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BCRich40 β Improving Skills - Part 17
Published: 2012-12-07 14:17:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 48146; Favourites: 387; Downloads: 621
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I got a lot to say about this part. I don't even know where to began.I'm a bit disappointed. I waited so long this part, but it turned out worse than I wanted. Some of the panels look fine, and some of them look horrible! I had serious problems with Dash's expressions. I just didn't get them right, until it was too late. I have too much to say!
At least I learned something. A lot actually, and that's the point of the whole series! I know what I'm doing wrong, and I know how to make things better. There's a few things that I don't get yet, but I just need more time to learn... So you don't need to point out visually "wrong" things. I'm aware of them already.
There's always something you could point out though...
There's probably a tons of grammar mistakes, so please point them out. I'll fix them soon as possible. I ask you to send corrections in note form for me, so there won't be a huge wall of text in comment section. You can point out small things like typos in comments though. And please, remember to tell me why the sentences are wrong. It helps me to improve my English skills.
Enjoy!
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Damn I was hoping she'd be asexual.Β
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And Rainbow Dash is a walking gay pride flag... ThatΒ΄s why Dash an Twilight make a so good match xD
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And Pinkie is a pansexual flag.
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OMG xDDDD
Well, Pinkie loves everybody xD
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Huh. She really is.
You learn something every day. Thank you, internet person!
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nice shampoo name (mane & tail)
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considering its a reference to "Blades of Glory"
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*punches you and you go flying* KO
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Well Twilight,you are the colors of the bisexual flag right?
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I don't really ship any MLP characters but this is cute!!
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I would be nice if you would increase the size so it is easier to read.
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Um... Click the image to zoom in? There shouldn't be any problems with image/font size.
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Won't workβ¦at least on an iPod
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Twi's face in next to last panel = priceless.
Also, wing boner.
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SUPER-ULTRA-TRIPLE-BYPASS-OMEGA-NEGA-BANANORAMA-WINGBONAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!
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if deviantart had like buttons for the comments, I would definetly click it...
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loved the part where RD gets wingboner seeing wet twilight so cute and funny
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A human useing famous ponies for drawing and shipping experiment...nawwww >
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I couldn't help but 
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I'm so in love with the last panel!
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I'm not a huge TwiDash fan... but I really want to read this from the beginning.
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you know i myself don't see the what's wrong everything looks realy cool. hey and was the shampoo called "mane and tail" becouse of "head and shoulders"???
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Umm is it me or is Breakfest right or that Breakfast in first panel?
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Γh... Nyt en ihan ymmΓ€rtΓ€nyt. Jos tarkoitit, ettΓ€ ensimmΓ€isessΓ€ ruudussa on kirjoitusvirhe, niin en kyllΓ€ huomaa.
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trololol, Dash will help remaking the world the way she like it.
Oh and by the way hands.
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That last panel is great. Their expressions are just perfect.
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OK, this Comic is now one of my favourites and I will follow it until it dies! ^.^
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If were human enough for them, theyll give us hands! lol made my week
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Your sexual orientation doesn't matter, Twilight.
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All love is good love.
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So seeing Twilight dripping wet gives Rainbow Dash a wing boner?
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Fantastic, really. But maybe Twi's horn is just a bit small.
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Yes, the horn is a bit small in some panels. I'm aware of that.
...And thank you!
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It's not the length what matters most, it is how you use it... and she can teleport just fine, but should only do it if she is totally sober.
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As awesome as always
And your underwater-effect is stunning
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These comics have been AMAZING, you really have a creative mind, and amazing adaptive skills in art :3 keep up the good art, and never forget.
You can go nowhere but UP
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I am absolutely loving these comics. If that position for editor is still open I'd love to take it. just email me at rockosdogspunky@gmail.com. If the position has been filled, that's fine, but it would be nice to get these emailed. I can't wait for the next one!
I'm probably going to get emailed a bunch of junk now. Oh well, if I get the job, it will be worth it!
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ah, another thing. Work on your engrish a bit XD A few lines of dialogue are pretty awkward.
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