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BCRich40 — Improving Skills - Part 17
Published: 2012-12-07 14:17:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 48144; Favourites: 387; Downloads: 621
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I got a lot to say about this part. I don't even know where to began.I'm a bit disappointed. I waited so long this part, but it turned out worse than I wanted. Some of the panels look fine, and some of them look horrible! I had serious problems with Dash's expressions. I just didn't get them right, until it was too late. I have too much to say!
At least I learned something. A lot actually, and that's the point of the whole series! I know what I'm doing wrong, and I know how to make things better. There's a few things that I don't get yet, but I just need more time to learn... So you don't need to point out visually "wrong" things. I'm aware of them already.
There's always something you could point out though...
There's probably a tons of grammar mistakes, so please point them out. I'll fix them soon as possible. I ask you to send corrections in note form for me, so there won't be a huge wall of text in comment section. You can point out small things like typos in comments though. And please, remember to tell me why the sentences are wrong. It helps me to improve my English skills.
Enjoy!
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Oh, you'll see a lot more awkward dialogue in the future. It's not the easiest thing to learn English at this point of my life.
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understandable. but if you knew someone who was fluent in english (preferably if it was their native language) and just get them to rephrase it so it sounded more natural, it would probably be a wise investment. (I'd totally be willing to do it 
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As always you delivered a great comic.
The story so far is amazing. From what i can tell the Art is getting more and more defined and personal. great job
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There's shampoo in that toothpaste tube!
Or maybe it's toothpaste in that shampoo bottle.
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dude, dont worry about it! your improving so much! Keep at it.
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I would be up to the challenge of pre-reading your comic. I know how frustrating grammar mistakes can be, being a comic writer myself.
Let me know if I'm chosen or not! Keep up the awesome work. Perseverance is half the battle.
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Another volunteer? That's good to hear. It's going to be hard to decide my pre-reader, but I'll let you know when I have made my decision. I'm going to make a journal entry about the whole pre-reader-thing, so I'm probably going to announce the "winner" that way too.
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Oh, ok. I'll await your response with increasing vigour.
By the way, how many volunteers have you had? Just asking.
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I think there's eight of them at the moment.
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Oh, all right. Would you be so kind as to send me a note with the results when you decide?
Thanks.
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I have been able to see your improvements since the begginning, and I would like to say you started fantastic in your skill, and now you are simply amazing, it may come from a random fan, but I really am impressed by your work.
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Lol, that wet mane driving towards wingboner.
Lol again, the ending.
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dono how you can inprove anymore then this ^_^
but! i do like the story and all , awesome work
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"Best friends - they will wash you up after you puked on yourself"
XD
Once I scratched and painted a wall after my friend puked on it. It's still funny when I bring up this topic to him XD
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im loving these,it really shows that if you practice and put some work into it you can do great art...i may start drawing myself at this rate,been getting inspired by alot of stuff of late.
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I really enjoyed this one. Especially the last line XD
You really are improving by leaps and bounds.
keep up the great work
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This part is so awesome. The faces of Twilight are priceless. Generally it's perfect
By the Way Rainbows mane looks so AWESOME
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masterpiece... i really love your comics
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Comparing this to how you began, you definitively improved drastically. Good job on that.
Btw, Part 16 hasn't been updated with the link to this page yet.
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Fixed. Thanks for reminding about that!
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lol Aika hyvi
But anyways, I think that the style these ponies are drawn makes 'em look kinda silly... in a good way thou'.
And shipping? Uhm... I'm OK with this.
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All of your friends are mares and you spent most of your life reading books. Of course your confused! XD
Nice job on giving Dash a wing poof Twilight. It was AWESOME like your wet mane.
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Hm, as the series continues, it gets easier and easier to hear the voice actors for Twilight and Rainbow Dash speaking through these two. Interesting~
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Loving this comic bro. Liking where it's going.
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Lol
Awesome
I think dashes expresions work well for this scene
Cant wait to see more!!!
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Panel 1: Twilight: The creator promised me a book if I managed
Panel 4: Dash: That means that Lyra and I would have to tolerate it all that time!
Panel 6: For Dash, between if and have, it should say "you" and between get and mane, it should say "your"
Panel 8: Dash's thought bubble doesn't make sense. Maybe have it say "Isn't that a shame?"
Panel 11: Twilight: I thought that washing puke off of other ponys' fur wasn't that exciting?
Panel 16: Twilight: I was just thinking, what if we never get out of here?
Panel 18: Dash: Almost as silly as Twilight last night!
I love the last panel lol xD
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Someone already pointed those out, but thanks anyway!
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i would watch the face of celestia if SHE would teleported here too ... like WHat! .. or Hehh?? °.°"
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Sent in a note of stuff I noticed. Reckon I could volunteer to pre-read as well.
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this is great. keep it up. i'm happy everytime i see this update.
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Poor ponies, they`ll never get out of there!
Why is Dash washing Twilight`s fur with "Mane & Tail" shampoo?
Drawing muzzle from the front shouldn`t be that hard. I can`t go to YouTube right now, but I think opening scene of "Read it and Weap it" should show muzzle from the front when pony is looking upwards and the ending of "B.B.B.F.F." shows the entire pony (Twilight) turning 180 degrees. That should help, I guess.
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It's difficult to explain what I'm trying to do. I'm not trying to draw ponies exactly like in the show anymore. I want them to be more 3D or something like that. I'll try to explain things better in my upcoming journal entry today. I have too much to say about this part.
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Don't know how to feel about it... I don't like Twidash(not a bat-shit crazy hater neither) but I love the way you picture it. And I lol'd at that last panel
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Really fun comic, thank you so much for posting it.
I've also sent you a note as you requested with a few minor things. Hope it helps.
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I'm up for pre-reading, if you're interested.
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"Don't bring her here! She stinks!" hahaha
And that last panel... <3
I really enjoy your art, keep working
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awesome comic.
lets hope the "creator" keeps them there a little longer :3
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Hahahahahaha! These are hilarious but that last panel. That's just an amazing line to go out on haha!
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