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Chapter 1 End.

OH MAN YOU GUYS

I MADE IT

I FINISHED CHAPTER 1

So all you lurkers who have not been commenting, now would be a GREAT time to voice your thoughts! Or even leave a critique. :3

Thanks for sticking with me these past... what, 8 months? Wow... awesome. It's been awesome, and here's hoping you stick around for the next 50 bajillion chapters! Or maybe I'll be pretentious and start calling them "episodes". IDK.

Don't know when I'll start Chapter 2 -- I'd like to do some character art and planning before I start it, but inspiration and productivity might strike me anyway. xD; Oh well. We'll see how that goes!

Oh, yeah, speaking of chapter 2 -- contest. Who won the cameo? Let's take one more look at the entries:

[link] by ~vixenmel
[link] by *charlot-sweetie
[link] by ~maximaxx
[link] by ~Kaelita-kun
[link] by ~SkittyTails
[link] by ~BlackwaterNoble
[link] by =ELASTAS
[link] [link] [link] [link] and [link] by ~piplup25
[link] by ~metaknight-fangirl13
[link] by ~CoroQuetz
[link] and [link] by ~lightsideluc

Part of the reason this page took so long was because I had to go through all the entries and do some judging. It was really hard... the entries were all fantastic and charming. I really liked the variety I got, especially! Everyone envisions Ash differently and it was cool to see how everyone pictured him in a classroom setting.

In the end though, I've decided that the winner is...



Congratulations! While all the entries were really good, 's writing style was witty and smooth, and despite the hyperactive pacing and short attention span of the narrator it was still easy to follow the storytelling. He was able to include humor, gross humor, action, character development, a short moment of horror (Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn!) and even a dash of romance at the end and yet was able to keep it both cohesive and within the general, light-hearted attitude of the story. :3

So, good sir, either you, your OC, or your PokΓ©sona gets a short, minor cameo in chapter 2, along with ~CyMoahk 's as well (since he won the math contest on page 13).

AWESOME!

And all you guys who didn't get to enter or didn't win, don't worry, there will be other chances down the road. :3
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Comments: 238

pupusukka In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 19:21:02 +0000 UTC]

Awsum~~

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lightsideluc [2011-03-19 18:13:17 +0000 UTC]

Excuse me for a minute while I gloat...

Awww yeahhhh.
...
Okay, done.

Looking forward to chapter two! Also, could you send me a brief synopsis of it? (I'd like to know where/how/why ect. my character is going to fit in so that I can adjust accordingly)

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lilmarisa In reply to lightsideluc [2011-03-20 03:47:48 +0000 UTC]

I'll note you a little later and give you a little spoiler-free rundown :3

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lightsideluc In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-21 01:45:13 +0000 UTC]

Coolio ^_^.

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MildDestruction In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 17:18:28 +0000 UTC]

I can't wait for next chapter!

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lilmarisa In reply to MildDestruction [2011-03-20 03:46:03 +0000 UTC]

Me neither x3; but I have to work to get it, unlike you!

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MildDestruction In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-20 03:59:01 +0000 UTC]

xD We have to wait for the pages too! xP

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lilmarisa In reply to MildDestruction [2011-03-20 05:32:10 +0000 UTC]

Yup! But waiting takes no effort on your part :3

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MildDestruction In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-20 18:44:57 +0000 UTC]

Nuuu It takes a lot of effort! Waaaaaaaaaiiiitiiiiing xP

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AshuraTheCoyote In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 13:30:00 +0000 UTC]

Awesome! Love Ash's final expression!

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lilmarisa In reply to AshuraTheCoyote [2011-03-20 03:44:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! ^__^

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AshuraTheCoyote In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-20 11:30:28 +0000 UTC]

np ^^

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mihane100 [2011-03-19 12:12:18 +0000 UTC]

YAY! THE NEXT PAGE!
O_O Can't Oliver understand him? Nooooooooooooooo!!!!!!

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lilmarisa In reply to mihane100 [2011-03-20 03:44:24 +0000 UTC]

Muahahaha, indeed! >

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mihane100 In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-20 16:01:43 +0000 UTC]

I HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!

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Araboras In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 11:48:58 +0000 UTC]

HAHAH!! Some how I can't stop laughing!! At the same time I can't stop felling sorry for Ash!! xD But his face is just.. HAHAH!!! X'D
It's great that you finally were able to get this page out! I have been waiting for it!! =3
I can't wait to see how this history of yours continues!

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lilmarisa In reply to Araboras [2011-03-20 03:43:19 +0000 UTC]

Hehe, everyone's reacting to Ash's face a little differently, it seems~ As long as it stirs some emotion, I did my job!

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Araboras In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-21 09:00:35 +0000 UTC]

It sure did! You are good at your work! ^^ =3
But isn't it fun to get diffrent reactions?

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lilmarisa In reply to Araboras [2011-03-21 14:26:24 +0000 UTC]

it is! It shows I've got a big, diverse bunch of readers!

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Araboras In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-21 18:35:48 +0000 UTC]

And I'm one of them.!!. ^^ =3

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lilmarisa In reply to Araboras [2011-03-21 20:45:14 +0000 UTC]

β™₯

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charlot-sweetie [2011-03-19 11:22:14 +0000 UTC]


Loving it so far and A very nice end to chapter one. Ashchu's face in last panel is epic. Can't wait to see what happens next.

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lilmarisa In reply to charlot-sweetie [2011-03-20 03:42:39 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! ^______^ I can't wait, either! Haha~

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VampireNaomi In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 10:34:57 +0000 UTC]

This is the perfect way to end the first chapter. It's cute and ominous at the same time, and it opens the way for so many awesome developments. I just love the look on Ash's face in the last panel.

I can't wait to see the second chapter.

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lilmarisa In reply to VampireNaomi [2011-03-20 03:39:44 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! ^^ The balance is mood is just what I was going for. x3

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Foxtrot78 In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 10:25:43 +0000 UTC]

Just what I always wanted. My own little pikachu. I will name him George, and I will hug him and pet him and squeeze him and pat him... umm... or something like that.

So I'm wondering if whatever they did to Ash to mess up his human-speaking skills (after all, Meowth can talk, so it's not a matter of the vocal chords), would mess up his human-writing skills too. If they did something to the language processing centre of the brain, that'd explain it.

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lilmarisa In reply to Foxtrot78 [2011-03-20 03:38:41 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, that's generally how aphasia works. I've been trying to do it semi-realistically, and if you lose one... it's reasonable to think he lost the other, too. ;D

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sacridshadow In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 09:17:32 +0000 UTC]

"You guys sound so much cuter when you're not trying to kill me!" Nice. So nice. I love it. XD

If I were him, I'd get so frustrated, I'd start typing away at the keyboard to get my message across.

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lilmarisa In reply to sacridshadow [2011-03-20 03:33:06 +0000 UTC]

I'm sure he'll find a way to communicate somehow. ;3

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sacridshadow In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-20 21:31:14 +0000 UTC]

You mean aside from lightning bolts?

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lilmarisa In reply to sacridshadow [2011-03-21 00:18:00 +0000 UTC]

probably x3

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dayle14 [2011-03-19 08:29:09 +0000 UTC]

i was right he can't

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lilmarisa In reply to dayle14 [2011-03-20 03:19:06 +0000 UTC]

Yup, you called it! :3

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The-Angelic-one In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 08:16:46 +0000 UTC]

Ash face says, Oh shit!

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lilmarisa In reply to The-Angelic-one [2011-03-20 03:18:57 +0000 UTC]

Good way to end a chapter! ;D Nothing like a good old fashioned "Oh shit!"

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Kuranue In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 07:30:06 +0000 UTC]

TRANSLATION FAIL! lol.

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lilmarisa In reply to Kuranue [2011-03-20 03:18:41 +0000 UTC]

Indeed x3

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Kuranue In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-21 04:36:03 +0000 UTC]

X3 Holy Language Barrier BATMAN!

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Freyad-Dryden In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 07:12:59 +0000 UTC]

I'm still following. You may proceed.

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lilmarisa In reply to Freyad-Dryden [2011-03-19 15:50:52 +0000 UTC]

Good to hear it :3

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Freyad-Dryden In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-19 18:17:16 +0000 UTC]

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Electric-Raichu In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 06:55:01 +0000 UTC]

I haven't read all the comments, but I suspect Oliver's father is behind this. He took advantage of Ash's injuries, faked Ash's death and changed him into a Pikachu. After all, his father is probably the only who knows why Pokemon react like they do to him, so he must have worked out a way to turn people into Pokemon in a way that wouldn't trigger their reaction to Oliver.

If Oliver finds out, though, there's gonna be hell to pay...

But what is the secret behind Oliver? That I can't figure out.

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lilmarisa In reply to Electric-Raichu [2011-03-19 15:50:44 +0000 UTC]

That's certainly a good guess! But if it was true, the question would then be why Ash, why right now, and what does Team Rocket have to do with it?

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Electric-Raichu In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-20 05:56:46 +0000 UTC]

As we saw in the flashback, Team Rocket have some dealings with the prof. Oliver got caught up in it but I can't guess how yet.

Why Ash? He was in the wrong place at the wrong time. TR didn't intend him to be there. Prof just took advantage of what happened to him.

Actually, if he can turn a human into a Pokemon, then maybe he can do the opposite. Oliver is really a Pokemon that's become a human. He's unique, which possibly explains Pokemon's unique reaction to him. But Ash is a human turned Pokemon, so the same reaction doesn't occur.

Anyway, keep working on it so you can prove me wrong!!!

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lilmarisa In reply to Electric-Raichu [2011-03-21 15:41:14 +0000 UTC]

I sure will. ^____^ This is gonna be fun!

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Electric-Raichu In reply to Electric-Raichu [2011-03-19 06:56:48 +0000 UTC]

Incidentally, the fact that people are commenting on the story and not on the plot, artwork, characters etc., is a sign that you've succeeded in immersing us in the story and relating to the characters as real people.

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lilmarisa In reply to Electric-Raichu [2011-03-19 19:10:03 +0000 UTC]

I didn't see this comment before! xD Thanks so much, you wouldn't believe how big of a compliment that is. I've been so nervous about writing a story with so many OCs, but I'm glad it's turning out so great β™₯

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DracoAsh In reply to ??? [2011-03-19 06:09:18 +0000 UTC]

I bet Ash's Pikachu will recognise him.

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lilmarisa In reply to DracoAsh [2011-03-19 15:48:15 +0000 UTC]

He might :3

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DracoAsh In reply to lilmarisa [2011-03-19 23:23:32 +0000 UTC]

Well, Ash has been a Pikachu around Pikachu before...

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