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Pasta Name: Zorua’s Silence
Publish Date: October 11, 2011
Synopsis: A mother lost her son who never returned from the Pinwheel Forest for years until he finally came back to her but with an unusual act of behavior and appearance.
Fun Fact: The pasta is based on Zorua’s Pokédex entry from Pokémon Black.
Highlight: The concept
Quote: “Zorua - It changes into the forms of others to surprise them. Apparently, it often transforms into a silent child.” -Pokédex
Story:
It starts with a mother who lost her son named Zach, who was only 4 years old when he disappeared in the Pinwheel Forest. That is great parenting, letting your four-year-old son go to a forest all by himself unsupervised. He would‘ve had to cross that suspension bridge to get to the forest.
She searched day and night for her son for over 20 years. Her husband left her because he couldn’t stand having a wife who couldn’t seem to move on from the past. He missed Zach just as much but he clarified that they needed to move on, but the mother wasn’t having it. Literally, she let him go without making any remarks about the breakup. Okay, 20 years? That's way too much time to be spent looking for a missing child. I understand denial and desperation can be an issue with parents looking for their child, but still.
All she did was stare out of her window in the apartment of Castelia City. Her friends occasionally visited, only retrieving hushed words every once in a time from the mother. They tried to convince the mother to go anywhere else but the window, but she still refused because she thought her son would return any minute and she had to be there when it happened. Her friends were worried and defeated, but they promised to check up on her another day.
Okay, I’m sorry. I know some mothers can be very worrisome and overprotective of their children, but how can you let 20 years pass and expect your son to come back from the Pinwheel Forest after all of this time? That’s just way too extreme and I’m saying that as a child of overly protective parents too back when I lived with them.
One day, there was a knock at the door and the mother went to answer it, hoping that it was her son returning from playing at Pinwheel Forest. After answering the door, she looked down at a small child with red hair, grey skin, and a small bushy tail on the back, but he looked like her long-lost son. The Mother snatched up her son, crying, scolding, and laughing all at once. She had lost all concept of time long ago, and the fact that it had taken twenty years for her child to return and he was still very small didn't make any impact on her joy at seeing him. Her four-year-old son had returned. So, her son hasn’t aged a bit and there’s a red flag for his odd and unusual appearance, I understand the mother’s blind joy of seeing her son again after all of those years of desperation but how can you not question all of this? Also, how do you still own the apartment and feed yourself? Don’t you have bills to pay?
The mother sat “Zach” on the couch and told him to wait there while she made him a sandwich. She watched him eat while watching cartoons with all the love in the world. The sun sank below the horizon and the mother put Zach to bed, kissing him on the top of his head and telling him to have the sweetest dreams. She turned out the light and went to her bed for the first time in 20 years.
I know the mother is ecstatic about seeing her son again after 20 years apparently, but why didn’t the mother try to call her ex-husband or any of her friends to let them know that Zach came back? I know some of you are probably going to say that she probably didn’t think about doing that and that would ruin the upcoming climax of the pasta.
The mother slept soundly and woke up in a terrific mood, singing as she made breakfast for her darling child. She went to the dining room with a plate of scrambled eggs in her hands, and “Zach” was waiting for her with a wide grin on his face. Well, this can’t be good.
The mother cheerfully let “Zach” know that she made breakfast for him, but the grin on his face only widened and his bushy tail swung back and forth as mischief flared in his green eyes. I can understand having a skin condition and hair dye is a thing, but why doesn't the mother question the bushy tail at least?
The mother’s friend came by later on to check up on her. There was no response when knocking on the door. They went in to see what was wrong.
You've got quite the loyal friends you got there after being non-mobile for 20 years. Not deducting points for that though.
One of the friends, who was from Nuvema Town, had brought her young daughter, a new trainer with two Pokémon and a Pokédex. She had been thinking that maybe her the little girl could tell the mother stories of her travels and cheer her up. The gang searched her apartment, but only found a small foxlike Pokémon, who was grey, had red tufts of fur, and green eyes. A mischievous grin was carved on their face and gave them a yip. The young trainer was excited to see the new, unfamiliar Pokémon and pulled out her Pokédex to analyze the foxlike Pokémon. The automatic voice buzzed and spoke: “Zorua - It changes into the forms of others to surprise them. Apparently, it often transforms into a silent child.”
End of the Story
I do have some things to say about the “twist” at the end, but I’m going to save it for the end of my further thoughts instead.
Further Thoughts
I’m sorry, but I feel like the whole “20-year gap” ruined the pasta for me because I questioned so many things. How did the Zorua know what Zach looked like 20 years ago? And was Zorua’s plan like “Oh, I see this little boy in the Pinwheel Forest. Let’s make him disappear. Then, 20 years from me, we’re going to go to the little boy’s mother’s apartment I apparently know the address to, and on my way there, none of the bystanders are going to question why a four-year-old boy is walking alone on the streets of Castelia City which is based on New York City which explains why nobody gives a darn, and give the boy’s mother a big surprise, get some free food from me, then kill her because the plot demands it. It’s the perfect crime!” I guess the Zorua could’ve disguised as an adult on their way up to the mother’s apartment, but still.
Why would the Zorua wait so long and how does it know Zach is related to that mother? Unless the Zorua was trying to find the correct mother disguised as Zach for the past 20 years throughout the city, there would be missing posters of Zach all over Castelia City, and “Zach” would’ve been taken to the mother already. I know I’m looking way too deep into a pasta that probably wasn’t asking for much anyway, but I’ve got to wonder why it took 20 years for the climax to happen. I guess I can see from the author’s perspective, that they were trying to build up the dreadfulness and desperation of the Mother missing Zach, and that all take her concept of time away as said in the story. Instead of 20 years, I think a more reasonable and logical time gap would’ve been 20 months because I’m sure the husband and her friends would’ve moved on from the mother after a few years. It would’ve made sense on why it seemed like the Zach who was actually the Zorua hasn’t aged a bit.
Another thing that bothered me was it makes it seem like the mother was unproductive the whole 20 years. Unless, she secretly had a remote, work-at-home job, how is she paying the bills and feeding herself? One more thing, I’m not a big fan of this interpretation of Zorua’s illusion ability. I’ve seen many different interpretations of the illusion ability. I guess here, they were aiming more toward the anime’s interpretation of illusion where they are silent and sometimes they have their bushy tail sticking out accidentally if the Zorua isn’t careful. But here, it adds more by saying “Zach” has red hair and grey skin, which I think ruins the concept of illusion. Don’t get me wrong, I kind of see what the author was trying to do with the mother’s happiness of seeing her “son” blinding her from the unusual characteristics of her son’s appearance, but just look a this review’s cover art, he looks like one of the characters from “The Groovenians”. I liked Dovey’s interpretation of Zoruas’ illusion ability better with the only giveaway of the Zorua’s disguise being the eye color and sometimes, their disguise would have the same clothes they were already wearing before the illusion’s effect.
Now, I’m not saying this pasta is completely terrible because on the bright side and I’ve noticed plenty of comments saying this as well, it may not work as a creepypasta, but it does a decent job at being a sadpasta instead. I liked the concept of it, but I feel like there are a couple more things that should’ve been fixed or clarified in this pasta.
I know that entry and Zorua’s reveal were supposed to be a plot twist at the end, but I think it’s ruined because “Zach”’s unusual appearance gave away the fact it’s a Zorua. I think instead of including the grey skin, red hair, and bushy tail parts, have it be only the green eyes, the silence, and the mischievous smile to have the readers indicate that that’s the Zorua. In fact, I feel like the title already spoils the plot twist anyway. So, maybe have the title be “The Silent Child”, so the readers read the story to figure out what was going on with “Zach” and then the friends are searching the apartment to find the Zorua, which may surprise the readers who aren’t very knowledgeable on Zoruas. Then, the Pokédex entry at the end would’ve worked to give the readers a little bit of a scare to realize that is what Zoruas can do.
h boy, I really didn't want to say it, but I've realized I had so many critiques about the plot, the twist, the climax, and the execution. And it's not really that creepy either. It had a good concept, but a lackluster execution. I really didn’t want to give this story the following rating since it is a bit of an emotional story, but since we are looking at Pokémon creepypastas and I have to be as fair as possible with my ratings, I’m afraid I’ll have to say this is a SPOILED PASTA. I know, I was surprised by this conclusion as well. But if you were more surprised by the ending of this review compared to the ending of this pasta, then that does kind of prove some of my points in this review.
And I know some of you who have watched MysticUmbreon’s “The Worst Pokémon Creepypasta Ever” video will find this ironic because, in his video, he reviewed both Zorua’s Silence and The Umbreon. And he said The Umbreon was worse than Zorua’s Silence. Meanwhile, for my review series, The Umbreon got the Dried Pasta rating while Zorua’s Silence got the Spoiled Pasta rating. I agree The Umbreon is far from flawless and had its share of issues, but I just personally had more issues with Zorua’s Silence and I at least found The Umbreon to do its job of being creepy. I will say that both stories have problems with how they are written and lack clarification in some areas but do their jobs (with a different theme) when you try to infer and read between the lines on what to interpret from the stories. The Umbreon did great in being terrifying when you read between its lines while Zorua’s Silence did great in being sad when you read between its lines. I respect your opinions if you feel like it’s the other way around, but keep in mind, this is only my opinion and opinions can vary among others.
Also, one person in a Discord server pointed out how "Absol" (Reaper) took a tragic concept of losing loved ones in a similar manner and did it much better because "Absol" managed to take the idea of loved ones dying and made it creepy because of the realistic approach it took with what the world would be like if Pokémon were real while being sad because the protagonist slowly devolves themselves to a depressing lifestyle the more they lost their loved ones and even beat themselves over it, thinking it was their fault for failing to save some of his loved ones since Reaper in the story was trying to warn them about the upcoming natural disasters. The protagonist wasn't aware of how Absols were and assumed Reaper was the cause of the tragedies. I kind of like this comparisons as both stories are also based on Pokédex entries as well. One thing I personally the this could've worked with Zorua's Silence if the mother was taking a walk into the Pinwheel Forest with her son and she loses him during that forest walk and she beats herself down about it. So, she goes into this denial state where she's like "he'll return some day" to help with the emotional impact.
MOTHER 3 - CHAPTER 1 SPOILER ALERT: there's another comparison about this story with Mother 3 involving Flint searching for Claus in the canyons for 3 years. The reason why I think it works with Mother 3 is because 3 years is still a reasonable amount of time to still be looking for your lost child while 20 years is overkill. Plus, I think Mother 3 made it work because there's probably a cause of Flint's obligation to search for Claus because he lost his wife, Hinawa, as Lucas and Claus are their children. Flint's mindset was to continuously search for Claus because he didn't want to lose another family member and he vowed to take care of Lucas and Claus for Hinawa.
My rankings for the reviewed PokéPastas so far (from best to worst, top to bottom):
1. PMD: Explorers of Death (Remake) - Fresh
2. Prevention of Evolution (2020) - Fresh
3. Easter Egg - Snow on Mt. Silver – Fresh
4. Forever Mine (Remake) - Fresh
5. Absol (Reaper) - Fresh
6. La Condena de Milotic – Fresh
7. Hypno's Lullaby – Fresh
8. Forever Mine (Original) - Fresh
9. Disabled - Fresh
10. Top Percentage - Fresh
11. Strangled Red – Dried
12. Zombreon - Dried
13. Lost Silver – Dried
14. MissingNo. - Dried
15. PMD: Explorers of Death V2 - Dried
16. PMD: Explorers of Death (Original) - Dried
17. White Hand and Buried Alive - Dried
18. Pokémon Violet - Dried
19. Lavender Town Syndrome - Dried
20. Creepy Black – Dried
21. The Umbreon - Dried
22. Abandon Lonliness - Spoiled
23. Zorua's Silence - Spoiled
24. Nunca Ignores Su Llamado - Spoiled
25. Pokémon Dead Channel – Spoiled
26. Pokémon Dead Channel 2 - Spoiled
27. Prevention of Evolution (Original) - Spoiled
28. Depressing Insanity - Spoiled
29. Milotic's Revenge – Spoiled
30. Glitchy Red - Spoiled
31. Nurse Joy - Spoiled
32. Leaf Green Beta Scene - Spoiled
10 Fresh Pastas | 11 Dried Pastas | 11 Spoiled Pastas
The only downside is I still have to search for a pokepasta worse than Leaf Green Beta Scene, so I guess I’ll have to find “The Worst Pokepasta Ever” for the next and final review of 2023, that way we can finish off this year with having the number 1 pokepasta (which was formerly Easter Egg: Snow on Mt. Silver) topped off being the best pokepasta for the ranking list in 2023 while having Leaf Green Beta Scene being topped off being the worst pokepasta for the ranking list in the same year as well. Stay tuned!
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