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Previous | Next ΒSorry guys, it doesn't work like that...haha
But on a positive note, hey Solana's here!
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aww kiba i love her!! plz tell me asadi and her can get along ;w;
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Wait.. she wanted to be released at first cause of some mission she had..
And now she's suddenly fine being caught by someone else?
I.. don't understand Kiba really..
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Kiba doesn't understand Kiba, really.
Nah but, in all seriousness I have a feeling your comment was meant to be less a critique and more a statement on the character as a whole (in your eyes), but I really appreciate it nonetheless. When I started out leftovers I was unsure how deep I wanted to go. Whether I wanted to write your run of the mill pokemon journey, or a tale of emotional and physical growth set in the pokemon world. Now that ive blazed off on the path of the later, i've started trying to fix some of the "Motivational Mysteries" of earlier chapters. In fact, the chapter 1 you read had parts added to it a month ago to help flesh out Asadi more (you can find the original 2015 pages here if you want, it's the same minus the first half and starts the story off much quicker at the cost of character development). Currently im on chapter 4 (which is why ch 4-6 are individual pages and not long format haha)
So this is really super helpful for figuring out what different POV scenes for Kiba I may need to add in order to flesh out why she does what she does more.Β
Thanks for the feedback <3
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Ooooh and no indeed it wasn't anΒ critiqueΒ more of a statement indeed
But thank you for explaining it to me, now I understand the pupper a little more
Andd yes.. Imma call her pupper from now on, muahahaha she'll hate it
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Oh yeah, no problem! i'm glad it helped. But I will more than likely be adding a few bits when the long forms of chapter 4-6 go up, so I guess keep an eye out for that? Hopefully that gives even more motivational clarity.
And oh man, Pupper. The name heard round the world loll That, goldie, and the rest of the lot. She'll be absolutely elated to hear you call her that LOLΒ
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I shaaaaal ~
Yaaaay Pupppeeerrr!! OwO
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Kanna is the sweetest
they both are
such moms <3
Kiba is a bit taken back innit?
AAHHH MORE !!!
I like that girl!! =o
Solanaaa what a pretty name
PEMMA AND KANNA <3
THAT WAS THE NAMES.
Solana is totally taken by Kiba
B EAU IT F UL
Look at Kiba being all surprised!
Celesse is the green-haired girl? =o
asdfsdf KIBA'S LEG IS HURTIN
heheh
heh
bonk
bonk
Kiba looks like she would've liked being in her team
esp since u know
the girl doesn't fear her or anything
poor sweet child
bonk bonk
ATLEAST KANNA AND PEMMA UNDERSTOOD
Kiba looks disappointed asdfa
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They ARE such moms to be honest!
And yeah, kiba probably would've LOVED it on Solana's team. Buuutt Alas
She is stuck with Asadi's ass hahaha
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ITS OK KIBA
WE LOVE YOU
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More of the team!
Oh... My poor fluffy baby!!
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Poor fluffy indeed 
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