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FinelinersJourney of a Coin. by-nc-nd
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Description Penny's life started just like every other coin's long life: having been melted, flattened, punched and inscribed, she was finally born into the world in 1971. Along with her 1,521,666,250 sisters, Penny was introduced to a new life of travels and adventures and hardships, beginning in the bottom of a Tesco cash drawer.

It was lonely there, certainly not one of the high points of her existence: none of the other pennies were particularly verbose and the majority of them were dull, rusted and squalid. However, as one of the newest coins on top of the heap, Penny didn't have to stay there long.

On her first day on the job, she found a new home in the hands of a four-year old boy: his hands were sticky and grubby and soon both of Penny's shiny faces were thick with a mixture of soil, saliva and sugar. It was almost a relief when he set her on the counter in his kitchen, but when the child's mother came into the room and beat him violently for taking ten pence from the coin tin, Penny wished she could somehow find a way back into the boy's chubby little hands, that she could somehow comfort him. It was a small crime - so small that Penny wasn't even sure it was a crime at all - but that didn't seem to matter. Soon, the child's vile and horrid excuse for a mother kicked her son to the ground with a disgusted grunt and turned to Penny, seizing her roughly and dropping her into the tin with the other coins. Just before being released into the tin, Penny got a glimpse of a small, bruised and trembling form lying beside the stove, his wide, blue eyes glistening with tears he was too afraid to shed.

That was the last she saw of the boy.

Time passed and soon Penny was used as a contribution to a block of cheddar cheese. Back into the cash drawer, she thought wearily as she fell on top of the pile of other pennies, landing with a series of clinks and chinks of shifting bronze and copper.

Penny lost track of time during her second cash drawer epoch and supposed that there would be many more like it. Eventually, she began moving again from drawer to hand to drawer to hand - with the odd stint in tins overflowing with hundreds of other pennies - and back to drawer again. It seemed this perpetual exchange would never end. Years passed and Penny became grubbier and her shine increasingly muted. Her time as a fresh, young coin was passed. Everyday she was dropped into drawers, purses, wallets and tins where more burnished and lustrous pennies flashed their sheens in her faces.

In the odd moments where the light shone right, she was able to catch the dates on the newer coins: 1983, 1992, 2000 - 2000! It was with a sense of pride that Penny realised she had reached the second millennium. She was one of the original coins, one of the first born. These many fledglings could never say the same. Still, it was with a heavy sadness that she allowed herself to be disregarded and rejected - "Mummy, I want the shiny one - that one's all rusty!" - until finally she became resolved to her fate of drawer, purse, drawer, purse, tin, purse, drawer.

One day, many years later, however, Penny found herself in the hands of someone unexpected. He was familiar, but it was only when she saw his son - with his wide, blue eyes - that she realised who it was.

The poor boy with the grubby hands.

He was much older now: his temples were streaked with strands of silver and his face was scored with fine wrinkles, but he looked much happier than when Penny had last seen him. It could be that the joy brought by his child had overthrown any sadness in him; perhaps he no longer spoke with his violent mother; or maybe he had forgiven her and they were now reconciled. In the end, though, the reason didn't really matter at all.

The man - not a boy any longer, Penny reminded herself - had chiselled her off the pavement with the aid of a key, where she'd been trapped by a repulsive piece of chewing gum for one whole year. He flipped her over to her 'tails' side and smiled to himself, slipping her into his jacket pocket.

That night, he handed her to his little boy.

"Here, son," he said in a low and resonant voice. "Drop it into the glass."

Intrigued, the little boy took Penny between his childish fingers and held her over a glass of Cola, hesitating for a few moments before dropping her in. Suddenly, a feeling of cleanliness and purity washed over Penny as the acid in the Cola stripped away the impurities of forty years of hand-to-hand exchange. Some time later, the child reached into the glass and pulled her out, staring at her with a studious assay before beaming up at his father.

"It's clean!"

The man smiled and ran Penny under cold water.

"This coin," he told his son, "is one of the first 1p coins ever created. I was only four years old when it was made - just like you."

That night, the man brought Penny into his study and over to a cabinet on the far corner, where many other coins from all countries had been cleaned and mounted on little racks. After giving Penny a little polish, he slotted her in next to a gleaming 2p coin.

There Penny remained for the next forty years until the man passed away and left his coin collection to his son, who in turn left it to his son. It seemed that Penny had finally found her purpose, and that the poor boy with the grubby hands had found his too.
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Comments: 185

TariaRobotnik [2013-09-11 20:45:40 +0000 UTC]

The very first story I ever wrote as a chld was about a coin...

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Fineliners In reply to TariaRobotnik [2014-01-29 18:25:13 +0000 UTC]

It's an interesting perspective to write from

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tmulcahy [2013-05-01 19:11:50 +0000 UTC]

Nice. I collect coins, so this resonated with me.

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Fineliners In reply to tmulcahy [2013-05-03 18:20:02 +0000 UTC]

Thanks man, glad you liked it.

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suoarski12 [2013-02-24 08:50:40 +0000 UTC]

I'm considering reviewing this for a school assignment, do you mind if I do? Thanks.

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Fineliners In reply to suoarski12 [2013-02-27 15:05:01 +0000 UTC]

I'm sorry, but I don't feel very comfortable with that! Sorry again.

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suoarski12 In reply to Fineliners [2013-02-28 09:49:59 +0000 UTC]

Thats ok.

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locodela [2012-06-14 16:05:37 +0000 UTC]

One of the sweetest little stories I've ever read! It brought tears to my eyes!

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Fineliners In reply to locodela [2012-08-04 22:53:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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locodela In reply to Fineliners [2012-08-13 14:04:18 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome!

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VladmiesserDiVisker [2012-02-03 09:29:36 +0000 UTC]

I love this It's original, it's short and it's sweet. I found myself feeling empathy for a 1p coin .__.

A DD well deserved, this was wonderful

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Fineliners In reply to VladmiesserDiVisker [2012-02-03 18:01:19 +0000 UTC]

Aww, thank you!

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PossumFan [2012-01-14 02:41:29 +0000 UTC]

Wow... Just... There are no words to how heartfelt this made me feel as I was reading it... I just adore personification. *Finds a Penny and hugs it* <'3

+ fave

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Fineliners In reply to PossumFan [2012-01-14 19:08:55 +0000 UTC]

Aww, thanks so much!

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PossumFan In reply to Fineliners [2012-01-14 21:39:08 +0000 UTC]

You are so very welcome!

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DailyLitDeviations [2012-01-13 08:03:04 +0000 UTC]

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.

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Fineliners In reply to DailyLitDeviations [2012-01-14 19:08:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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DailyLitDeviations In reply to Fineliners [2012-01-16 02:37:02 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome!

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zenvi [2011-12-01 02:04:23 +0000 UTC]

the day after I read this, at work a little boy found a penny on the ground near me and showed his mom, she told him it was old and to show it to his dad, his dad said it was a wheat penny and that he should keep it forever. it was so weird that I had just read this, it was like watching a version of this play out in real lifeXD

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Fineliners In reply to zenvi [2011-12-01 04:07:26 +0000 UTC]

I just got this ridiculous smile on my face reading this!

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nickpotz [2011-11-28 22:31:19 +0000 UTC]

DD well deserved.

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Fineliners In reply to nickpotz [2011-11-29 00:16:53 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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RawPoetry [2011-11-26 23:16:05 +0000 UTC]

This. Is. BRILLIANT!
Perhaps it's because you've touched on a subject that I so often think about; it really fascinates me to hold an old penny in my hand and think that it's been traveling this earth for forty, fifty or even sixty years. You've put a great story to this, and the personification is flawless, really makes you care about the character. Great work!

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Fineliners In reply to RawPoetry [2011-11-27 16:38:46 +0000 UTC]

I've often thought about it too! Coins more than any other object, I think, as the whole hand-to-hand exchange idea means that they've travelled a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Cassildra [2011-11-25 02:35:43 +0000 UTC]

What a lovely story! DD well deserved, I say

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Fineliners In reply to Cassildra [2011-11-25 02:51:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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FailKitten [2011-11-24 08:41:51 +0000 UTC]

Aww

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Fineliners In reply to FailKitten [2011-11-25 01:27:58 +0000 UTC]

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FailKitten In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-25 02:30:06 +0000 UTC]

<3

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Parsat [2011-11-24 08:19:31 +0000 UTC]

Simply delightful.

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Fineliners In reply to Parsat [2011-11-25 01:28:05 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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werewolf-female [2011-11-24 08:02:18 +0000 UTC]

beautiful. *warm smile* that is absolutely awesome. thank you for it. *bows*

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Fineliners In reply to werewolf-female [2011-11-25 01:28:22 +0000 UTC]

Aah, thank you!

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NigNag [2011-11-24 07:18:04 +0000 UTC]

Outstanding

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Fineliners In reply to NigNag [2011-11-25 01:28:48 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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NigNag In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-27 08:09:16 +0000 UTC]

Very welcome

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nikkilooxi [2011-11-24 06:41:11 +0000 UTC]

What a lovely story.

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Fineliners In reply to nikkilooxi [2011-11-25 01:29:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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TexasDreamer01 [2011-11-24 06:19:10 +0000 UTC]

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Fineliners In reply to TexasDreamer01 [2011-11-25 01:29:26 +0000 UTC]

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TexasDreamer01 In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-27 07:16:24 +0000 UTC]

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viridisdragon [2011-11-24 05:11:23 +0000 UTC]

I don't know. I mean, the story reads well, really well. I like the consistency, it all seems as if being told as a goodnight story, and there's the tiny little bit of detail here and there taking us further into the story without disturbing it's pace with overly descriptive blabbering. So, it's technically great.

What doesn't just quite fit is the fact that the object that changes hands is, well, money. It doesn't get along with the ending of a story, which certainly has the most emphasis. The 'everyone can find (construct? make?) their purpose' bit is followed by 'just like this penny found theirs in a collection'. Which is an interesting philosophical proposition with its symbolical metaphor, featuring Penny. Which is a coin.

I think that coins are such an obvious and widely accepted symbols of money, as in: means by witch you can buy something, them spending years on a shelf might be quite a disappointing purpose of their symbolic existence. One would imagine a coin happy if it were earned by a boy selling newspapers, who himself spent it on education; now and then the coin would get a glimpse of the boy's life as he ages, to finally being used to pay for a newspaper that says about him becoming a philanthropist. Or the coin itself getting recycled so it could serve as a piece of metal, navigating the world economic systems under any form imaginable for whatever the coin is made of to become an element of a piece of art, loosing it's 'coin-ness' early along the way.

It doesn't work for for me to the extent that disrupts me from the message of your story. I know it's not meant to be a literal comparison with human fate and sometimes we shouldn't ascribe mathematical values and logic to everything, but Penny finding herself idle in a collection instead of circulating is like people doing something which is completely against their happiness, or what they're 'meant to be' (whether they forged their destiny or not) - which is especially bugging me since coins are so prominent symbols, allegories of money that it shouldn't be overlooked.

Unless you tried to challenge the strength of this symbol and it's meaning; if so, it didn't work. But I suppose it has never been the purpose of the story, so it doesn't really matter.

Ok, sorry for this blabbering, I'm barely awake. tl;dr: I like your writing, but choosing a strong symbol of money for this metaphor doesn't quite work for me.

So yeah, I like your story

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Fineliners In reply to viridisdragon [2011-11-25 01:54:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for your very detailed comment. I can see your point, but like you said, this piece of writing was never meant to be very deep. It was written in a very short space of time for FFM (Flash Fic Month) after coming up with the idea while I was desperately trying to get to sleep. Not the best conditions for deep writing!

But yes, I appreciate your comment.

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viridisdragon In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-26 12:33:36 +0000 UTC]

Well, I'm glad you found it relevant. Keep writing, I'd really like to read more from you!

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AngelRide In reply to viridisdragon [2011-11-24 19:59:41 +0000 UTC]

That's an interesting point. I have to agree with transparent-soul to a degree here- perhaps Penny feels differently from other coins. After all, not all people are satisfied with the same thing. Maybe other coins are only happy to be circulating among the people. However, Penny is an old coin by the end of the story, and people who are old generally like to settle down. Penny might enjoy being an elderly coin serving as a reminder of the past and possibly teaching future generations of the little boys family.

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transparent-soul In reply to viridisdragon [2011-11-24 05:28:47 +0000 UTC]

Hmm, maybe the reason why Penny's purpose is to be mounted on the wall is because she was one of the first 1p's made.

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lidsworth [2011-11-24 05:02:02 +0000 UTC]

wow, i really enjoyed this story! it made my day!

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Fineliners In reply to lidsworth [2011-11-25 01:30:00 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm glad.

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ash-fall [2011-11-24 04:56:15 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing, so sure and simple, I don't think I'll ever look at a coin the same way ever again. Plus, my mother's name is Penny, so I love it even more.

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Fineliners In reply to ash-fall [2011-11-25 01:30:37 +0000 UTC]

Ahaha! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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