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EvilpixieA — Intrigue Lost
Published: 2011-08-21 11:50:38 +0000 UTC; Views: 381; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 4
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Poison gnaws stomach's edge. Life breaks.Related content
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I like the diction that you've used and how you have phrased things, though ... I can't sense the urgency at the moment. o.O
I just feel as if things are building up and preparing for the worst, though that could just be me.
Great stuff, either way.
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Yes, I tried to use a more casual kind of voice than I would otherwise use for this type of story; a little bit more 'I lost' rather than 'oh shit, I'm dead'. Hoped it would emphasise the 'game' that is courtly intrigue. I don't know how successful it was but that was the idea behind it.
Thanks, and I'm thrilled you liked it.
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Great poem. I'm doing a six word contest of my own. The info's in my journal. You should participate.
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Cool, I just popped over to check it out. Looks like a heap of fun, I think I might whip something up for it.
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Very interesting word choice- leaves a lot to be wondered while still leaving a prominent image in one's mind. *highfives*
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Yay! Thrilled you liked it and thanks doable for the fave. I came up with this one... suddenly but developed it slowly which is where I think my best work comes from.
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I think sometimes the best poems are the ones that spend a while fermenting in the subconscious, then suddenly explode out into words. (:
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