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Those comments aside, this was a really nice page
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"is there finally something wrong with me?" this line feels...weird. Idk it just doesn't feel right.
Also I think it probably should have been "upset" not "upsetted".
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On the second line, I remember I was trying to make Rory sound particularly young. But it isn't really consistent with the rest of his dialogue with him using big words like "although" haha. Oh how writing skills grow...
For the first one, I get what you mean. As it is, it's correct in the context of the story (though I can't say without spoilers), but it does feel weird doesn't it..? Actually looking back on it now, the rest of Sammy's dialogue in that section isn't quite what it should be. hmmmm, might head back in and work on that bit.
Thanks for the heads up!
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