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CloudNumber8 — I'm Really Not Okay
Published: 2012-06-06 21:33:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 18077; Favourites: 991; Downloads: 259
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When I whisper of my woesHow can anyone hear
When the din of their own lives
Is ringing in their ears
Forcing a smile as they glance
Frown as they look away
Please somebody turn around
I'm really not okay
You refuse to see the signs
A deluge of denial
Drowns out my facial features
The absence of a smile
Obliged to ask how I am
Your concerns I allay
But then again I would do
I'm really not okay
Hold back the transparent tears
A dam of repression
I'll be damned if anyone
Sees through my confession
Slowly my world unravels
Life's tapestry will fray
My pain has been tailor made
I'm really not okay
I write poems and stories
Keep a diary with me
Leave it in public places
Hoping someone will see
And tell me how they have read
Up to the present day
Hold me close and say those words
Are you really okay?
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You're very welcome.
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thank you, for describing what I have struggled to put into words.
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and thank you for reading this and giving such a nice comment
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you're welcome, i really liked it. Any time
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Thanks for the poem. We all need to hear something like that, to know that someone else gets it.
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Well written. Know that there definitely people out there that care!
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yeah
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Great job. I wish people would see through me.. :/
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yeah, i think we all do at some point.
Just keep talking until someone listen. And say it loud to them too
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as a poet myself i can say that you have earned my respect. in reality not many have. it may sound prideful but i am intensely picky about liking another poet. though i know i'm not the greatest, i hope one day to be. your inspiring. i want to go write now. <3
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that means a lot to me, thank you
Its nice to have that on dA, people inspiring each other
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Dude I feel for u.... And/or this group and the people in it. Why is this poem so homestruck? I just luv it tho and beautifully written!!!!!
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fortunately a lot of these feelings I write of are in the past
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well you're welcome and I'm glad these feelings are in the past cuz a lot of people feel them currently. What a great way to reach out to people with those feelings!
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I really like this.can totally relate to it.
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That good to hear, thank you
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No.please check out my stuff as well if you've got the time.
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very well organized and thought provocking, it's gonna stick with me a while. did you listen to the song I'm not okay? that group might have something to do with it and the band MCR not sure but it might if not, i'm just an obsessive fan on sleep deprevation 
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ah yeah, I heard the song
I made sure i gave credit in comments incase the group get angry. Perhaps i should give MCR credit incase they read it (haha)
thanks for your comment
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maybe, but there's also the fact that i've reached to point of fandom that i see MCR everywhere(rofl)
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Alright, I enjoy the emotion behind this, but I feel it is expressed in the wrong way. First of all, it's just a flat-out internal monologue. You are taking this emotion and putting it on the page, but you aren't really doing anything with it. You are just transmitting complaints to words. I think some symbolism, imagery, and literary devices would benefit.
And I know its not quite as expressive as most people enjoy, but use a dang rhyme scheme. Limitations breed creativity.
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Thanks for your comment.
As I always tell people who comment on my poems. I am a total amateur, untrained and happy to be like that. I wont deliberately break rules but also wont follow them. I will write what I want, in the way i want. If people like it, then great. If they dont then i dont really care.
Any poem i upload to dA has come out exactly how i wanted otherwise it wouldnt be here.
Having said all of that I apprieciate a lot you reading the poem and expressing your opinion to me
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I'm sure alot of people can relate to this, beautiful work.
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I can relate to this awesome poem
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oh thank you very much!
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I have no words, this is just absolutely amazing. I can relate so much to it, and its so powerfully written. Great job.
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aww glad you like it so much. I really appreciate your words
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That is an amazing poem...very emotional and it captures how I feel a lot of the time. Bravo
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Found this on the front page, woot! XD
Wow, have you ever felt this way? Because I certainly have, and I must say you really nailed it.
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