere else right away to get out of there. "Skye doesn't want to fly!" said the textbox.

"Come on, fly already!" the player yelled.
"Skye needs to get ready." said the textbox.
"Get ready?" the player questioned.

The menu automatically closed and Skye was in the overworld now, moving around, the screen faded to black. Textbox came back once again "Skye is ready to fly!" Screen faded back into the overworld, the player check their summary of Skye and she had pitch black eyes and red pupils with sky forme ears, front legs, and tail. The hind legs were stretched to match the height of the front legs and it looked like it hurt. The pink flower was replaced with a torn flower. A sick, twisted grin stretched across her face too. The cry had the first half being land forme's cry and the second half being the sky forme's cry. So, she would make this Cry ? That's not really that unsettling. Maybe making it a little demonic would've helped. They weren't in the Flower Paradise anymore, but in a black overworld now.

Skye: "Do you like my new look?"

Player: "No. No. I don't like it." Well, at least you're honest.

Skye started to fly around the overworld. Skye: "Seeee? I can fly now. Will you love me now?" Okay, not gonna lie, that's a bit unsettling.

"Love me?" Her new cry sounded. Wait, is the audio clip for her cry supposed to say love me? or was that the textbox saying that? Doesn't specify that.
The cry "love me?" repeated a couple of times.
It got quieter each time too.
This continued until.... "LOVE ME?" ear rape happened as the player thought they have became deaf from the loud cry of that coming from their speakers.

Skye: "Do you love me?" Yes | No options appeared.

Player: "No, I used to love you at one point, then you turned into this... thing..." They selected no.

Skye: "You're lying"

Player: "What?"

Pokémon Dead Channel: BRVR assumed the player was lying about still loving him.
Forever Mine: Skye assumed the player was lying about them no longer loving her.

You can't win either way. xD

Skye: "You still love me. You will always love me."

The psychological horror and denial I would say is the motive here even though I feel like it was a bit abrupt as I feel like the release of Skye should've happened before the 6 month time skip because it would make sense on why they would act like they abandoned them, but that's just me. I get that the whole point is supposed to be that Skye is desperate for her owner's love after releasing them. So she's trying to prove that she can fly and make herself her sky forme.

Skye: "You'll be mine forever."

Skye forgot fly and learned imprison and she used it as the screen cut to black. The game wouldn't turn back on. So, the player turn out platinum and threw it at the wall and landing into the trash can. 2 points. "I'll never be yours."

So, to take their mind off of the cursed Shaymin, they played Heart Gold. but when the game turned on, their character was standing in complete blackness. a land forme Shaymin with bloody sky forme ears, tail, and front legs was in front of their character. "I told you that you'd be mine forever."

This is where I theorized the whole thing with the other Shaymin came from, the other Shaymin that wasn't released was Skye in the Heart Gold version, while the one released went to Platinum. I don't think that was the intent of the author's part though. Plus, the part that may debunk this theory is when they wake with 13 sky forme Shaymins in their PC instead of one land forme Shaymin.

Also, out of context, this may not seem like it but when you analyze it, you realize that the sky forme Shaymins in the PC for Heart Gold with the "CHECK PLATINUM" message, the whole part of that was supposed to be where Skye got the sky forme parts from. They ripped apart another Shaymin in sky forme to get those parts. It's showing the part a visual representation on a sky forme Shaymin as it escalates into a gory mess. That's the way I see it.

One more theory I have, although I found the motive of Skye a bit abrupt, I think the reason why Skye was thought she had a bond with the player and assumed that making herself her sky forme was a priority to win her owner's love back, was because back when the player opened up the Shaymin's summary and murmured "I'm sorry, Skye. I tried." at the screen since they couldn't get the Garcidea Flower for her, Skye could actually hear that and part of this was because the DS has a microphone. Again, I'm not sure if those were your intents, sparklingdemon, and I'm probably looking too deep into them, but I think they're at least interesting. Not facts, just theories.

I still got to do a full-depth analysis of the remake. Maybe some of these thing are addressed or done in the remake.

My further thoughts:

Honestly, after analyzing it real closely and looking back to it...

It's a bit underrated.

My Audience: "Wait, what?"

Seriously. I don't see very many problems with this pasta as some of the people from Discord made it out to be. I feel like one of the main reasons why people may not like this pasta as much and got criticized is because it has similarities to Pokémon Dead Channel. I know I said that we should be considerate in not comparing pastas with one another, but I thought I might point out some of the similarities to show you guys on why people may assume that it's a copy, when it's not necessarily.

I mean, this does the whole "Pokémon goes insane from conflicts with their trainer" trope, but let me explain why I believe the pastas who follow this trope, which Forever Mine, Pokémon Dead Channel, and Prevention of Evolution execute them differently. I'm not sure if I should include Abandon Lonliness for this list since Loneliness was just trying to warn the player on what not to do with symbolism and messages from Blue's experience and that they will be cursed if they give Loneliness a bad time.

Pokémon Dead Channel: BRVR went insane because he thought his owner abandoned him and when she came back for him years later, he was both angry and sad at his owner and was showing her around with how insane he became with a showcase of dead Pokémon bodies and destroyed property. And at the end, he wanted to make his owner suffer, and a Pikachu Doll Z was somehow transferred behind the player in real life, which we could assume he will make the player suffer in real life.

Prevention of Evolution (Original): EEeEE went insane because his trainer refused to evolve him to a shiny Espeon because he needed a shiny Flareon to complete his shiny Eeveelution collection. EEeEE kills the player in-game and his team. And it ends with EEeEE's voice transferred into the speakers of the player's television.

Forever Mine: Skye went insane because her trainer released them because she assumed it was because she could've become her sky forme, so she kills and rips off parts from a sky forme Shaymin and sews them on her body out of desperation for her trainer's love. Skye doesn't attempt kill to kill the player in-game or in real life, but enforced the player in-game to be with her forever and she able to go from Platinum to Heart Gold in the end as a way of saying the player will never leave her sight ever at least in the games.

In other words, BRVR wanted to bring suffering to the player, EEeEE wanted to bring regret to the player, and Skye wanted to bring imprisonment to the player.

The three may have some similarities with their concepts but they're not exactly the same because just like I said above, their stories are executed in different ways. So, I think calling Forever Mine - Pokémon Dead Channel but with Shaymin is a bit of an exaggeration.

Another thing I feel like people are considering gaming creepypastas that have blood in them as bad, when that's not always the case.

Okay, yes, I was exactly like this in my Pokémon Dead Channel review and saying these things will make me sound like a hypocrite. In my defense, I was still warming up with reviews and pretty much saying what other people who think all creepypastas that have aged poorly would say. If I reviewed it now, I'd probably be a lot less harsh on it. I may give Pokémon Dead Channel another go someday, but not today. I feel like it would still get the Spoiled Pasta rating anyway, but we'll see when I get to its revisit.

Anyway, I think blood and gore in gaming creepypastas can work if done correctly and if it had some kind of purpose for the story. Like the blood and gore in this pasta had a bit of a purpose as a visual representation to what bound to come from Skye. Now, are blood and gore a cliché in pastas? Yes, they still are, but you got think about when the pasta came out. This pasta came out in 2011, and I would say that's the year when creepypastas really started to blow up in popularity (at least for me though since some people consider 2012 as the trending era of creepypastas, while others consider 2010 the year when creepypastas got its peak audience since they allegedly first came out in 2007). Would I now consider blood and gore for pastas that came out in 2010-2011 as clichés? Not really since clichés are often referred to as tropes that have been overdone so many times. I think a better description for that would be "poorly-aged details" because they may be fairly new and not quite overused yet, but they've aged poorly though. So, is would it really be fair to say blood and gore are clichés in 2010 and 2011? I guess it actually depends on the situation and on what you think a cliché would be and when something is considered a cliché. I mean, even before creepypastas, there were horror movies like the iconic slashers and horror books like R.L. Stein with Goosebumps. And creepypastas allegedly first came out in 4chan in the year 2007. So, if there were already horror stories even before creepypastas, would it still make blood and gore as horror considered clichés? Well, again, I think it depends on how its executed and where you the reader would draw the line for when a certain trope is considered a cliché.

Plus, some people have told me that they would argue that if you get grossed out by the blood and gore in the pasta, then the creepypasta worked with its shock values. A creepypasta can be creepy with its shock values, but again, it depends on how its executed. SPOILER: There's a pasta that I'm going to be reviewing that does shock values and tries to be creepy in the wrong kind of way (and it's going to be the very next pasta I'm going to be reviewing. No, not the remake of Forever Mine. That's going to be reviewed after this next one because I may need a break from reviewing long pastas.)

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Okay, I'm getting a bit off-topic now, so what are my other thoughts on the ORIGINAL Forever Mine? I really like the psychological horror of Skye near the end with all of her dialogue and how she was in this huge denial of her own no longer loving her, and the desperation to get her owner to love her again was really well put together. And I like how the cheat codes that were used in this pastas are legit and can work. Maybe that's just my bias because I used it as a kid and it's a bit on the nostalgia side of things. And like I said, the blood and gore were a build up to something extreme with Skye. The whole CHECK PLATINUM idea was creative and well put together. Also, now that I think about the protagonist was actually pretty smart throughout this story too with throwing away their Platinum version when it got too crazy, trying to escape the bloody Flower Garden, etc. A lot of my critiques were mostly nitpicks or just commentary/jokes.

Now there are two major problems I have with this pasta:

1 - Like I said before, I feel like there should've been a little more time and development in bonding between the protagonist and Skye, unless it all happened during the six month time skip. But, even then, I feel like if there was a bond developed within the story then it would make Skye's motive for her owner's love back more understandable.

2 - I'm kind of confused on where exactly did Skye get those sky forme Shaymin parts? I'm aware that it's made more clear on how in the remake, but in this version of the story, it can leave you a bit puzzled. I had a couple assumptions/theories on how such as they got the parts from the other Shaymin that wasn't released and that's why that Shaymin was replaced with the 13 sky forme Shaymins. The only flaw with that theory is they didn't have the Garcidea Flower, so how could that Shaymin be its sky forme without the Garcidea Flower. I was also thinking that maybe Skye killed off the actual Shaymin in their Platinum version, which would explain the bones and organs on Flower Paradise. The only problem with that theory is again, they don't hold the Garcidea Flower. As explained earlier, the flower is given to you by an NPC in Florama Town. All we really get in this version is the screen goes black and then BAM Skye has all of the parts sewed onto her. The remake does this one specific detail better.

I was really on the fence for this pasta for like a week for the finalized rating. I know some of you really wanted me to rip apart this pasta, but honestly, I think it's FRESH PASTA!!! A light one to be fair.

I know you're reading this, sparklingdemon, and you're feeling one of the three emotions: excited because your original story got the good rating, surprised because you probably weren't expect the good rating for this version, or disappointed because you aren't proud of this version and you wanted me to tear it apart. Now, I can understand if you still don't think this is your best work and that you're more proud of the remake, sparklingdemon. I still got to do a full-depth analysis on the remake and it look very promising judging by the amount of visual work and representation that was put into it to enhance the experience. I'm sure the remake is going to be better without a doubt. The question is, how better is it compared to this version?

Now, I would argue that some of the previous pastas I have reviewed do have more complex plots but they didn't get the good rating like Abandon Lonliness and Strangled Red. Yes, I agree that those had more complex plots. Abandon Lonliness was great with its symbolism in trying to warn the player on not getting themselves cursed, but it was too repetitive and predictable in some areas. Strangled Red had an interesting concept of Stephen having a great life only to lose everything and eventually become insane and desperate after losing their beloved Charizard, Miki, but it had so many holes that weren't clarified and could've been fixed by addressing them and it wasn't consistent in a couple areas. There were a couple stretches with how they got the cartridge and I felt it had a great build up to a confusing pay-off. Sometimes I feel like a simpler plot that can follow a good line can be better than a complex one that struggle to figure out which way to go.
I just feel like there’s more good things about this pasta than some may claim. So, yeah, I think it’s a fresh pasta. May change that rating, but I don’t know. I feel like it was great with the creepy factors with the psychological horror involving Skye near the end, the build up was kind of clever especially with the CHECK PLATINUM idea, and it didn’t do some things that would’ve ruined it completely. It was fairly well-paced, maybe too fast paced in a couple areas. Overall, I thought it was a decently good pasta. Not the best, but far from the worst.

Skye belongs to sparklingdemon. Thank you for having me review this and I'm looking forward to reviewing the remake as well.

My rankings for the reviewed PokéPastas so far (from best to worst, top to bottom):
1. Easter Egg - Snow on Mt. Silver – Fresh
2. La Condena de Milotic – Fresh
3. Hypno's Lullaby – Fresh
4. Forever Mine (Original) - Fresh
5. Strangled Red – Dried
6. Zombreon - Dried
7. Lost Silver – Dried
8. Creepy Black – Dried
9. Abandon Lonliness - Spoiled
10. Pokémon Dead Channel – Spoiled
11. Prevention of Evolution (Original) - Spoiled
12. Milotic's Revenge – Spoiled

4 Fresh Pastas | 4 Dried Pastas | 4 Spoiled Pastas

Trust me, I did not rigged it to be like this. But, we have another tie again.

Since I'm going to push the remake of forever mine to the one after the next review, next time on the reviewz is... OH GOD NO. I didn't want to review this one at first but I think it's a great example that would answer the question on when a creepypasta can be creepy in the WRONG kind of way... Like with the Snow on Mt. Silver review cover art, I will display a trigger warning. I want to be considerate for you guys as much as possible. >-<

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Pasta Name: Forever Mine (Original)

Publish Date: February 25, 2011

Synopsis: A Shaymin named Skye becomes insane after her release and desperately attempts to win her trainer’s love back with becoming her sky forme after failing to obtain the Garcidea.

Fun Fact: The action replay codes used in this pasta like Pokémon modifier one that involves having master balls equal to the Pokédex number of the Pokémon are legit and work, as ridiculous as it may sound.

Highlight: C H E C K P L A T I N U M

Quote: “I told you that you’d be mine forever.” -Skye

Oh boy, another requested pasta and it's another "Pokémon goes insane from conflicts with their trainer" type of story. This review took a lot of time to make, not gonna lie.

Now as requested by sparklingdemon, please check out their remake involving anything with Skye the Shaymin or Forever Mine. They are more proud of that version compared to this version: Forever Mine Remake

As promised, I will review the remake too. They will be a separate review because they are very different from one another and DeviantArt also has a kb limit for their descriptions. As for the original, well people including sparklingdemon, want me to rip it apart which is what we're doing today. However, I still would like to try to be as constructive and fair as possible.

Before reading this pasta after a long time, some people have said this pasta is if you mixed Pokémon Dead Channel and Prevention of Evolution together and added in a Shaymin.

1- I can't quite agree with that (which I will explain in my further thoughts proportion on why), even though there are some similarities to them.
2 - As far as I'm aware, Forever Mine came before Prevention of Evolution. So if anything, EEeEE would be ripping off of Skye if there's any similarities, but hey, some people don't like having their characters with others. So, let's be a bit considerate to the authors of these pastas. Not to mention, the idea of a story could repeat on others without knowing each other
3 - Unoriginal doesn't always mean it's bad. There are plenty of franchises out there who aren't bad and could arguably be better than the originals using their concepts. For example, there was a game called Hydline which came out before Legend of Zelda, and they both have a lot in common, but of course, Legend of Zelda was more successful.

So the story starts off like this...
"I just wanted a Sky Forme Shaymin... I didn't want this..." So our protagonist has this desire to have a sky forme Shaymin and I had the same exact desire at one point too. They weren't a dedicated Pokémon fan at the time, so the event for the sky forme event passed on by without their knowledge. I hate how some legendaries had events with due dates too like the Victini event - the deadline passed for me because I had no internet connection at the time.

Anyway, the protagonist was devastated for a sky forme Shaymin and they had to get Action Replay as their only chance to get them. For those who don't know what an Action Replay is (even though I have talked about them in other reviews like Prevention of Evolution) it's a cheat device where you can put codes in to modify the game for you whether to make things easier or sometimes harder for you. I had one back then too and they are fun to use, but sometimes they may be game-breaking as in making the game too easy for you.

The author didn't bothered to look for a super long code online to get Oak's letter, so they used the Pokémon modifier code. Which is going to bite them in the bottom eventually for you'll find out later. I've been there before too.

Lemme explain: the Pokémon Modifier code that they are using would give you 493 Master Balls if you held down a certain button while walking through wild Pokémon spawns you can get a certain Pokémon to spawn based on their Pokédex number which connects to the number of master balls you have. I have tried this exact same code before and believe it or not, it works as random and ridiculous as it may sound. I mean the code had to have some variable to match up and grab with the National Pokédex entry number. So, it gave 493 Master Balls because Sinnoh had 493 Pokémon in the Pokédex at the time.

So the protagonist dropped one of the Master Balls to have 492 for Shaymin's Pokédex number and a wild Shaymin appeared in the tall grass. The protagonist was thrilled about this and used one of the Master Balls to catch the wild Shaymin and obviously the Shaymin was caught with no problem. The protagonist nicknamed them Skye after their sky forme Shaymin plushie. Remember that detail right there. I'm surprised they didn't just spawn an Arceus and use a Master Ball. They'd have one less either way.

The player also had the "learn tm/hm" code on. Another code that I have also used before and it worked. You know how it tells you which Pokémon can or can't learn the tm you have selected? Well with that code on, all of the Pokémon will say "can learn" no matter what. So basically it makes all TMs compatible with all Pokémon.

So with the "learn any tm/hm move" code activated, they want to teach Skye how to fly. Hold on let me do some quick research because I thought Shaymin could learn fly anyway. The only flying type move Shaymin could learn (keep in mind, this is platinum we're talking about) is air slash
and that's only for their sky forme too. Also, teaching the move Fly to Shaymin is more fitting than when I taught Hail to my Bronzong back at the time. I don't what I was thinking either.

The move fly with for their sky forme, and so they flew to Floarama Town to go obtain the Gracidea Flower. Surprised, the NPC wouldn't give the gracidea flower to the player. They were frustrated by this sight.
Actually, as what I remembered and experience, you have to go through the event process with Oak's letter or had to get it as a mystery gift from Game Freak to obtain the Gracidea Flower. I did the same thing a couple years ago and the NPC wouldn't give the Gracidea flower to me because Shaymin was modified in instead of being an event Pokémon. So, I'll give points to the author because this can legit happen to you in the actual game.

The protagonist was disappointed and stared in agony at the screen. The NPC wouldn't give the one item to achieve Skye's sky forme and just repeated their dialogue over and over again. The player opened up the Shaymin's summary and murmured "I'm sorry, Skye. I tried." at the screen even though she couldn't hear them. Heh. At least they acknowledge that the Pokémon in the game aren't real a lot earlier in the story.

A few months later, the protagonist got bored after beating the game, grew attracted to Heart Gold. They dug out platinum and started playing it again and thought about resetting the game. They had a bunch of good Pokémon that they didn't want to go to waste on platinum though, including the legendaries.

With their sister's DS, they traded with their Heart Gold game and transfer all of them from Platinum to Heart Gold. They'll be safe there, so they did so that. They transferred Skye as well.

But didn't you use action replay? I don't know which version you used but I'm pretty sure Heart Gold and Platinum codes worked on the same version especially since the games were like a year apart from one another. So, why couldn't you use the Pokémon modifier code for Heart Gold? Well, I guess IV's and stuff would matter. Plus, there are some Pokémon that you can never release no matter what. But, I think I spoke a bit too soon for this next coming part.

They just got finished with using Celebi in order to fight Giovanni.

I was going to ask if they did the event on time since I think you need the event Celebi to get the event to work, but it turns out Celebi was cheated in. This is a nitpick, but why didn't you use the code for the Shaymin event in Platinum? So, you typed up the code for the Celebi but not for Shaymin? I know how much of a pain it is to type out those codes though and you have to make sure they were typed in correctly too.

I know sometimes action replays comes with default codes to start off with but I don't recall the Event Pokémon being one of the them. As far as I'm aware, the events only work if you get the exact mystery gift or retrieve Event Pokémon because last time I checked, it tracks this kind of stuff going by the ID of the Pokémon. Yeah, you all probably thought the ID numbers your Pokémon had were useless? They actually have a purpose like for these. I know I'm probably looking too deep into this.

Not many of the legendaries they had were legit and were cheated into the game, so they released most of them.

The protagonist noticed there were two Shaymins in the PC. They decided to release one of them them and this textbox popped up: "Skye was released. Skye sadly said farewell." The protagonist was shocked by this at first, questioning if it was possible for it to say that in the games. they shrugged it off though and turned off the game, they needed sleep.

I've had people on discord comment on how stupid it was to release legendaries and the other Shaymin especially if they had an emotional attachment to them. To be fair, I think they were just cleaning out their PC and felt bad about cheating them in. It's like cheating in a shiny, it's fun but ruins the adventure in putting effort in finding a shiny. But I can agree that out of context, it does seem like the protagonist just released a Pokémon they had a bit of a bond with. But, in fairness, there were TWO of them to be exact, and having two Shaymins could make you since like a cheater, so I can kind of understand where the protagonist.

So there is a bit of a purpose for the other Shaymin or at least I think there's a purpose of the other Shaymin being there. By the way, the release happened on Heart Gold.

The next day, they played Heart Gold and checked their pc and was given a surprised by what they found in the PC. There were 13 sky forme Shaymin inside the PC. They questioned on if Shaymin can be in sky forme while inside the PC.
I tested this out recently and I can confirm that they can still be in their sky forme within the PC, but it depends on the time of day though.

The protagonist looked at the summary, the first Shaymin was named "C". They looked terrified and their cry was quiet too. They went to the next Shaymin named "H" and their cry was louder this time and their ears were bleeding as well. The player went to the Shaymin after and they were named "E" and they noticed they were a bit bloodier and their skin was peeling off to expose muscles. The protagonist noticed as they kept moving through the Shaymins, they got gorier and more gruesome with each one. it escalated with skin tearing away and muscles exposed, and limbs being torn off.
OH NO! IT'S THE RETURN OF THE VIBES OF THE SCALELESS PURPLE MAGIKARP FROM POKEMON DEAD CHANNEL! RUN!
By the time they got to the last Shaymin named "M", it was a gory mess of a sky forme Shaymin with its front legs, tail, and ears missing. They looked at the letters again and they noticed it spelled "C H E C K P L A T I N U M".

Now as cheesy as this is, I kind of like this part because I think the part with the player checking through the summaries of the Shaymins with the sprites getting worse and worse to spell out a word with the names is kind of well done. I think it handled blood and gore a lot better than a lot of other gaming creepypastas. Plus, it has a bit of a purpose to it which you will find out later on.

The player turned off the power and hid their DSi underneath their bed. They woke up at night at 2 am and couldn't go back to sleep, they went to turn on their lights so they could see only to trip on something soft on the way there.
I hope you didn't wake up any family after that trip because falls from trips can be loud.

They turned on the light and saw that it was just their LAND forme Shaymin plushie. Hold up! Wasn't it a sky forme plushie like it was earlier in the story? or is this a completely different plushie? I wouldn't be surprised if it was a different plush because I'm sure some people have plushies of different forms of the same Pokémon like the gigantamax, holiday-themed, and mega evolution plushies for example.

But OH NO, the Shaymin plushie came to live with bloody sky forme Shaymin ears, tail, and front legs and killed our protagonist. Just kidding, that doesn't actually happen... thankfully...

But what really happened was the protagonist murmured "Get back in the Pokémon pile where you belong!" and throw the Shaymin plush at their large pile of Pokémon plushies. You have a large pile of Pokémon plushies? Lucky you. Also, are they on the floor? My dogs or cats would've used them as chew toys if they were at that reach. Not deducting point for this, by the way. Just a comment.

So, the protagonist went to play on platinum because they wanted to CHECK PLATINUM and for some reason, they started out on Seabreak Path even though they recalled saving at a Pokémon Center... The protagonist went to check on their Platinum version because of the message of the 13 Shaymins spelling out CHECK PLATINUM. They started out on Seabreak Path even though they recalled saving at a Pokémon Center. it was the opening path to the flower garden, the protagonist tried to turn back but the ways out were blocked off and they couldn't leave the place as if their character walked through the walls with a cheat code. They had no choice but to walk up the path instead.

As they walked up the path to go to the flower garden (which is a very long path in the actual game) the player noticed that the water was escalating with a red tint the more they walked up the path. Oh, here we go! The path also slowly started to turn red as well. They had no Pokémon with them either. No team, nothing.

The path and water became more and more red, eventually the player stumbled upon Pokémon organs and bones on the path, the player felt sick to their stomach but continued to proceed. Also, isn't the path covered in flowers for Flower Paradise? So, did the bones and organs replaced the flowers on the path?

When they got to the island where you meet Shaymin in the games officially, the area wasn't called Flower Paradise, it was called "???" instead. There was no surprise a Shaymin in the middle. The player interacted with them and the textbox said "I knew you would come back." a wild battle started. "Skye attacked!" No Pokémon available for the player but the game treated it as of they were in the Great Marsh.

"What will [REDACTED] throw?"

There was no mud, bait, or run options. all they could throw was Skye's Master Ball at that cursed Shaymin.

"[REDACTED] used Skye's Master Ball!"

The ball shook once, twice, three times.

"Skye was caught!"

There was no exciting music played after Skye got caught and the player opened her summary.

"Her?" I have nothing against gender identities, but isn't Shaymin considered genderless in the games? Well, I believe this involves the player doing a RP type of thing. I mean, there were times where I also have assumed genders for certain Pokémon. I can see Shaymin being gender neutral, to be honest. I have seen Cresselia as a female, Darkrai as a male, etc. I understand that gender assumptions are frowned upon in some societies, but it's something I thought I may point out. Also, fun fact, Lugia was meant to be female but the movie didn't think so, which actually made her creator depressed.

Skye's sprite was covered in blood with a sad yet angry expression.

I know some of you are like "hmmm... build up to bloody corpses and bones of Pokémon, red-colored water and ground, Pokémon felt abandoned by their owner, and the main focused Pokémon gives sad and angry expressions. That doesn't sound very familiar, right?" Like I said before, just because there's similarities doesn't always mean they are bad.

Skye still knew fly and the player tried to get her to fly somewhere else right away to get out of there. "Skye doesn't want to fly!" said the textbox.

"Come on, fly already!" the player yelled.
"Skye needs to get ready." said the textbox.
"Get ready?" the player questioned.

The menu automatically closed and Skye was in the overworld now, moving around, the screen faded to black. Textbox came back once again "Skye is ready to fly!" Screen faded back into the overworld, the player check their summary of Skye and she had pitch black eyes and red pupils with sky forme ears, front legs, and tail. The hind legs were stretched to match the height of the front legs and it looked like it hurt. The pink flower was replaced with a torn flower. A sick, twisted grin stretched across her face too. The cry had the first half being land forme's cry and the second half being the sky forme's cry. So, she would make this Cry ? That's not really that unsettling. Maybe making it a little demonic would've helped. They weren't in the Flower Paradise anymore, but in a black overworld now.

Skye: "Do you like my new look?"

Player: "No. No. I don't like it." Well, at least you're honest.

Skye started to fly around the overworld. Skye: "Seeee? I can fly now. Will you love me now?" Okay, not gonna lie, that's a bit unsettling.

"Love me?" Her new cry sounded. Wait, is the audio clip for her cry supposed to say love me? or was that the textbox saying that? Doesn't specify that.
The cry "love me?" repeated a couple of times.
It got quieter each time too.
This continued until.... "LOVE ME?" ear rape happened as the player thought they have became deaf from the loud cry of that coming from their speakers.

Skye: "Do you love me?" Yes | No options appeared.

Player: "No, I used to love you at one point, then you turned into this... thing..." They selected no.

Skye: "You're lying"

Player: "What?"

Pokémon Dead Channel: BRVR assumed the player was lying about still loving him.
Forever Mine: Skye assumed the player was lying about them no longer loving her.

You can't win either way. xD

Skye: "You still love me. You will always love me."

The psychological horror and denial I would say is the motive here even though I feel like it was a bit abrupt as I feel like the release of Skye should've happened before the 6 month time skip because it would make sense on why they would act like they abandoned them, but that's just me. I get that the whole point is supposed to be that Skye is desperate for her owner's love after releasing them. So she's trying to prove that she can fly and make herself her sky forme.

Skye: "You'll be mine forever."

Skye forgot fly and learned imprison and she used it as the screen cut to black. The game wouldn't turn back on. So, the player turn out platinum and threw it at the wall and landing into the trash can. 2 points. "I'll never be yours."

So, to take their mind off of the cursed Shaymin, they played Heart Gold. but when the game turned on, their character was standing in complete blackness. a land forme Shaymin with bloody sky forme ears, tail, and front legs was in front of their character. "I told you that you'd be mine forever."

This is where I theorized the whole thing with the other Shaymin came from, the other Shaymin that wasn't released was Skye in the Heart Gold version, while the one released went to Platinum. I don't think that was the intent of the author's part though. Plus, the part that may debunk this theory is when they wake with 13 sky forme Shaymins in their PC instead of one land forme Shaymin.

Also, out of context, this may not seem like it but when you analyze it, you realize that the sky forme Shaymins in the PC for Heart Gold with the "CHECK PLATINUM" message, the whole part of that was supposed to be where Skye got the sky forme parts from. They ripped apart another Shaymin in sky forme to get those parts. It's showing the part a visual representation on a sky forme Shaymin as it escalates into a gory mess. That's the way I see it.

One more theory I have, although I found the motive of Skye a bit abrupt, I think the reason why Skye was thought she had a bond with the player and assumed that making herself her sky forme was a priority to win her owner's love back, was because back when the player opened up the Shaymin's summary and murmured "I'm sorry, Skye. I tried." at the screen since they couldn't get the Garcidea Flower for her, Skye could actually hear that and part of this was because the DS has a microphone. Again, I'm not sure if those were your intents, sparklingdemon, and I'm probably looking too deep into them, but I think they're at least interesting. Not facts, just theories.

I still got to do a full-depth analysis of the remake. Maybe some of these thing are addressed or done in the remake.

My further thoughts:

Honestly, after analyzing it real closely and looking back to it...

It's a bit underrated.

My Audience: "Wait, what?"

Seriously. I don't see very many problems with this pasta as some of the people from Discord made it out to be. I feel like one of the main reasons why people may not like this pasta as much and got criticized is because it has similarities to Pokémon Dead Channel. I know I said that we should be considerate in not comparing pastas with one another, but I thought I might point out some of the similarities to show you guys on why people may assume that it's a copy, when it's not necessarily.

I mean, this does the whole "Pokémon goes insane from conflicts with their trainer" trope, but let me explain why I believe the pastas who follow this trope, which Forever Mine, Pokémon Dead Channel, and Prevention of Evolution execute them differently. I'm not sure if I should include Abandon Lonliness for this list since Loneliness was just trying to warn the player on what not to do with symbolism and messages from Blue's experience and that they will be cursed if they give Loneliness a bad time.

Pokémon Dead Channel: BRVR went insane because he thought his owner abandoned him and when she came back for him years later, he was both angry and sad at his owner and was showing her around with how insane he became with a showcase of dead Pokémon bodies and destroyed property. And at the end, he wanted to make his owner suffer, and a Pikachu Doll Z was somehow transferred behind the player in real life, which we could assume he will make the player suffer in real life.

Prevention of Evolution (Original): EEeEE went insane because his trainer refused to evolve him to a shiny Espeon because he needed a shiny Flareon to complete his shiny Eeveelution collection. EEeEE kills the player in-game and his team. And it ends with EEeEE's voice transferred into the speakers of the player's television.

Forever Mine: Skye went insane because her trainer released them because she assumed it was because she could've become her sky forme, so she kills and rips off parts from a sky forme Shaymin and sews them on her body out of desperation for her trainer's love. Skye doesn't attempt kill to kill the player in-game or in real life, but enforced the player in-game to be with her forever and she able to go from Platinum to Heart Gold in the end as a way of saying the player will never leave her sight ever at least in the games.

In other words, BRVR wanted to bring suffering to the player, EEeEE wanted to bring regret to the player, and Skye wanted to bring imprisonment to the player.

The three may have some similarities with their concepts but they're not exactly the same because just like I said above, their stories are executed in different ways. So, I think calling Forever Mine - Pokémon Dead Channel but with Shaymin is a bit of an exaggeration.

Another thing I feel like people are considering gaming creepypastas that have blood in them as bad, when that's not always the case.

Okay, yes, I was exactly like this in my Pokémon Dead Channel review and saying these things will make me sound like a hypocrite. In my defense, I was still warming up with reviews and pretty much saying what other people who think all creepypastas that have aged poorly would say. If I reviewed it now, I'd probably be a lot less harsh on it. I may give Pokémon Dead Channel another go someday, but not today. I feel like it would still get the Spoiled Pasta rating anyway, but we'll see when I get to its revisit.

Anyway, I think blood and gore in gaming creepypastas can work if done correctly and if it had some kind of purpose for the story. Like the blood and gore in this pasta had a bit of a purpose as a visual representation to what bound to come from Skye. Now, are blood and gore a cliché in pastas? Yes, they still are, but you got think about when the pasta came out. This pasta came out in 2011, and I would say that's the year when creepypastas really started to blow up in popularity (at least for me though since some people consider 2012 as the trending era of creepypastas, while others consider 2010 the year when creepypastas got its peak audience since they allegedly first came out in 2007). Would I now consider blood and gore for pastas that came out in 2010-2011 as clichés? Not really since clichés are often referred to as tropes that have been overdone so many times. I think a better description for that would be "poorly-aged details" because they may be fairly new and not quite overused yet, but they've aged poorly though. So, is would it really be fair to say blood and gore are clichés in 2010 and 2011? I guess it actually depends on the situation and on what you think a cliché would be and when something is considered a cliché. I mean, even before creepypastas, there were horror movies like the iconic slashers and horror books like R.L. Stein with Goosebumps. And creepypastas allegedly first came out in 4chan in the year 2007. So, if there were already horror stories even before creepypastas, would it still make blood and gore as horror considered clichés? Well, again, I think it depends on how its executed and where you the reader would draw the line for when a certain trope is considered a cliché.

Plus, some people have told me that they would argue that if you get grossed out by the blood and gore in the pasta, then the creepypasta worked with its shock values. A creepypasta can be creepy with its shock values, but again, it depends on how its executed. SPOILER: There's a pasta that I'm going to be reviewing that does shock values and tries to be creepy in the wrong kind of way (and it's going to be the very next pasta I'm going to be reviewing. No, not the remake of Forever Mine. That's going to be reviewed after this next one because I may need a break from reviewing long pastas.)

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Okay, I'm getting a bit off-topic now, so what are my other thoughts on the ORIGINAL Forever Mine? I really like the psychological horror of Skye near the end with all of her dialogue and how she was in this huge denial of her own no longer loving her, and the desperation to get her owner to love her again was really well put together. And I like how the cheat codes that were used in this pastas are legit and can work. Maybe that's just my bias because I used it as a kid and it's a bit on the nostalgia side of things. And like I said, the blood and gore were a build up to something extreme with Skye. The whole CHECK PLATINUM idea was creative and well put together. Also, now that I think about the protagonist was actually pretty smart throughout this story too with throwing away their Platinum version when it got too crazy, trying to escape the bloody Flower Garden, etc. A lot of my critiques were mostly nitpicks or just commentary/jokes.

Now there are two major problems I have with this pasta:

1 - Like I said before, I feel like there should've been a little more time and development in bonding between the protagonist and Skye, unless it all happened during the six month time skip. But, even then, I feel like if there was a bond developed within the story then it would make Skye's motive for her owner's love back more understandable.

2 - I'm kind of confused on where exactly did Skye get those sky forme Shaymin parts? I'm aware that it's made more clear on how in the remake, but in this version of the story, it can leave you a bit puzzled. I had a couple assumptions/theories on how such as they got the parts from the other Shaymin that wasn't released and that's why that Shaymin was replaced with the 13 sky forme Shaymins. The only flaw with that theory is they didn't have the Garcidea Flower, so how could that Shaymin be its sky forme without the Garcidea Flower. I was also thinking that maybe Skye killed off the actual Shaymin in their Platinum version, which would explain the bones and organs on Flower Paradise. The only problem with that theory is again, they don't hold the Garcidea Flower. As explained earlier, the flower is given to you by an NPC in Florama Town. All we really get in this version is the screen goes black and then BAM Skye has all of the parts sewed onto her. The remake does this one specific detail better.

I was really on the fence for this pasta for like a week for the finalized rating. I know some of you really wanted me to rip apart this pasta, but honestly, I think it's FRESH PASTA!!! A light one to be fair.

I know you're reading this, sparklingdemon, and you're feeling one of the three emotions: excited because your original story got the good rating, surprised because you probably weren't expect the good rating for this version, or disappointed because you aren't proud of this version and you wanted me to tear it apart. Now, I can understand if you still don't think this is your best work and that you're more proud of the remake, sparklingdemon. I still got to do a full-depth analysis on the remake and it look very promising judging by the amount of visual work and representation that was put into it to enhance the experience. I'm sure the remake is going to be better without a doubt. The question is, how better is it compared to this version?

Now, I would argue that some of the previous pastas I have reviewed do have more complex plots but they didn't get the good rating like Abandon Lonliness and Strangled Red. Yes, I agree that those had more complex plots. Abandon Lonliness was great with its symbolism in trying to warn the player on not getting themselves cursed, but it was too repetitive and predictable in some areas. Strangled Red had an interesting concept of Stephen having a great life only to lose everything and eventually become insane and desperate after losing their beloved Charizard, Miki, but it had so many holes that weren't clarified and could've been fixed by addressing them and it wasn't consistent in a couple areas. There were a couple stretches with how they got the cartridge and I felt it had a great build up to a confusing pay-off. Sometimes I feel like a simpler plot that can follow a good line can be better than a complex one that struggle to figure out which way to go.
I just feel like there’s more good things about this pasta than some may claim. So, yeah, I think it’s a fresh pasta. May change that rating, but I don’t know. I feel like it was great with the creepy factors with the psychological horror involving Skye near the end, the build up was kind of clever especially with the CHECK PLATINUM idea, and it didn’t do some things that would’ve ruined it completely. It was fairly well-paced, maybe too fast paced in a couple areas. Overall, I thought it was a decently good pasta. Not the best, but far from the worst.

Skye belongs to sparklingdemon. Thank you for having me review this and I'm looking forward to reviewing the remake as well.

My rankings for the reviewed PokéPastas so far (from best to worst, top to bottom):
1. Easter Egg - Snow on Mt. Silver – Fresh
2. La Condena de Milotic – Fresh
3. Hypno's Lullaby – Fresh
4. Forever Mine (Original) - Fresh
5. Strangled Red – Dried
6. Zombreon - Dried
7. Lost Silver – Dried
8. Creepy Black – Dried
9. Abandon Lonliness - Spoiled
10. Pokémon Dead Channel – Spoiled
11. Prevention of Evolution (Original) - Spoiled
12. Milotic's Revenge – Spoiled

4 Fresh Pastas | 4 Dried Pastas | 4 Spoiled Pastas

Trust me, I did not rigged it to be like this. But, we have another tie again.

Since I'm going to push the remake of forever mine to the one after the next review, next time on the reviewz is... OH GOD NO. I didn't want to review this one at first but I think it's a great example that would answer the question on when a creepypasta can be creepy in the WRONG kind of way... Like with the Snow on Mt. Silver review cover art, I will display a trigger warning. I want to be considerate for you guys as much as possible. >-<

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