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Published: 2017-04-21 14:56:56 +0000 UTC; Views: 5775; Favourites: 68; Downloads: 36
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Certainly more english misspelling than usual in this part, notice me and I'll made the change as soon as I can.Thanks to mustlovefrogs.deviantart.com/ and keeper-of-time-rd.deviantart.c⦠for the help.
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The trees aren't that tall. Wouldn't it be easier to just go above the canopy and fly in a straight line?
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"Compared to her, my speed's pretty pitiful!"
"I know!"
"Whaaat?!?"
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This is cool, I really like how you built up Derpy here. Great work can't wait for the next page. Also the only thing I saw which I think needs to be reworded is in panel 5.
Just like the comment before me I think it should be written "Oh, Don't you fly with Rainbow? My speed is pitiful in comparison!
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I just read it and I'm agree with him.
I just can't do it before monday.
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Okay, panel 5 needs some help.
Oh, donβt fly with Rainbow! My speed in ridiculous in comparison! Β
Doesnβt make any sense. What I think you meant was:
Oh, donβt you fly with Rainbow? My speed is pitiful in comparison!
Rhetorical questions still use a question mark when written. And while it technically works, ridiculous can be interpreted to mean faster or slowed. So a term that has a negative connotation would clarify the meaning.
Other than that, keep up the good work
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Thanks you Β for the help, I will make the change on monday.
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derpy may seem ditzy but she is a bad ass flyer when it's needed
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Exactly what I wanted to show with my interprΓ©tation of Derpy.
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I love Derpy and Scoot so much, that's why.Β
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something not good is about to happen! O_O
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I can't spoill, arghhh, my own comic.Β
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of course! I just can't wait til the next one X3
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"I am" or "I'm" still faster
"Be careful"
Sorry, I'm on my phone, hehe
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Don't worry and thank you.Β
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