Tailscoolio [2010-04-10 13:31:51 +0000 UTC]

To me it says destruction and ruin... but its still a great poem!
So much said within two stanzas

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yvonne3694 [2010-03-06 21:15:28 +0000 UTC]

Personally, I think of crushed hopes and dreams, and the bruise is the aftermath; the effects.

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CollisionsofThought [2010-03-06 05:04:05 +0000 UTC]

Perhaps I feel like the bruise is forming just now, like there is some sort of abuse that did happen in the past, only it just happened and came as a surprise (after all, when something shatters, it's new, it's crazy, it's a change, right?) Perhaps the fact that the bruises form means that the victim isn't used to it, they aren't hardened to it yet. So, perhaps from this abuse not only brings the pain of pain, but also the pain of broken trust, and broken love. Perhaps the abuse isn't even physical.

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Tanashai [2010-03-05 18:48:07 +0000 UTC]

I'm thinking abuse, but older abuse... maybe something wonderful happened to the narrator, but was talked down to or told it was stupid (shattered rainbow), maybe the bruise was mental or emotional...?

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TwistedHarbinger [2010-03-05 14:56:16 +0000 UTC]

I like this one, like a ton. It almost seems sad to me. I'm probably totally off, but I feel some sort of abuse here. Broken joy and dreams, replaced with pain?

I just krazy.

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Kazali [2010-03-05 05:36:15 +0000 UTC]

Hmm... to me, the first stanza seems to be about shattered hopes and dreams, represented by color. After all, rainbows are considered to be lucky, optimistic, and beautiful... so a smashed rainbow would be the opposite, right?

The second part is much harder for me to visualize. When I think of bruises, I think of dark purple and brown, so a rainbow colored bruise just doesn't compute for me. Perhaps the colors mixed into a horrible mess after they shattered, representing chaos or disorder caused by loss of faith? I don't know, maybe I'm reading too far into it.

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masked-twilight [2010-03-05 05:20:51 +0000 UTC]

Bout time you used that book Nice first poem! I like it!

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