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Invoking — Enough.
Published: 2014-08-06 15:52:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 625; Favourites: 15; Downloads: 0
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No you're not, you're just selfish.You think you're the only one that's stressed?
You're so useless, downright helpless.
Stop acting like you're so depressed.
That's enough. You've made your point.
But what if we're two sides of the same coin?
Only, you've rejected us and pretend we aren't there
Because we have trouble coping; if only you would care
For the timeline that our wrists portray
And the stories that our scars could tell
Have you nothing else to say?
Think you know depression well?
It's chemically imbalanced
We see darkness where there's light
When waking up's a challenge
And nothing is alright.
We seek comfort
That's all.
We don't need that extra push
We don't want to be forced open
We've already hit the ground.
And it left us hurt and broken.
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Your poems are too relatable...
this is brilliant
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OMGZ SO SAD U MUST BE THE SADDEST 13 YEAR OLD ON THE PLAYGROUND KIDS IN AFRIKA SHOULD SEND YOU MONEY BECAUSE YOU OBVIOUSLY HAVE IT WAY WORSE THEN THEM. 
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Sure, just link back to this poem and it's all good ouo
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okay 
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Oh, well, fuck it then, that's fine too.
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That bit you added at the bottom was just finished it beautifully. Ill try to use that somewhere. Thank you for making this.
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I love your poems. They convey such a strong message to me. Epic work
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Thank you, J! That's very kind of you
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No problem! I was only speaking the truth
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Huh. Actually saw this browsing before it showed up in my watch. Weird. Never ran into the same person twice there xD
I like this, but a word of advice: It's better to just not make something rhyme than to try and fail. Quite a few of those lines are barely half rhymes, and while that's not BAD, they don't look like half-rhymes, they look like words you tried to rhyme with and hoped no one noticed
Like I said, though, I still like it. How a poem reads is much less important than what it means, and this one means something.
On this site, that's a somewhat rare thing.
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I know exactly what you mean. I was quite conflicted; I considered revising those parts. But I didn't want to edit something I'd written on a whim with real emotion, not thought out processes. That would've ruined it for me, even if it had come out better. I know "challenge" isn't even close to being a near rhyme to "imbalanced". It's just how it came out
Thank you though, and yes, it is strange of you to stumble across me twice on the browse page x3
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While I don't believe in editing content, I usually go back after the fact and make sure that there's not glaring problems with the piece. I'll usually post a revised version in that case, which is what I'd encourage you to do. You get to keep the emotional piece, but you can also go over it and improve it.
*shrug* It works for me.
You get a watch this time, though.
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It is what it is. I'll take your suggestion and take it back to the workshop, but I'm very timid about editing pieces as well. It more often than not ruins them in my eyes. But who knows, maybe I'll find a great set of rhymes to replace it?
Thanks you
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My point moreso was that you need to go one way or another on it. If it doesn't rhyme at all, that's fine. Most of my work is in that format. But if you do try to rhyme, you have to make sure it does.
See what I mean?
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I'm just fearful of losing the impact if I go back and try to revise it in these ways.
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My friend, isn't that something you should judge after you've done revisions, not before?
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