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peterdawes — February 2009 HaikuWriMo
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Published: 2009-02-01 05:54:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 1050; Favourites: 28; Downloads: 8
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1.winter's bite
not so sharp
in california
2.
seasons change,
but snow takes an
eternity to melt
3.
exchanging secrets
a warm breath and
a cold wind
4.
melody of wind
a subtle lullaby
to a tired thinker
5.
song bird
with broken notes
induces migraine
6.
impromptu skate
ice rink and
wing-tipped shoes
7.
late night stroll
celestial companion
keeps secrets
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Comments: 86
i love haiku; it's so simple, but so beautiful.
great job!
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do you send wishes up to the stars, too?
i do
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5 and 7 are amazing 
Very good stuff as always
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#5 I am not surprised - it sounds like a nerve-jangling thing to have to listen too.
#6 I like the humour and I am glad that you didn't actually fall!
#7 I like the contemplative nature of this one. Communing with the stars is a wonderful thing.
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As much as I love the visual & emotion of #3, #4's been my favorite – perhaps because I relate oh so well. I also relate, a little too well, to #5 but ohhh.. today's.. I find myself responding to #7 as an invitation to do the same for it has indeed been too long.
(|_|*to moonlit introspection*|_|)
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The wind is out and you are safely in - a soothing lullaby - like it.
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yes, as do i. i love the longer nights, but could do without the chill.
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Yeah...I have some days where I enjoy the nights, but others I'd rather have longer sunshine.
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On the 1st, tho't you might be channeling me!? LOVE the visual & emotion of today's!
(|_|*to my winterless winter*|_|)
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The third one is surprisingly romantic, nice. I would separate the numbers from the haiku, it is a bit distracting.
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With your explanation in mind, #3 is like an epic love story in miniature; the cold wind in the last line suggests that danger may lie ahead for them - the story is not over.
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3. My vote is on this one, the description you give it really gives the poem a lot more meaning than I got from it at face value. Of course I'm a traditionalist (duhhh!) and think prefaces to haiku/tanka make them winners so yeah. As a whole, description and poem, this one's a winner. Dingdingding!
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That last one is a snow-melter all it's own.
Wonderful.
I think I'll save my faving for when you have them all, but don't think that I'm not reading and loving. Fabulous, darling.
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'eternity'
that one word can certainly sum up winters here.
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*chuckles* i am certain it feels that way at times.
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haha, that brightened my mood a bit, thanks.
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Nice start to the Wrimo ^_^ Looking forward to seeing what's in store for the next 28 days.
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It's nice to know there are places where the winter is not as harsh. We are in the midst of a snow storm here. The biggest we have had so far this winter.
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we have had snow in pennsylvania on and off. then ice. then more snow.
needless to say, i have been quite jealous of my friend in california.
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This is funny as an introduction because it almost works as a disclaimer ("Winter's not very noticeable in here, apologizes! 
I'm curious about what other Winter imagery you will be bringing to these haikus
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thank you!
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My pleasure! It'll be so much following, among many others, your work
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haha, there's no real winter here in the middle of the ocean until you get used to the constant 75-80 range and then 72 feels like icicles will run from your nose. XD
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*snickers* oh to have to suffer through 72 degrees.
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shoosh! i got used to the perpetual summer and can't feel my fingers in 72. *trying to keep straight face and failing miserably*
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No, that we don't. Huzzah for a low of 45 degrees.
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