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Published: 2013-05-22 21:51:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 7290; Favourites: 396; Downloads: 0
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Instagram | YoutubeI wanted to update the original file, but I guess DA won't let you change videos. : Hrm... Anyway! I've tweaked a few shots and I think the story makes more sense and has a better ending now.
Thank you, everyone, for the previous feedback! It was really helpful. I'm definitely still open to crits, but I consider this mostly finished, even with the inconsistent visual "styles". In other words, I appreciate feedback on the story, pacing, and composition, but I don't plan on shading the second part, as I don't think doing so contributes to the actual story.
Thanks.
First draft: fav.me/d5xrsmc
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That was a very good video
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I loved the fox's reaction as he read the signs beneath each of the chickens. THAT was ROFLMAO stuff.
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It's cute! If you ever need voices, I'd be happy to help!
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Amusing, and with a different kind of ending
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Just have to say that I love the idea and execution of this. In fact, my only real 'criticism' would be the fact that it isn't a full animation, and that comes only from a desire to see how good it would be
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that was such a cute story 
very nice!
if you don't mind me asking: will you animate this? 'cause it's just such a nice little story >w<
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Great work--I love the fox! I especially love his expressions of disgust when he reads the signs!
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Wait what..... I'm confused with the end of the movie a little bit.... O.o......
a bit cute though
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this is really neat! I own chickens myself and I remember seeing your draft a while back and thought it was really cute. Glad to see you've gone a little further. c:
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This is too cool! I'm a chicken nerd so I started grinning the moment I saw all the homogenized and antibiotics signs.
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Haha! It was tricky coming up with that list of words... I think they're mostly nonsense when applied to eggs. But my mom recently began working at a farm, and we were surprised to hear people actually asking for "pasteurized eggs". But... it turns out they meant "pasture-raised".
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Lol, regardless, I think this is an excellent twist on the old 'fox ransacks a chicken house'. I have to say my favorite part was the "It's not like they're fertilized." Not many people know you don't need a rooster to get eggs!
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Pretty awesome animation! What did you use to make this though?
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All done in Photoshop CS6.
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I saw the changes! ♥♥♥ The basket was a perfect touch. And that sign addition was spot-on. That ending really fit that understanding between the two. I even got a little teary and "AWWWW" when the fox got to leave with a gifted meal. C':
Really wonderful. 
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Hey, thank you for your advice before.
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No problem at all! I'm glad that my input was actually of use to you! ♥♥♥
I had to think about the family context you mention here; I'm not sure if I'm missing something now. XD From what I'm imagining you mean though, is that a hug from a random hen and random fox seems perhaps 'overly' friendly for two strangers. I could see a simple shoulder hug or warm rub/pat on the back working well though, because I myself have struck up suddenly warm and friendly conversations with older women, and they might find something I say or do endearing and they'll pat my hand or upper arm in a grandmotherly way. I could also see the hen alternatively making a comment after that of the instinct mention, saying something along the lines of, "It's hard to find a decent meal these days" being the hint of the modifications to their diets and the signs nearby.
Sorry for the late reply, btw. x)
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So, the hen just gives him the eggs because they are not fertilized? Or am I missing something?
I'm sure it's really obvious too!
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Yeah I also don't understand this.
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