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FinelinersJourney of a Coin. by-nc-nd
Published: 2011-07-12 23:33:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 20607; Favourites: 301; Downloads: 52
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Description Penny's life started just like every other coin's long life: having been melted, flattened, punched and inscribed, she was finally born into the world in 1971. Along with her 1,521,666,250 sisters, Penny was introduced to a new life of travels and adventures and hardships, beginning in the bottom of a Tesco cash drawer.

It was lonely there, certainly not one of the high points of her existence: none of the other pennies were particularly verbose and the majority of them were dull, rusted and squalid. However, as one of the newest coins on top of the heap, Penny didn't have to stay there long.

On her first day on the job, she found a new home in the hands of a four-year old boy: his hands were sticky and grubby and soon both of Penny's shiny faces were thick with a mixture of soil, saliva and sugar. It was almost a relief when he set her on the counter in his kitchen, but when the child's mother came into the room and beat him violently for taking ten pence from the coin tin, Penny wished she could somehow find a way back into the boy's chubby little hands, that she could somehow comfort him. It was a small crime - so small that Penny wasn't even sure it was a crime at all - but that didn't seem to matter. Soon, the child's vile and horrid excuse for a mother kicked her son to the ground with a disgusted grunt and turned to Penny, seizing her roughly and dropping her into the tin with the other coins. Just before being released into the tin, Penny got a glimpse of a small, bruised and trembling form lying beside the stove, his wide, blue eyes glistening with tears he was too afraid to shed.

That was the last she saw of the boy.

Time passed and soon Penny was used as a contribution to a block of cheddar cheese. Back into the cash drawer, she thought wearily as she fell on top of the pile of other pennies, landing with a series of clinks and chinks of shifting bronze and copper.

Penny lost track of time during her second cash drawer epoch and supposed that there would be many more like it. Eventually, she began moving again from drawer to hand to drawer to hand - with the odd stint in tins overflowing with hundreds of other pennies - and back to drawer again. It seemed this perpetual exchange would never end. Years passed and Penny became grubbier and her shine increasingly muted. Her time as a fresh, young coin was passed. Everyday she was dropped into drawers, purses, wallets and tins where more burnished and lustrous pennies flashed their sheens in her faces.

In the odd moments where the light shone right, she was able to catch the dates on the newer coins: 1983, 1992, 2000 - 2000! It was with a sense of pride that Penny realised she had reached the second millennium. She was one of the original coins, one of the first born. These many fledglings could never say the same. Still, it was with a heavy sadness that she allowed herself to be disregarded and rejected - "Mummy, I want the shiny one - that one's all rusty!" - until finally she became resolved to her fate of drawer, purse, drawer, purse, tin, purse, drawer.

One day, many years later, however, Penny found herself in the hands of someone unexpected. He was familiar, but it was only when she saw his son - with his wide, blue eyes - that she realised who it was.

The poor boy with the grubby hands.

He was much older now: his temples were streaked with strands of silver and his face was scored with fine wrinkles, but he looked much happier than when Penny had last seen him. It could be that the joy brought by his child had overthrown any sadness in him; perhaps he no longer spoke with his violent mother; or maybe he had forgiven her and they were now reconciled. In the end, though, the reason didn't really matter at all.

The man - not a boy any longer, Penny reminded herself - had chiselled her off the pavement with the aid of a key, where she'd been trapped by a repulsive piece of chewing gum for one whole year. He flipped her over to her 'tails' side and smiled to himself, slipping her into his jacket pocket.

That night, he handed her to his little boy.

"Here, son," he said in a low and resonant voice. "Drop it into the glass."

Intrigued, the little boy took Penny between his childish fingers and held her over a glass of Cola, hesitating for a few moments before dropping her in. Suddenly, a feeling of cleanliness and purity washed over Penny as the acid in the Cola stripped away the impurities of forty years of hand-to-hand exchange. Some time later, the child reached into the glass and pulled her out, staring at her with a studious assay before beaming up at his father.

"It's clean!"

The man smiled and ran Penny under cold water.

"This coin," he told his son, "is one of the first 1p coins ever created. I was only four years old when it was made - just like you."

That night, the man brought Penny into his study and over to a cabinet on the far corner, where many other coins from all countries had been cleaned and mounted on little racks. After giving Penny a little polish, he slotted her in next to a gleaming 2p coin.

There Penny remained for the next forty years until the man passed away and left his coin collection to his son, who in turn left it to his son. It seemed that Penny had finally found her purpose, and that the poor boy with the grubby hands had found his too.
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Comments: 185

Izacchi [2011-11-24 04:49:53 +0000 UTC]

I never thought about coins like that before.
It's a very touching story~

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Fineliners In reply to Izacchi [2011-11-25 01:30:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Izacchi In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-25 03:30:31 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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Xx1NF3CKT3DxX In reply to ??? [2011-11-24 04:27:19 +0000 UTC]

this is a very good story~

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Fineliners In reply to Xx1NF3CKT3DxX [2011-11-25 01:30:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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SnowbellSeedrian In reply to ??? [2011-11-24 04:20:14 +0000 UTC]

I love this story! One day I am gonna get a coca- cola drink and put rusty pennies in it.

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Fineliners In reply to SnowbellSeedrian [2011-11-25 01:31:40 +0000 UTC]

It works! I tried it when I was little. And thank you.

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isabelle96 [2011-11-24 02:44:15 +0000 UTC]

such a cute story i like the way it ended with everybody happy ^w^

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Fineliners In reply to isabelle96 [2011-11-25 01:32:02 +0000 UTC]

I'm not usually this optimistic, but I was in a good mood that day! Thank you.

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isabelle96 In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-25 01:53:56 +0000 UTC]

your welcome >w<

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SPDUDE18 [2011-11-24 02:15:00 +0000 UTC]

I really enjoy this story. This just gave me a great idea for a poem, if you don't mind that is.

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Fineliners In reply to SPDUDE18 [2011-11-25 01:32:57 +0000 UTC]

That's okay - so long as you don't blatantly use my idea, of course! And thank you.

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ulawan5 [2011-11-24 01:20:40 +0000 UTC]

this is by far the best one of this kind of story i've seen! it focuses so much less on others of her kind, and more on the humans, it gives it a nice original touch

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Fineliners In reply to ulawan5 [2011-11-25 01:33:10 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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shinragod In reply to ??? [2011-11-24 00:26:53 +0000 UTC]

More lucky than the quarters Two-Face and that guy from 'No Country for Old Men' ended up with.
It's a fascinating story seeing an inanimate object being neglected and travellin through such a long time. You sometimes wonder about the story of something that has no real life to it.
And it works!

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Fineliners In reply to shinragod [2011-11-25 01:33:30 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad it worked! Thank you.

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purplekittykatgal In reply to ??? [2011-11-24 00:22:34 +0000 UTC]

i really like this story, i love how it all comes to a close!!
the only suggestion i would make, is that it seems that the story jumps into the action a bit to quickly

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Fineliners In reply to purplekittykatgal [2011-11-25 01:35:07 +0000 UTC]

Ah I know what you mean - originally, I wrote it for FFM (Flash Fic Month) so I didn't have much time to focus on fixing it! Thanks for your comment.

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purplekittykatgal In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-25 02:02:34 +0000 UTC]

flash fic month?
and your very welcome

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Fineliners In reply to purplekittykatgal [2011-11-25 02:34:17 +0000 UTC]

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It's every July!

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Maylar [2011-11-24 00:08:26 +0000 UTC]

Nice story...reminds me on "The Silver Shilling" by Andersen a bit

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Fineliners In reply to Maylar [2011-11-25 01:36:23 +0000 UTC]

I've never read 'The Silver Shilling'! I'll have to do that soon. Thank you!

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UmbraAtramentum [2011-11-23 23:29:35 +0000 UTC]

awwww thats so cool...such a simple idea turned into something wonderful

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Fineliners In reply to UmbraAtramentum [2011-11-25 01:36:31 +0000 UTC]

Aaah, thank you!

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UmbraAtramentum In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-25 01:39:16 +0000 UTC]

anytime enjoyable read for sure

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kristaology In reply to ??? [2011-11-23 23:23:06 +0000 UTC]

Faving because this is utter genius.

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Fineliners In reply to kristaology [2011-11-25 01:36:45 +0000 UTC]

That's high praise! Thank you very much.

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OhSoNaive In reply to ??? [2011-11-23 22:47:20 +0000 UTC]

Also, makes me think of the "Where's George?" stamps you see on one dollar bills. If you go to the Where's George site and type in the code on the bill, you can find out all the places the bill has been.

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Fineliners In reply to OhSoNaive [2011-11-25 01:37:09 +0000 UTC]

I've never heard of that! That's an awesome idea.

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OhSoNaive [2011-11-23 22:44:41 +0000 UTC]

The personification is wonderful.

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Fineliners In reply to OhSoNaive [2011-11-25 01:37:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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WontDieACopy71 [2011-11-23 22:43:50 +0000 UTC]

Well. I actually really, really enjoyed that. Honestly, I didn't expect to. No offense, I just don't usually like stories on this site as much as I loved this one! Very sweet and to the point. I really liked Penny's journey through the years and how you gave her more mature feelings as time went on. Everything was so spot-on and simple. It was quite lovely! Great job!

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Fineliners In reply to WontDieACopy71 [2011-11-25 01:37:34 +0000 UTC]

Aww, I'm glad I managed to sway you! Thanks very much.

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WontDieACopy71 In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-25 20:07:25 +0000 UTC]

Me too! And, you're very welcome!

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lewn-atic In reply to ??? [2011-11-23 22:41:02 +0000 UTC]

I never thought a story about a coin could make me cry. xD They were happy tears though. Such a moving story. <3 This definitely deserves the DD.

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Fineliners In reply to lewn-atic [2011-11-25 01:37:52 +0000 UTC]

It made you cry? That's a compliment, thank you!

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forestfairyunicorn [2011-11-23 22:19:26 +0000 UTC]

Aww, this is adorable! And I love how you used the name Penny for a penny XDD

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Fineliners In reply to forestfairyunicorn [2011-11-25 01:38:01 +0000 UTC]

I couldn't resist, ahaha. Thank you!

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forestfairyunicorn In reply to Fineliners [2011-12-02 02:26:29 +0000 UTC]

You're most welcome^-^

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MomentForLife In reply to ??? [2011-11-23 22:04:59 +0000 UTC]

That was so beautiful...I'm holding back tears! That is indeed a VERY original story, and I love everything about it! I love how you added the people into her life! Well done!

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Fineliners In reply to MomentForLife [2011-11-25 01:38:11 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much!

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MomentForLife In reply to Fineliners [2011-11-26 17:36:20 +0000 UTC]

no prob! I've showed everyone i know! this deserves to be a novel!

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Kaloyan-Alett In reply to ??? [2011-11-23 21:52:22 +0000 UTC]

This deserves more faves than you know. It's not easy to assign feelings to an inanimate object and make the audience feel for it but you pulled it off quite well with this story.

Kudos.

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Fineliners In reply to Kaloyan-Alett [2011-11-25 01:38:19 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Mazeomonic In reply to ??? [2011-11-23 20:04:09 +0000 UTC]

i was so inspired by this story, this must be one of the best short stories i have ever read. i love it!

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Fineliners In reply to Mazeomonic [2011-11-25 01:38:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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mametchi1234 [2011-11-23 19:14:29 +0000 UTC]

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Fineliners In reply to mametchi1234 [2011-11-25 01:38:31 +0000 UTC]

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Kyshone [2011-11-23 18:56:54 +0000 UTC]

This reminded me of one of the old Grimm's Fairytales that my grandfather used to tell me. It was about an old man, a young boy, and an old tin soldier. It has that whimsical feel to it that anyone can enjoy. I hope you keep writing like this and one day publish a collection of short stories. I myself am working on many stories as well. Do your best, I know you'll get there.

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Fineliners In reply to Kyshone [2011-11-25 01:39:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I've never been much of a short story writer, but I surprised myself with this one. I really enjoyed writing it. Perhaps I'll do some more short story writing!

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