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Published: 2018-04-04 03:26:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 368; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 0
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Edit: Changed layout things and added more panels!Looking for composition critique on this piece! Only looking for constructive criticism thank you!
Bagbean are a closed species by griffsnuff
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First off! Comic resource link !! www.makingcomics.com/
Second: Critic moment: The first section of the comic paneling and pacing is fine, I got a little lost in the grid layout, reading up and down a bit. I'd give the gutters a more staggered look, but that may be personal preferance.
The cloth reveal panel would do good from being stretched to fit the page, give the viewer a few more seconds to fully apreciate the item that is being given. When it comes to pacing comics, leaving a panel wider will mean more seconds of viewing for the reader. If its a small panel it's more likely to be looked over quickly, which will give the viewer a faster paced read.
I'd reccomend stretching it out and moving the two aprechiative panels below.
Other than those points, I like the overall art of the piece and tbh the pacing is fairly decent, with the build-up and the reveal <3
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Hello, I made some changes and would love if you could take another look, thank you!
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Thank you very much for the link! As for the longer panels on the scarf I'll work those in and move the two smaller panels. Thanks again!
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Oh gosh! Sorry I didn't come back to this! <3 I liked the changes you made btw it looks good ^v^ '' again sorry, I took a bit getting back o/
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