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peterdawes — July Haiku Collection
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1. sharp peals of thunderraindrops begin their descent
summertime showers
2. garish starlight
cannot compare with your
radiant smile
3. the summer breeze
tousling your hair
wistful memory
4. streaks of light
exploding on a
canvas of black
5. serene urban pond
disturbed by the passing of
rubber on concrete
6. forceful wind
dissipates the smoke
from my cigarette
7. attempting to
ignore cacophonous
road construction
8. starlight winks secrets
gazing upon the night sky
thinking of you, dear
9. the lazy journey
of water trickling through
an inner city park
10. painting scenery
the pen becomes a brush
words on a canvas
11. small candle ember
surrenders life in a huff
to the silent breeze
12. fighting through traffic
to rescue a brother from
the philly airport
13. the wind stills
the leaves cease moving
and all is quiet
14. stray alley cat
crosses a busy street
without a care
15. softly spoken words
much more delightful than
a summer breeze
16. aimless wanderers
roaming through the city park
in search of breadcrumbs
17. little ones at play
making criss-cross paths
through sun-kissed fields
18. stagnant air
demands an offering of
perspiration
19. philadelphia heat
set to the same
temperature as hell
20. nature's drum beat
keeping rhythm for
the dance of rain
21. lazy summer day
the dog lies belly-down on
the cool hardwood floor
22. flickers of light
co-conspirators
winking at me
23. haze of city lights
barrier between eyes and
celestial bodies
24. another rainstorm
washes away city grime
and hopes for a walk
25. turn of events
rain clouds part and
eyes behold the sun
26. the sweet words of love
a more welcome presence than
the silence of loss
27. raven-haired beauty
affection personified
an angel descends
28. smelling nocturne's air;
seeing stars collide above
two nighttime lovers
29. caged birds sing
the melody of freedom
as a door opens
30. chasing diamonds
hands reach for the priceless jewels
of words in verse
31. the circle closes
yin and yang connected
poetic spirits rest
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I care greatly for my canine companion. He is the only one who listens to me without complaint.
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I saw rain in a gutter on a dark night, and heard the sound of cars splashing past in the distance. Nice walk. Thanks for inviting us along.
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Thank you for coming along. 
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Anytime. As long as the solitary man has sworn off the red stuff.
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No such thing as swearing off the red stuff, I am afraid. But I shall abstain from stealing yours.
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Then we're on. Meet you at the park around 10. That's not too early is it?
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No, no ten o'clock is dark here.
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If it is too dark for these mortal eyes, I'll just listen for your dog!
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Echo has a formidable bark when he gets excited. That should be of some benefit to you, then.
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Here, Echo! Want a dog biscuit?
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He certainly would not refuse it.
As it is right now, he is regarding me with hungry eyes. I best see to feeding him shortly.
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Nice update I like #8 and #5 - it sucks that you can never get away from the car sounds to enjoy nature.
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Not much nature within the immediate area. There is Fairmount Park, though. I've not thought to venture there in some time.
Thank you for adding this to your writing collection, sir.
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I love 5 and 6. I never thought much of the puddles on the road. I guess this is why I love haiku; they always remind you of things you pass by in life without noticing. The idea of wind being forceful is also powerful; it reminds you that it can do a lot even if it is just the wind.
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That is one thing I enjoy about haiku. The abbreviated size of each poem forces one to hone in on the little things.
Thank you kindly for the comment.
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i'm certainly loving day 4's submission. that lightning has managed to make me squint a little while the scenario flash back in my mind.
day 5 has a very nice image. though i think it could be improved on by tightening on the number of words used. for example, 'rubber on concrete' could be replaced with a specific vehicle. that also helps to fix the image to a specific time frame and hence more vivid.
anyhow i think you are off to a good start and really hope you could make it through the 31 days. (i'm wishing that for myself too 
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Best of luck with you and your poetic endeavors.
I shall have to muse upon changing #5. Am too fatigued to presently, but you have a very valid recommendation. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
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I cannot wait until all 31 are done, and I can read it in total!
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I hope I do not disappoint, dear Leonie.
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Ah, got to love a good thunderstorm and I think you've caught their essence with the first one. I like the romance in 2 and 3 and I'll have to admit I thought the fourth was about shooting stars, but I'm British and didn't note the date...
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Shooting stars is certainly another valid interpretation of #4. That is what I've enjoyed about keeping it somewhat vague. Others have had a myriad of different perspectives.
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That's what I've always enjoyed about haiku, all the different interpretations that you can get from such few words.
Thank you for the 
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oh very cool, i am a big fan of haikus, they're so... crisp
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They are a lot of fun to pen.
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I take it back... number 5 is my favorite now.
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No need to blush, love.
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Ah, but you flatter me.
Thank you.
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You're welcome, dear.
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I love #4. It can also be applied to a nighttime summer storm. Nature's fireworks.
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I had not thought of it that way. Quite so!
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I really like no.3, but here's my suggestion; put the breeze info first, because the selling point is the wistful memory, it deservse to be last, like a nice slice of chocolate cake.
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A good idea. I shall edit it a bit later, then.
Thank you for the suggestion.
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Always tell me if its too much. >_> I don't wanna become one of those people I despise that goes off on stuff they know a lot about when the other person is like "um okay." You know? XD
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Sounds fair to me.
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July 2nd and 3rd are so romantic and I'm such a sucker for romance.
Still, they're written beautifully
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Thank you.
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Well done on day 2, and day 3 is very enjoyable as well. Cannot wait to see what is to come
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Having fun so far? ^_^ It's taken me ages to comment on this! They're great so far, looking forward to reading the rest ^_^
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Having quite a bit of fun.
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Peter... you are sure to succed in this. Your wordplay is phenominal and your imagery is divine.
I think the second one is my favorite... so far.
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Thank you, Kelly.
These can be quite challenging. Especially forming 31 of them.
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^^ Not to worry, dear.
One such as you is sure to do excellently.
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Thank you kindly, Kelly.
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These are looking very convincing!
Best of luck for the rest, though I have faith in you!
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Thank you very kindly.
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Not to my knowledge!
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