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peterdawes — July Haiku Collection
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1. sharp peals of thunderraindrops begin their descent
summertime showers
2. garish starlight
cannot compare with your
radiant smile
3. the summer breeze
tousling your hair
wistful memory
4. streaks of light
exploding on a
canvas of black
5. serene urban pond
disturbed by the passing of
rubber on concrete
6. forceful wind
dissipates the smoke
from my cigarette
7. attempting to
ignore cacophonous
road construction
8. starlight winks secrets
gazing upon the night sky
thinking of you, dear
9. the lazy journey
of water trickling through
an inner city park
10. painting scenery
the pen becomes a brush
words on a canvas
11. small candle ember
surrenders life in a huff
to the silent breeze
12. fighting through traffic
to rescue a brother from
the philly airport
13. the wind stills
the leaves cease moving
and all is quiet
14. stray alley cat
crosses a busy street
without a care
15. softly spoken words
much more delightful than
a summer breeze
16. aimless wanderers
roaming through the city park
in search of breadcrumbs
17. little ones at play
making criss-cross paths
through sun-kissed fields
18. stagnant air
demands an offering of
perspiration
19. philadelphia heat
set to the same
temperature as hell
20. nature's drum beat
keeping rhythm for
the dance of rain
21. lazy summer day
the dog lies belly-down on
the cool hardwood floor
22. flickers of light
co-conspirators
winking at me
23. haze of city lights
barrier between eyes and
celestial bodies
24. another rainstorm
washes away city grime
and hopes for a walk
25. turn of events
rain clouds part and
eyes behold the sun
26. the sweet words of love
a more welcome presence than
the silence of loss
27. raven-haired beauty
affection personified
an angel descends
28. smelling nocturne's air;
seeing stars collide above
two nighttime lovers
29. caged birds sing
the melody of freedom
as a door opens
30. chasing diamonds
hands reach for the priceless jewels
of words in verse
31. the circle closes
yin and yang connected
poetic spirits rest
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hi i finally come back to look at your other haikuwrimo 2008 entries! 
day 14 this verse makes me wonder why are humans so weighed down by a lot of care and business.
day 21 love this scenario. i suggest put the first line as the third and remove 'lazy'. it will be more sublime when the readers 'saw' your dog in that posture and get the idea of 'laziness' on their own accord.
i find many good ideas in this set but perhaps the verses are not graphic and detailed enough for the subject matter.
thank you for the good read!
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and thank you for your thoughts. i am, by far, yet an amateur when it comes to this form. but since this set, i have been experimenting more and hope to participate again in february. one of these days, perhaps, i might get the hang of it.
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You have a great ability for creating the image and turning things that are ugly somehow into a more beautiful creation. I feel once I have ploughed through the haikuwrimos I will have to keep an eye out on the other things you write.
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thank you kindly, becca. 
i am behind on my reading, but intend to read through yours again soon.
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Take your time, I still need to write the last 5!
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It's certainly a pleasure to read your pieces here, you have the ability to transform something as mundane as rain on a city street into something magical.
I had to smile when I read the 24th, I'm exactly the same.
P.S. In answer to a question you asked in an early comment and I managed to overlook, my brother's gone to Canada to live, should be visiting him next month though (cheap holidays to Canada are a good thing I think...)
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why thank you. i have need of peering at your list again. i do not think i have in some days.
canada is a pleasant place to reside. i am certain the cheap holidays make it that much better for you all.
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Yay! You did it! Congratulations! 
An entire month of haiku!
#29 - I have been that bird and I have sung that song.
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Absolutely marvelous!
I sense negative opinions of Philly from you.
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ha ha. no, at times merely a melancholy attitude that gets extended to my residence. i actually enjoy residing here.
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Hmmm, I can see meaning here for BOTH Peter and the Puppetmaster. And I enjoy the song they are singing.
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They get better and better with each penning, dear Peter. They are all excellent. Very hard to find a favourite - although I quite fancy 17.
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thank you, dear kelly. i find it interesting which ones speak to whom and an honor that any speak to you all.
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The pleasure is mine.
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and #19 - a friend of mine told me Houston was hot, and I told her the temperature was set on "repent."
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*chuckles* philadelphia must be a city of sinners then, lady falcon.
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I suspect many of them are Peter! 
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no less than a million of them.
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You paint a vivid picture with #21... and a warm one I might add.
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it is rather hot here, i must say. although today is supposed to be a trifle cooler than the standard fare of mid-nineties. thank bloody goodness.
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Cooled off here a bit. Did you get the benefit of that cold front as well?
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I love number 17.
Watching little kids play is one of my many hobbies.
They're just so darn cute! Especially when they're playing t-ball... and the run the wrong way around the bases. ^^ It's kind of a "oh-my-goodness-melt-my-heart" type of thing.
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they are quite precious during those moments.
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7th, why do they start work at 6.00am? I've suffered from that one this week.
The 12th is another familiar one for me although in my case it was to see my brother off as he emmigrated to Canada.
I love the 16th, it made me think of Hansel and Gretal as well as birds in the park.
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They commence at six o'clock and do not cease until late afternoon. It is rather irritating.
I loathe visits to the airport. Emigrating for school?
I am glad somebody caught the Hansel and Gretel allusion.
Thank you for your comment.
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I really enjoyed number 13. It was simple, and very straight to the point... but for some reason I felt so much complexity radiating from it. Maybe it's just me.
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Thank you, dear Kelly.
These haiku are a challenge in that they are abbreviated and yet should have something clever or complex about them. I rarely succeed, but it is a fun exercise just the same.
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Very true, Peter. I don't dare attemp them... it would turn out in an epic fail
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you never know, you might be a master haiku poet waiting to emerge.
perhaps in the privacy of your own notebooks you could attempt it, if you so desired? so you have no fear of any ill-mannered critics pulling your efforts apart.
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Ah, the Philly airport.
I loathe that place.
The last time I went was to pick up Robert... at crack of butt in the morning.
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I believe the Philadelphia airport resides on the gateway to the seventh level of hell.
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I do agree with you, Peter. Poetry is art. It always has been, always will be. It is art in it's own specific way. It works with your inner-self, rather than you eyes.
So yes, dear Peter. You are very profound.
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*chuckles* That was my sarcasm surfacing. I do not think myself very profound at all. Such is why I take any chance possible to mock my own profundity.
I act at times as though I attained enough years to claim some sort of wisdom. If only you all knew what a fool I truly am.
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If a fool you truley are, then you must be a marvelous actor. You surely have this one fooled.
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And you are a gracious girl, Kelly.
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Thank you kindly, Peter.
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You are quite welcome.
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on #10 - I like this. I used to say, "I can't paint a stroke but I can plant a mean garden." That was my medium. It's all in the hands that hold the tools, whatever the tools might be.
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Artistry finds life in varying forms. I, for one, would not be able to plant a garden to save my soul.
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And that is why you write.
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Thank you kindly, Lady Falcon.
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#9. almost enough to make me go out and get a new puppy.
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