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Published: 2011-02-13 05:02:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 624; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 19
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This chair, O brothers lost, is made of thorn,So tight it claws my garments to its breast
And pierces my heart, my virtue worn
To ribbons with the tension of this test.
O Comus wild, why force me with your voice
When aching close your lovely self draws near?
Your power would deprive me of my choice,
Yet had you left me free to wander here,
Of my own will, I might have loved you still.
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"Comus rape, Comus break, sweet young virgin's virtue take
Naked flesh, flowing hair, her terror screams they cut the air"
—Comus: A Song to Comus
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I was pretty much obsessed with Milton that entire semester. He's a good 'un for learning to write poetry.
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Oh, that is so lovely. I really liked it, though I've never heard of Comus, or read anything of Milton's (shame on me I know ...).
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Aw, that's okay. Though you still totally should. At the very least, browse his sonnets - though not as numerous, I think they're on par with Shakespeare's. But I am a bit biased and obsessed.
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I love traditional fixed poetry - it seems to be a little of a dying art
You made my day
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Aw, thank you!
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I'd never read that, so thank you for the link! Hrm, pity it's a bit too esoteric for netflix
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I've become so dependent on absolutely everything being on Netflix that it kind of shocks me when something isn't. Funny how fast we can get accustomed to expecting instant and complete gratification out of a fairly new service.
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Oh yeah, I didn't do it and didn't do it then got addicted when I couldn't get doctor who or torchwood! I rarely ever went to the movies, now I never do!
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Ahhh, I really like this...despite not being a fan of...writing in rhyme schemes myself >.> mostly cuz I lack the attention span. I like the way this flows, the words you used, the theme of it, everything but especially the ending.
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What an interesting form! I think I need to know more of the story to really understand it, but the flow and imagery are lovely. I'm really picturing a gnarled old style oak chair, intricate mythological patterning .. and the feel of it, becoming the magic rather than the wood piercing -- owww. Ok. Enough of that 
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You can have a little over or under on each line - Shakespeare himself does it all the time - though I'll admit mine were kind of unintentional. I think I pronounce some words oddly, which leads to strange emphases and extra or missing syllables. The main thing,if I remember correctly, is that there ought to be five stressed syllables per line, regardless of the count per line. Though I think I messed that up in line 3 too.
Oh wow, I submitted this Feb. 12? Geez, I haven't written a new poem in forever.
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Yes, I know you haven't .. I have missed your writing. I guess you finished the class mentioned you were writing poems in?
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Excellent work as usual. For me, the metre seems a little off in the third line, as it is a syllable short, and also (a bit more pernickety, this point) one would normally place equal emphasis on both syllables in 'pierces'. The other eight lines are flawless, and the voice is very strong. I haven't gone to the trouble of reading the original work by Milton yet - I must get onto that.
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I think the problem with the third line is that for some peculiar reason I read "pieces" as three syllables. I'm not sure why. It's hardly the right way to read it.
And oh yes, you do. I wish there were more performances available to watch,though, because plays seem odd if they don't have the visual component too. Sometimes that's really the only option though, and there are some plays that almost aren't really meant to be performed, only read, like Faust or Samson Agonistes.
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