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Published: 2009-01-23 03:36:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 1387; Favourites: 49; Downloads: 13
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Description Snowflake


I have heard snowflakes
are made by their fall,

each an icy whit unsamed
by eddies taking it unhurried

across tumbling distance
enough to pass from there

to here. Each astral arm opened
by what drives it for a while,

they take to themselves
unfamiliar vapors and glide,

making ready to be held
when at last there’s Earth to touch.
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Cibbwin [2009-11-15 00:18:49 +0000 UTC]

Some shadder on impact, while others survive for a while.

Great metaphor, my friend!

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b1gfan In reply to Cibbwin [2009-11-15 00:24:13 +0000 UTC]

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Cibbwin In reply to Cibbwin [2009-11-15 00:19:18 +0000 UTC]

hahaha... 'shatter.' Oh, I am a smart one!

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dead-now [2009-05-05 01:07:06 +0000 UTC]

You've taken a common topic and made it pleasing to dissect. I've gotten so sick of snowflake images that I could puke my own lungs. That is why I first looked at this. I had hopes trying to aid the image of a snowflake. Obviously I won't have to do that here. I applaud this natural observation.

I am uncertain, though, about the word 'unsamed'. Is that an intentional, inventive use, or something else that it shouldn't be? As it is right now, I can only guess as to its meaning.

This was good stuff.

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b1gfan In reply to dead-now [2009-05-07 15:35:12 +0000 UTC]

I am very happy to have offered up a piece that does not fall entirely into expectations. That is a kind of praise that one will never tire of hearing.

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dead-now In reply to b1gfan [2009-05-07 15:41:40 +0000 UTC]

I'm happy that I was able to say it.

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Melody-Hikari [2009-04-23 20:40:27 +0000 UTC]

^^ You use a lot of great/big vocabulary. XD It's actually nice to see these words for once. [It seems a lot of modern literature that I've been told to read for class lacks higher-level diction.

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b1gfan In reply to Melody-Hikari [2009-04-23 21:45:32 +0000 UTC]

Oh I like words - I like almost everything about them Which is interesting to me given that I was a late bloomer in terms of literacy (illiterate until 4th grade or so), I am an abysmal speller, and I've never had a creative writing class in my life

Go us!!

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Melody-Hikari In reply to b1gfan [2009-04-24 01:33:17 +0000 UTC]

O-O
I've been literate my entire life. D; And I was SpellBee champ/alt whenever there was one. [Couldn't make it past the city/district though.]
And I'm taking a CW right now, though the original teacher got sick so we have a sub and the course is really shoddily put together, though it could be worse. xD

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msklystron [2009-04-08 06:10:32 +0000 UTC]

Being Canadian, I'm automatically an expert on snow. It snowed yesterday and today. But there's definitely more than snowflake science in this poem. It's a metaphor for a life from birth to death, with perhaps a hint of spirituality. 'Unsaming' by a fall... put this way, will stick in my mind.

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b1gfan In reply to msklystron [2009-04-08 22:46:06 +0000 UTC]

wonderful words to read on what has proven to be kind of a crappy day! Thanks Alice

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msklystron In reply to b1gfan [2009-04-09 00:08:34 +0000 UTC]

Aw... I'm glad to be of help.

Reading your words made me feel less angry at the April snow.

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b1gfan In reply to msklystron [2009-04-10 19:29:44 +0000 UTC]

That is a wonderful thing then. As we all know April is the cruelest month...

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msklystron In reply to b1gfan [2009-04-11 14:59:29 +0000 UTC]

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Blanzeflor [2009-02-18 06:11:30 +0000 UTC]

That is a freaking great poem. The imagery, the meaning, the philosophy--not just the science, the allegory or metaphor or whatever the heck. It's amazingly awesome.

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b1gfan In reply to Blanzeflor [2009-02-18 06:22:07 +0000 UTC]

you honor me my friend, to gush so mightily over the poem and I thank you
I am happy to be a freaking poet for ya' you amazingly awesome reader you.

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phantomofregret [2009-02-17 14:47:52 +0000 UTC]

Great work, really liked

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b1gfan In reply to phantomofregret [2009-02-18 02:08:59 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I'm glad to hear that.

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mizundastood01 [2009-02-09 17:46:27 +0000 UTC]

lovely

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b1gfan In reply to mizundastood01 [2009-02-10 02:44:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank you my friend I appreciate that

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small-hope [2009-02-07 10:49:51 +0000 UTC]

Naw, nice. Science is lovely.

- S.H.

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b1gfan In reply to small-hope [2009-02-07 22:39:25 +0000 UTC]

Science is As are the readers of such little poems

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small-hope In reply to b1gfan [2009-02-08 02:22:39 +0000 UTC]



- S.H.

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b1gfan In reply to small-hope [2009-02-08 06:57:31 +0000 UTC]

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Not-a-Great-Artist [2009-02-06 19:44:03 +0000 UTC]

Now I feel guilty for being annoyed at all the snow we're getting this year.
It's a beautiful poem. I especially loved the lines: "making ready to be held
when at last there’s Earth to touch."

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b1gfan In reply to Not-a-Great-Artist [2009-02-07 03:42:02 +0000 UTC]

as we roll on into our beauty aren't we all making ready to be held I am so glad you liked it Elizabeth. I am certainly very flattered to see that you liked it well enough to it

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Not-a-Great-Artist In reply to b1gfan [2009-02-11 15:03:50 +0000 UTC]

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BlueSnowWolf [2009-01-30 23:17:23 +0000 UTC]

Nice poem ^_^.

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b1gfan In reply to BlueSnowWolf [2009-02-01 04:59:39 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Amanda You know those snowflakes All symbolic and junk

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BlueSnowWolf In reply to b1gfan [2009-02-02 03:12:20 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome ^_^. Yep ^_^.

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Riversprite [2009-01-30 09:48:10 +0000 UTC]

Good heavens, this is wonderful.

I love love love the metaphor and so beautifully executed too.


(I'm not usually this effusive you know.)

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b1gfan In reply to Riversprite [2009-02-01 05:04:32 +0000 UTC]

Well, I want you to know that I am very appreciative of your effusive praise and honored to have produced a little something that could draw you so far out of your norm Thank you Claire

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Fieckenrabe [2009-01-29 15:20:50 +0000 UTC]

Nice structure!

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b1gfan In reply to Fieckenrabe [2009-01-30 03:35:12 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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pseudometry [2009-01-28 01:12:22 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant concept. The forming of a snowflake. One of the best concepts I've seen.
Also, the form and flow of this really seems to match that of a snowflake, tumbling through eddies, being whittled into a singular shape.

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b1gfan In reply to pseudometry [2009-01-28 04:28:59 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Jamie - I am really glad you enjoyed it. I am really pleased to hear that the flow matches well with the content for you in that I was hoping to create an eddying/tumbling sort of rhythm to it all (without ruining the readability of course)

Thank you very much for the also

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pseudometry In reply to b1gfan [2009-01-29 05:25:30 +0000 UTC]

Yes, a difficult task sometimes, to do something so deliberate with form without it interfering with content.

But you succeeded marvelously.

My pleasure Dave

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b1gfan In reply to pseudometry [2009-01-29 06:11:57 +0000 UTC]

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AM-Bang-a-Rang [2009-01-27 16:19:14 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful.

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b1gfan In reply to AM-Bang-a-Rang [2009-01-27 18:31:53 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it Alan

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marije5chip [2009-01-26 21:20:30 +0000 UTC]

As always, ofcourse, it's amazing. I really love those short poems of yours.
Can't even describe them

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b1gfan In reply to marije5chip [2009-01-27 06:41:29 +0000 UTC]

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beramonde [2009-01-26 14:20:31 +0000 UTC]

It's a bit sad that they are at their best at the point closest to their "death", when they fall, but I suppose the beautiful thing about it is that they fully existed even for a moment.

Yeah, it's just like living sometimes.

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b1gfan In reply to beramonde [2009-01-27 06:41:17 +0000 UTC]

too much so even but that's what I was thinking

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AlwaysAnUnquietMind [2009-01-26 00:41:54 +0000 UTC]

so poignant ...

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ColonelFitz [2009-01-25 22:36:57 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful. Snowflakes and the poem.

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ejectionletter [2009-01-25 19:08:43 +0000 UTC]

mm, i want to see a snowflake.

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b1gfan In reply to ejectionletter [2009-01-25 21:45:55 +0000 UTC]

I most certainly want one to be seen

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Gleamchaser [2009-01-25 02:09:54 +0000 UTC]

Thank goodness for NPR! I like this image. It's meditative.

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b1gfan In reply to Gleamchaser [2009-01-25 02:57:45 +0000 UTC]

I enjoy NPR no end - though I'll be quick to admit that sometimes it's just info-porn and I'm just getting a rush off of the new knowing...ya' know

I am very pleased you like the image though. I really does seem like snowflakes are made just as we live, taking our shape until we are ready to be held (which of course is the bittersweet moment when we also start to melt most quickly)

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