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Here's an alternative cover for the "Cursed" comic I'm working on. I'm still not sure I'm going to use it. The funny thing is I'm never entirely happy with what I produce.
What do you folks think? The logo is tentative and this will probably be colored later, if used.
Earlier version of cover:
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The comic is not finished and it's production is ongoing but it exists on Patreon here:Β www.patreon.com/mostwondrousanβ¦
There are already nine pages of the comic done.
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You could use this one for the cover and the earlier one for the first page. Is not that weird for some comics to start with first page with an illustration.
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To hell with the popularity contest. Make up your own mind.
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I like both but I think as a cover I like the original one better, though it would also make a great cover for another chapter
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I'm just wondering if the fat strokes around her chin are making a look fatter than she is supposed to be. Wouldn't finer, thinner stroke make her face prettier more feminine?
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Eh, I'm not so sure about that with respect to that particular line. On the contrary, it could possibly do the opposite of the goal you had in mind. If you reduce it too much, it could make her head seem to blend more with her neck making her seem fatter. A more distinct chin and jaw typically suggests less fat in that area.
Anyhow it looks fine to me!
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That's a very fair point about the chin lines.Β I'll see what I can do about it.
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I think the bold chin lines make her look more determined, makes her head pop.
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Zoe! Long time no see! Hugs!!!
I know you seem to prefer this one, but I personally prefer the other one. This one has too much of a classical cut for me (hero in the center, other characters on sides), while the other is less classic, the horizontal frame is beautiful, and it kinda seems more true in a way. Plus I love the detail of the bathroom
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First, I'm extremely happy to hear from you.Β I've seen so much from :iconbenglist: but I've been wondering what you've been up to.Β
I appreciate your comment on which cover you prefer.Β I think you make some great points and I'll take it into serious consideration using the original cover.
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I'm superglad to find you and my other friends here. I do that in real life too: I disappear for some time and then come back like nothing happened 
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The curse of the artist is that we are never satisfied with our own work.
Truthfully, I like the first one better, on the whole. I do love the new tital with cracked letters.
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I totally agree.Β And thank you for your honest opinion on which cover you preferred.Β It's most appreciated.
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I think this works better as a cover overall. Showing the whole cast of characters is a great choice, the black and white theme tells a lot about the story already, and the logo looks great and gives everything more meaning. I already have a sense of what the story will offer just from the few details here.Β
Being able to see the main character's face (and everything else) is really effective as well, something the other cover doesn't have. The other cover would be great as a sort of bonus page inside a published book, something at the beginning or end.
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The logo does look nice, and this does imply the supporting cast more....
The main problem I have with this is it doesn't immediately communicate the transgender premise as effectively.Β Sure, there's the "hanes for dudes" but that's not immediately obvious.Β (I suppose there's something incongruous about a girl wearing boxers anyway, but I at least didn't even think about that.)
Anyway it leaves the viewer wondering what the curse is, rather than immediately knowing "she used to be a guy".Β I suppose depending who you're marketing to that could be an advantage, but I think communicating your premise clearly wins out.
(I still think I like the back cover best, but I also think it's better as a back cover.)
On a different note, I do like the new logo.Β Simple, but meaningful.Β (Although you'll want to make sure the line doesn't stretch off the black in the final version...)
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Yet another alt-cover eh... looks like she'll have a lot of troubles to deal with there...
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"Blessed" is more like it lol, look at that Figure! Great Job Zoe
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the other cover had a lot going on with the tiles the graffety the trash can .... all the lil details that make me think WOW this artist spent for ever doing this all the easter eggs that says zoe..... but this one has its points to ... the blob things remind me of the aliens from the simpsons but scary.
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I like the contrast of black and white, and the pissed off look on the cover. I think you are going in the right direction.Β
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This one feels more like a cover to me. looking back the previous one seems more like a mid comic ad instead of a cover. I think this pairs nicely with your proposed back cover. Again the contrast is great. It still feels a bit empty but I like it.
Also, it's good to never be happy with your work. It keeps you striving to improve! Can't wait for more (as always)
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I agree, but I think that the old one may also look better as the cover for an "All in One" volume once the comic is finished.
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That's a great suggestion.
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Thanks for your thoughtful response.Β I think I prefer this one, as well.Β This version has more personality, I feel, than the older one and, you're right, it is more striking.
I'm going to have this colored along with the back cover.
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I think this is the stronger of the two cover ideas, even if the previous is situationally funny; this one not only has a fantastic sense of balance but also incorporates what I assume to be story-related elements and showcases the potential characters we'd meet inside. It has a good sense of shelf-appeal, not just because of (lovely) cleavage but because it's striking, immediately getting the message across. The new Cursed logo is simple and very effective; much more of considered design than the previous one, which had charm but felt wrong for the title of a comic. This new logo seems useable and recognizable at almost any size.
Again, I can imagine this front being spectacular in colour, especially paired with the back cover you proposed.
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Thanks for your thoughtful response.Β I think I prefer this one, as well.Β This version has more personality, I feel, than the older one and, you're right, it is more striking.
I'm going to have this colored along with the back cover.
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They make everything better.Β
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From where I stand, based on our conversations, your past work and the short summary of the story you posted earlier, I would have to say that between the two, i'd go with this one. the punchline of the first one gives a little too much away whereas this newer one leaves more to the imagination and entices a reader to read on. good work!
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Thanks!Β Plus, this one has boobage.Β
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Can't go wrong with boobage...
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Liked the first one better. Simpler and makes things more curious. The new cover is just, well, stuff and nobody knows what connects all those elements.
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I appreciate your honest opinion.Β My main concern about the original cover, besides the bothersome logo, was that it didn't seem very engaging.Β It struck me as a bit cold.Β I'll mull over which of these two covers to use and try to keep myself from starting a third one.Β
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This is excellent! the other one is a great illustration, but this one really grabs a viewer! the layout has a classic comic cover vibe to it and the central chsracter engages in such a way that if I saw this on a comic rack, I would have to pick it up. brava!
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Thanks!Β I prefer this cover over the old one, as I think this one has a more engaging composition and gives you a greater feeling of who the cast of the comic is.Β The older cover, as others have pointed out, does underline more the gender change aspect of the comic, but that cover strikes me as a bit cold and uninteresting.
Anyway, I'm pulling my hair out trying to get a good cover for the comic.Β
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well, I think you got it.
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I like the girl and her expression, but this cover doesn't tell the same story that the first one does.Β The old salt that one should not judge a book by its cover ironically shouldn't apply to book covers.Β The first one says Guy turned into a girl.Β This one says pissed off girl in her (ex) boyfriend's boxers.
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I think that's a great point and definitely a valid one.Β Still, I thought the original appeared a bit lifeless.Β Plus, the logo was too chaotic and took up too much attention from the image.Β Producing a cover for this comic has been a real hair puller for me.Β
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I think you might be trying to put too much in there.Β All these characters you have in the background are distracting from the main character.Β You did another piece a while back called "War and Death" that had a very good layout, and avoided being busy by using panels to keep the background characters restrained.Β
What I would recommend is keep the white background and the reflection aspect of the back cover idea you had.Β Make Girl Self more prominent on the page.Β Put the "Cursed" title behind her (I'm partial to the first one, but whichever you like), then add all of your Demons and Dalek Slime Guys taunting the male self on the reflection.Β After that, you can use the bathroom scene on the back cover as a smile.
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Thank you for the recommendations.Β I will duly consider them.Β Β
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Oh, I like it! But the first one has a hint of humor that this one is lacking, so I guess it depends of the overall feeling of the story!
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Thanks, Antonio!Β The first one does have more humor and a sharper point than this one.Β I've really struggled with coming up with a cover for "Cursed".Β I want the comic to look interesting and I feared the original cover may have looked a bit dull.Β Plus, the logo was too busy, I think.Β Regardless, I'm going to need to really pick a cover and just move on.Β
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another good one zoeif your can't pick a cover for this comic why not use this and the one you made before it as cover art for each chapter of the story it's done in shonen jumpΒ
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Thanks, Zeo.Β Even if I do use this for a cover, I will be using the old one in some capacity.Β I like your idea of using it as a chapter divider.
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That's Naked Snake from "Metal Gear Solid".Β
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