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peterdawes — July Haiku Collection
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1. sharp peals of thunderraindrops begin their descent
summertime showers
2. garish starlight
cannot compare with your
radiant smile
3. the summer breeze
tousling your hair
wistful memory
4. streaks of light
exploding on a
canvas of black
5. serene urban pond
disturbed by the passing of
rubber on concrete
6. forceful wind
dissipates the smoke
from my cigarette
7. attempting to
ignore cacophonous
road construction
8. starlight winks secrets
gazing upon the night sky
thinking of you, dear
9. the lazy journey
of water trickling through
an inner city park
10. painting scenery
the pen becomes a brush
words on a canvas
11. small candle ember
surrenders life in a huff
to the silent breeze
12. fighting through traffic
to rescue a brother from
the philly airport
13. the wind stills
the leaves cease moving
and all is quiet
14. stray alley cat
crosses a busy street
without a care
15. softly spoken words
much more delightful than
a summer breeze
16. aimless wanderers
roaming through the city park
in search of breadcrumbs
17. little ones at play
making criss-cross paths
through sun-kissed fields
18. stagnant air
demands an offering of
perspiration
19. philadelphia heat
set to the same
temperature as hell
20. nature's drum beat
keeping rhythm for
the dance of rain
21. lazy summer day
the dog lies belly-down on
the cool hardwood floor
22. flickers of light
co-conspirators
winking at me
23. haze of city lights
barrier between eyes and
celestial bodies
24. another rainstorm
washes away city grime
and hopes for a walk
25. turn of events
rain clouds part and
eyes behold the sun
26. the sweet words of love
a more welcome presence than
the silence of loss
27. raven-haired beauty
affection personified
an angel descends
28. smelling nocturne's air;
seeing stars collide above
two nighttime lovers
29. caged birds sing
the melody of freedom
as a door opens
30. chasing diamonds
hands reach for the priceless jewels
of words in verse
31. the circle closes
yin and yang connected
poetic spirits rest
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Comments: 147
I love the summer thunderstorms. Such a nice change from near blizzard storms in winter.
Continue breaking conformity! The flow was better than the first.
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Yes, I was much happier with the second verse's flow. I am attempting to relax my standards a little to allow for better flow.
I confess the chill of winter does not bother me. The longer nights are welcomed friends. But summer thunderstorms are nice in their own way as well.
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That's good, breathe deep and relax
I love the chill of winter. Yes they are. I prefer lightning storms over blizzards though. They look more violent and well...flashy.
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Yes, lightning storms at night are quite stunning.
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Yes they are, I drop everything I'm doing to try and watch them.
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I caught the first line was only four --- but they they are both beautiful.
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Yes, my fellow poets have been prodding me to relax my haiku a bit more. The syllable standards are not so regimented these days.
Truth be known, I prefer the 5-7-5 as there is a certain challenge in them. 
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... thought you might get a kick out of this~
I translated your second verse into Japanese and then back to English using Yahoo Babel Fish...
Here's your re-englishfied translation!
"It is gaudy, it cannot compare with starlight your emission smile"
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Babel fish sucks - My boss wanted me to translate a webpage so I got quotes from professional translation services and his response was "why dont we use babel fish" ...NOOOOO
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I've had some good times with Babel Fish, and some bad. It helped me translate my one title correctly (I would have been using improper Italian grammar otherwise)... but for words that aren't 'simplistic' or if you are using bad English grammar, you won't get anywhere.
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I've made the mistake before of using babel fish for profesional work and have been the laughing stock of the company...Lets just say Babel Fish turned an English web page into a portugese page filled with sexual inuendo (sp)....
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O_o;;;
Yeah... that... might have been bad.
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Our customers got a kick out of it...but lets just say the page had given some new ideas on how the product could be used.
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Emission smiles often have difficulty competing with starlight. Especially when they are gaudy.
I shall endeavor never to translate a book of poems into Japanese and back into English now. Thank you for the chuckle.
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I figured you could have used the laugh :3
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Always could, my dear.
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I wish I could write poetry. I however, don't have the knack for it. Now my sister, her poems would make even you, dear Peter, weep. I should ask her if I can share a few but I don't think she will.
Great job though. ^^ *two thumbs up*
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Thank you kindly, my dear.
I would love to read your sister's poetry. She should join us on deviantArt.
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I'll see if I can get to her to do it. ^^
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Thank you, dear Leonie. I'm rarely satisfied with my own work, but I liked that verse.
Perhaps if I pen more in her honor I might be a more satisfied poet.
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One wishes to congradulate him on an excelently written poem.
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And one wishes to thank you for your warm compliment.
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It is a good start, and I hope we get you to surrender
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*chuckles* I am a stubborn person.
But I'll make an attempt at breaking conformity.
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Mwhahaahaha we broke you on the second day!
What I like is that the second one has a straight flow to it, and that touch of romantic sentiment.
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Thank you very kindly.
The words came to me in this manner and I liked them better than attempting to fit them into a syllable construct. So, I surrendered. 
Perhaps a mixing of the two. Who knows?
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Wow, 1 a day? I suggested doing a haiku on the WritersNesst back a few months ago. [link] Penfury is wicked good at these, I thought. It's not as easy an art form as some like to think, and you've demonstrated your skill at these dear Peter. 
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They are quite challenging. I thank you for your faith in me.
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Ah, Mr. Dawes, I am sure that you could never disappoint.
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I endeavor not to, but the best laid plans of mice and men and what not.
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LOL Well, we can but try, no?
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i wish i was good enough at haikus to do this. good luck, dearest Poet.
i Nano-ed one year. my best writing happened between 11pm and 2am.
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Thank you, dear Lindsay.
My best writing happens when my brain is functioning properly.
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i'm sure that brain thing helps at times.
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At times, it can be crucial.
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Pft. 31 haiku isn't as bad as 50,000 words.
If you can nano, you can do this.
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Thank you for your confidence in me.
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very nicely done
good luck on your 31
xo!
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thank you kindly.
shaking the dust off for this one.
hopefully they improve from here.
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