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hippo2 — The Masterpiece - Part 3
Published: 2010-05-22 07:03:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 5435; Favourites: 36; Downloads: 0
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Thanks to the profits from the art sales, Hermione was able to rent a flat with a light room she could use as a studio. The gallery owner had arranged a lot of commissions for her and so, Hermione spent the next weeks fulfilling all the commissions. Slowly, Hermione was getting her life back on track. But she did not forget her friends. Tony helped her get the flat ready, and during the first weeks, he was a big help. Hermione did not forget Martha, either. Every morning, she rubbed the lamp, not to ask a wish, but to let Martha out of her prison. Martha could spend the day outside her lamp until Hermione asked her to return to her lamp. Martha even started to lead a normal life again. Often, she spend the day with her friends Hermione and Tony. It was a happy time.As time went by, Hermione showed her paintings at other exhibitions. She got more commissions, and each commission meant more money was coming. Hermione decided that she would never be evicted again. She accepted even more commissions to make sure of it.
One day, she was in a fix and had to work hard to keep to her deadline. Hermione didn’t call Tony and she even forgot to let Martha out of the lamp for a day. When she released Martha the next day, the genie was definitely angry at her.
“Why didn’t you let me out of the Lamp?” Martha complained.
“I’m sorry! I had to work hard!”
“Why did you have to? It’s not as if you are in desperate need of money!” Martha said.
“You don’t know how it is to be evicted, do you?” Hermione replied.
“No, I don’t. And you don’t know how it is to be locked inside a lamp. It would have been a matter of seconds to rub the lamp.”
Hermione looked to the ground. “I’m sorry, Martha. I just forgot. Please forgive me.”
“Alright!” the genie answered. “Maybe you shouldn’t take so many commissions?”
“I have a better idea! Martha, I wish that I didn’t have to sleep anymore!” Hermione wished.
Martha tried to intervene, but again, she was forced to fulfill the wish. She blinked. Little lights flew around Hermione’s head. Hermione felt a bit puzzled. “That’s all? I don’t feel much different.”
“Don’t worry! From now on, you won’t sleep anymore.” Martha explained.
“What does that mean!”
“You can never sleep, you will be always awake! That’s what you wished for!” Martha explained.
Thanks to her second wish, Hermione could work all night without getting tired. Soon, she had several commisions done. Martha on the other hand wasn't happy at all. Since Hermione worked all night, the genie couldn't get any sleep any more. She also witnessed a change in Hermione's behavior that really worried her.
A few days later, Martha told Hermione about her concerns:
“Hermione, I’m worried about you lately. Since you don't have to sleep anymore, all you think about is to selling paintings. If you are not careful, you’ll spend your life working and forget to live. Have you even called Tony?”.
“Tony… well…” Hermione mumbled.
“You didn’t call him, either?” Martha gasped. “Hermione! Don’t you see that he likes you? We spent so many evenings together. You must have been blind if you didn’t see how he feels for you. He’s a bit shy, yes, but he seems to be a decent and honest guy. Let alone, that he’s kind a cute. And you won’t give him a chance.”
“Listen, Martha, it’s not that easy. He’s just a friend. Nothing more! Besides, I had my own experiences with stupid boyfriends. I’m sick of it.”
“You’re not the only person.” Martha replied. “And it’s your decision. I just worry that you might miss your best chance at love.”
“You don’t have to worry about me. I like Tony as a friend. That’s all I want.”
“Alright, Hermione. Then we should call our friend now and go out with him tonight. Or he might look for new friends.” Martha handed Hermione the telephone.
TO BE CONTINUED...
Part 1: [link]
Part 2: [link]
Part 4: [link]
Part 5: [link]
Part 6 Variant A: [link]
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Part 8: [link]
This story is based on an idea by
Once more, I'd like to thank for the proof-reading.
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Comments: 17
Very nice, as always! Looking forward to see where this goes!
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Did you make the picture darker from the last time i saw it? Anyway, it seems better than before now.
Obviously, I'm looking forward to seeing the next episode written!
And thank you for the credit!
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I didn't change it since then. It's the same version I send to you. But I'm glad you like it.
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i like the development in the story. unfortunately, i have to say that the picture does not fit the section very well. when i first saw it, my impression was that hermione was keeping martha up all night, and it was getting on her nerves.
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I pondered a long time which picture I should draw. My first intention was to show the actual magic again. But then, I thought: Just some sparkles flying around Hermione's head isn't very spectacular. I already had sparkle in the last pictures.
So, I decided for a more funny picture showing the result of Hermione's wish: Hermione is working all night and keeps Martha from sleeping. Unfortunately, she can't do anything about it as she's still a slave.
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ah. that connection wasn't really made because you didn't explain it in the story.
i would have laughed just as hard if she was stuck in the lamp, shouting and banging on one of the walls, trying to get hermione's attention.
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I've added a short passage so the pictures fits better in the story. Thank you for your advice.
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that really improves on the story as well.
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That would be even better indeed!
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It's a bit difficult to realise. I would have to draw a bigger lamp in the foreground with a transparent wall. But I know from "A day at the beach - Part 2", that Martha would still be a very small figure. So, I decided against it.
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the other option would be to use the cutaway that you had martha holding a pillow against her head be an image of one of the walls and the upper half of martha showing an aggressive face, while rapidly pounding on the wall.
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That could work too. Mhhh... Maybe I'll give it a try.
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it's always worth a shot.
I also recommend trying some different drawing procedures in order to build a a distinction and variance in your art. You are skilled already, but it is just a recommendation.
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