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Remember When...Of all the sorrow-filled stories in the world, few compare to the tale of the Fenton family. Nobody knows the true story of what happened those few months last summer, but guesses have spread like wildfire through the town of Amity Park. All we know for sure is the aftermath: lives were torn apart, families were devastated, and heroes vanished.
Who would have thought that the mind of one young teenager could change the destiny of the thousands?
One piece of evidence has surfaced, lending credence to a few of the more seemingly insane theories. A small journal managed to survive the horrible fire that consumed the Fenton's home. The words, written by the Fenton's son, sent the world into a spin.
All that remains of the family is that journal, a charred picture, and a single rose that was left on the grave of their youngest child.
A brief excerpt of the journal follows.
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I stumbled down the stairs to the kitchen, my vision blurred from the tears. I didn’t really know what was going on. I couldn’t remember what had happened. All I knew what that I had to get away from it. I couldn’t stay in my room with it anymore.
My parents were sitting at the kitchen table. They were eating supper – a supper that I had skipped out on. Mom looked up when I entered the room. “Phantom?” she asked softly, concern in her voice.
It was the sound of her voice that drew me to look up and meet her eyes. Instantly, a wave of disgust blew through me. Of course she was worried about Phantom. She didn’t know.
I blinked at her a few times, trying to clear the tears from my eyes. All I succeeded in doing was knocking them loose from my eyes and letting them trickled down my cheek. “I’m sorry,” I whispered. “I didn’t mean to…”
Mom smiled gently at me. “It’s okay.”
Dad pushed a chair out and asked me to come sit down and talk. I just shook my head. “I’m sorry,” I repeated. I turned my gaze down to the ground and watched one of my tears sparkle against the linoleum.
I felt a hand on my shoulder. Mom was looking at me strangely, her eyebrows furrowed. “What’s wrong?”
I glanced back at the stairs that led upstairs. She followed my gaze, her eyes narrowing as she contemplated what secrets the stairs might hold. I trembled slightly as I repeated the only thing I could think of to say. “I’m sorry.”
Mom had finally caught on. Her eyes widened. “Danny?”
I nodded slightly. My throat was closed up. I couldn’t talk. Not even to say those two precious words. Those two words that meant so much.
She pushed me out of the way as she raced up the stairs. Dad almost knocked me over as he followed her, his bulk making the floor rattled and creak. I stood there, in the kitchen, shimmering tears trickling down my pale cheeks as I realized what had just happened. I was alone. Again. They had left me.
They didn’t really care about Phantom. In the end, what does Phantom have over Danny? Nothing. After everything I had done, I was still in the way.
I sank to the floor and buried my face in my hands, finally giving in to the pain that was racing through me. Nobody cared. No matter what I did, I was just in the way.
Only now I could remember very clearly why it was upstairs in my room.
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Ah yes. Talk about a VERY dark and depressing story. It's written... I just don't want to post it. It's THAT depressing. It's too angsty for ME.
That's saying something. I'm the queen of angst.
hm...
Totally computer-drawn. My first attempts at the various members of the Fenton family, thus they don't look quite... right... Other than that, I'm pleased with it. I like the rose.
Leave your comments please!
--Cori
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Comments: 70
isora683 [2010-12-28 09:49:37 +0000 UTC]
... D'8 D'AWWWW! PLEASE POST THE REST OF THE FIC IF YOU HAVE IT!!!!! Sorry if that seemed intense, but I LOVE the the little excerpt, and it sounds like it would be an AMAZING read... And a beautiful pic to go with it!!!! ^_^ <3
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cordria In reply to isora683 [2010-12-31 00:32:02 +0000 UTC]
I don't, actually. I've lost it. Sorry!
-Cori
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isora683 In reply to cordria [2010-12-31 09:56:32 +0000 UTC]
I do have a question: where were all the ghosts? I mean, what happened? And was the summer camp thing just a really good coincidence, or was it connected to the ghosts' disappearances? And... I'm supposing that Danny's parents never figure it out? So many questions...
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cordria In reply to isora683 [2010-12-31 13:36:31 +0000 UTC]
So many questions... so needs to be rewritten. The ghost thing was a plot point I totally and completely just dropped. I don't know where the ghosts went, but I need to get them into the story again.
Mostly just really good coincidences, I suppose.
-Cori
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isora683 In reply to cordria [2011-01-01 21:10:09 +0000 UTC]
that's quite alright! Thank you for the link to your journal; it REALLY helped explain things! ^_^ And I suppose the ghosts could be on vacation as well, so yeah...
Well, it really made sense, nonetheless, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! ^_^
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isora683 In reply to cordria [2010-12-31 09:43:54 +0000 UTC]
I just read this fic on fanfiction.net... I managed to find it. I... yes, to avoid repetition, I am writtentempest204.
I am in shock. I suppose my greatest regret for this is not being able to read the alternate ending...
So fitting...
You write beautifully. Your piece really moved me, and I can now look at this picture in a MUCH more informed context. Please don't stop writing. Your work is amazing.
Thank you.
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cordria In reply to isora683 [2010-12-31 13:34:44 +0000 UTC]
Oh yeah... I forgot that these were the same story. Sorry!
My brain has the memory span of a goldfish cracker most days.
I sent you the link for the alternate ending. If you didn't get it, let me know, I can send it again.
Thanks.
-Cori
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isora683 In reply to cordria [2011-01-01 21:11:23 +0000 UTC]
XDDD I know how you feel! (And I love Goldfish, so it's all good! XD) Anyway, with all the amazing stories you write, it's not surprising!
I got the link, and I thank you so much for it!!! ^_^
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isora683 In reply to cordria [2010-12-31 05:00:21 +0000 UTC]
that's allright! It's an amazing piece, as it is! ^_^
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Meggi1019 [2010-07-10 19:04:39 +0000 UTC]
I love the picture, finally somebody draws his as a young kid playing the superhero. I love stuff like that. As for the story, I love that too. I am a big fan of your work. Although, I didn't quite grasp it...like what is in his room? Wait...Jazz kept a journal...so is it Jazz. Sorry, I am a bit confused hehe.
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cordria In reply to Meggi1019 [2010-07-13 23:45:07 +0000 UTC]
Thanks.
I get confused a lot too.
-Cori
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cordria In reply to HermyStar [2009-08-09 14:03:58 +0000 UTC]
If I could remember where I put it... I would.
Thanks!
-Cori
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HermyStar In reply to cordria [2009-08-09 19:36:08 +0000 UTC]
Your welcome!!! I hope you can find it!!
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disneyfreak16 [2008-06-03 03:50:22 +0000 UTC]
omg....yep, thats all i have. i absolutly love this
have you posted the rest yet?
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cordria In reply to disneyfreak16 [2008-06-03 12:14:40 +0000 UTC]
um... yes and no. Yes, as in I posted the story, but no, as in a changed it quite a bit. Most of it, actually, got changed. It's on ffn (www.fanfiction.net/~cordria) and it ended up being called... um... *can't remember* um... Hang on, I'll go look quick In the Way. I knew that. *headdesk*
-Cori
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disneyfreak16 In reply to cordria [2008-06-03 21:35:22 +0000 UTC]
oh, i will definitly read the next time im on there
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disneyfreak16 In reply to cordria [2008-06-04 03:51:01 +0000 UTC]
ok, i just read "In the way" on ff.net and all i can say is....wow. omg i had tears in my eyes as i read it. it waz so sad and heart wrenching but at the same time i absolutly loved it. i love how you made me actually be able to feel Danny's pain.
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cordria In reply to disneyfreak16 [2008-06-04 21:43:38 +0000 UTC]
*hug* Thanks so much!
-Cori
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HackberryLane [2007-10-13 00:12:53 +0000 UTC]
I can't believe I've only seen this just now! it's beautiful. Oh have you posted that story?
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cordria In reply to HackberryLane [2007-10-14 04:06:02 +0000 UTC]
... kind of. The story REALLY changed from when I posted this to when I posted the rest of the story. It turned from 'Remember When' to 'In the Way'. I'm not entirely sure how.
The bug to write THAT story, about the burning down and the losing of the Fentons is still there. Maybe someday, when I don't have anything else to do.
Thanks!
-Cori
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HackberryLane In reply to cordria [2007-10-14 15:20:05 +0000 UTC]
It sounds like an interesting story. ^_^ aw, but a picture is good by itself too.
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dreama-draws [2007-06-19 14:13:33 +0000 UTC]
i like the hair of jazz its cute, but thats a rather dark story
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cordria In reply to dreama-draws [2007-06-23 02:42:11 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, the whole story is pretty dark. But thanks for the comment!!
-Cori
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hermiethefrog [2007-03-24 02:39:06 +0000 UTC]
Wow...that's a really cool picture, and it sounds like a cool story.
I'd say post it. It can't be worse than pits, can it? That, and the only thing I understand is that Phantom might be evil and caused the fire... I'm slow on that sort of thing.
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cordria In reply to hermiethefrog [2007-03-24 04:01:03 +0000 UTC]
oooh... another vote for post. I'm going to have to get that disaster finished, huh?
Thanks for another comment! Oh... and all the favs! YEAH!
-Cori
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Shibby-One [2007-02-10 18:17:47 +0000 UTC]
Waaaah, you HAVE to post it. I'm DYING to know what happened! @_@;;
Oh, and the picture is just adorable. ^^ Danny's so cute!
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cordria In reply to Shibby-One [2007-02-10 20:56:44 +0000 UTC]
Hey! Thanks for the comment! I'm thinking about posting it... after I get it edited and stuff.
Odd question... are you the Shibby from FanFiction that just posted that odd "ticking" story about clockwork?? If you did, fantastic job. I just read it.
Anyway. Wonderful weekend!
-Cori
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Shibby-One In reply to cordria [2007-02-11 04:31:47 +0000 UTC]
Haha, random, yes I am. XD Thanks? If you see this name anywhere else on the web (exactly like this - the word "one" I will never substitute for the number) it's most likely me.
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cordria In reply to Shibby-One [2007-02-11 06:16:28 +0000 UTC]
Cool! Me too. Only, I ain't got no numbers.
-Cori
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Shibby-One In reply to cordria [2007-02-11 06:41:56 +0000 UTC]
So, are we gonna see this story, or do I have to break out the riot gear?
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cordria In reply to Shibby-One [2007-02-11 13:43:31 +0000 UTC]
Um... YES. No. Both.
It's being working on. I'm reduced to finger-picking (I broke my stupid hand) and I am currently in a "depise the keyboard" mood. So... it's being worked on SLOWLY. I'm much more in the mood to doodle since that only takes my one working hand.
It'll be up. Keep bugging me.
-Cori
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StarsOfTwilight43 [2007-02-07 13:44:25 +0000 UTC]
You HAVE to post this. I'm gonna nag you with incessant annoying PM's until you say yes. I like angsty stuff. What? Don't gimme that look!
I love how this turned out. The Fentons are all happy and smiling! And Danny's "cape" is cute.
And the rose is pure awesome!!!
Could you please please please teach me how to do that darned backgrounds? T3T They plain refuse to be drawn by my hands.. XD
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cordria In reply to StarsOfTwilight43 [2007-02-07 23:46:20 +0000 UTC]
Another vote for posting it... hm...
That settles it. Enough people have asked for it.
I'll post it. *sigh*
Gimme a coupla days to edit and junk like that - but go ahead and bug me if I don't get it up by... maybe the end of the weekend?
Backgrounds are tough, very hard. All I can say is to practice. I copy backgrounds from other people (recreate - not COPY copy) to practice. Maybe that'll work for ya.
Anyway. Thanks for the comment!
--Cori
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StarsOfTwilight43 In reply to cordria [2007-02-08 02:25:17 +0000 UTC]
YEEEESS!!!! Cori's posting it!!!! 'does the victory(?) dance'
Thanks for the tip on BG's. I'll try referencing from others and remeber to practice a lot...
I just noticed that this pic's category is Manga/Anime. I'm not sure how exactly categorization works in dA yet, but most artists seem to be putting their (digital) DP fan art under the 'Digital Media --> Drawings --> Fan Art' category... 'shrugs'
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cordria In reply to StarsOfTwilight43 [2007-02-08 04:00:14 +0000 UTC]
huh.
I have no idea where they are supposed to go...
I just picked one the first time through and have kept picking the same one.
THanks for the heads-up!
-Cori
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