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I think it looks alright and the flow / shape overall is good, but right now the proportions are pretty human-like. A real cat's body is longer, but if you're anthropomorphizing the character (considering that it's dancing in the first place), keeping it as it is is good.
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Just surch for yoga animals whith proper anatomy.Here some good examples:
Ps:The Doberman, by the way, has limbs of different lengths, but the essence of the pose is understandable (so you need to draw correcting such details)
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i'm making a series called the imagimons and i'm having trouble coming up with the main villain/antagonist of the series as well their motive against the imagimons and taking over the real world and (maybe) the entire galaxy/universe. any thoughts?
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Well, what could the villain gain from taking over the world? Do they have a need for control, or do they just want riches and luxury? Or do they even intend to use that power to make things better (in their opinion)? Or do they want to see someone (or everyone) suffer? Have they lost someone or something dear and want to take revenge on the world, or protect others from the same fate at any cost? Just some general ideas, since I know nothing about your set-up, but I hope this sparks some ideas
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So I just submitted a work of my book (story, what have you) and was curious if it sounds any good. I'm not sure if it is all that good in descriptions, behavior of the characters and description of the settings. It is suppose to be vague in a sense, but is this enough to set a story...? (it has a preview img seen here, links to the page of writing). I'd gladly love to hear anyone's opinion and what I could do better, what's to still improve and if I've done enough already. 
Legacy of Zellennaa Series 4 Prelude- White Light
Prelude, White Light
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A vaguely distinguishable figure stood before his dazed line of sight. They spoke with obvious irritation and he somehow knew he wasn’t going to die quietly.
Waves of panic slammed him mentally and he coughed and sputtered as a frothy garble of cuss spewed forth from his limp mouth.
The figure swiftly replied with a harsh kick to his face and the sound of snapping bone resounded. He was totally helpless, unable to barely make a snarl of pain as he was help prone upon the rain-soaked asphalt by some other person.
The intense taste of iron quickly filled his mouth and he drooled strings of blood despite himself trying to remain calm. His face began to swell up like a bloated carcass and he was sure it didn’t look any better from their vantage point either.
To be honest, he didn’t even recall the slightest reason as to what he’d done to end up the punching bag of this deranged duo. His gut told him talking as he had, however, wasn’t i
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I have a few issues with this one: I can't help but feel the color job doesn't match the detail of the lineart, and I've been told that at first glance the eye doesn't have anywhere to fix on, and the viewer has to keep jumping around to figure out what's going on. My main question is, what about this piece makes it so difficult to read, and how could I have harmonized it more? Ideally, without sacrificing the radial symmetry.
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Ah, I can see that. Thanks!
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The suggestions of the previous commenter actually sounds reasonable. I haven't paid attention to how the yellow dragon breaks the symmetry, and with such pieces perfectly balanced elements really mean a lot.
I am not sure it matters much of yellow or red one would be on top. But speaking of shadows, maybe having some shadows would make the figures more clear to look at.
My idea, when I asked myself why does this picture look hard to focus on was a bit different. I know it's something you won't be able to change, so it's just a notice to consider in the future pictures with tricky composition.
When doing composition it's important to keep in mind how the viewer's eye will trace the image. Simple shapes and simple lines or curves are easier to follow.
Your image has the main circular (or triangular) outline, and each dragon itself is a spiral, that makes a lot of lines the viewer's eye has to trace. The way the dragon tails are hidden behind the curve of their body makes them sort of curl up onto themselves, we start looking from head to tail and then get stuck at the tail's end, while the next dragon head is elsewhere.
I think if this image had dragon shapes not as they are now, separated and wrapped around themselves, but put into a single flow with one dragon's body following the direction where the other dragon ended, forming a unified pattern, this would look better and catch the eye.
Here's how lines we trace with our eye look like now. The orange arrows show how we trace the main shape of the composition (can go clockwise or counter-clockwise, it doesn't really matter). The blue ones - how we overlook each dragon. Their tails are hidden, so we look over each dragon from the head and follow into the knot its body forms.
I believe if the dragon shape would be something like these (tail tip free in the middle of uncoiling spiral like the green line, or even pointing out towards the next dragon like the yellow line) , it would make the composition work together better.
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Hello!
I have spent some time looking at the picture and I feel like I have a few pointers I could give you.
Think about compositions in fine art. Our eyes are used to compositions where light and bright colours fill the top part of the artwork and shadows form the bottom half. That means the composition could be easier to focus on if you had the yellow dragon on top, rather than the red one 
Another thing is the composition itself. You arrange it in a triangle, but the base is not exactly even. The yellow dragon is slightly lower skewing the perspective and symmetry a little bit.
Other than that I think it's a very solid piece of work and a beautiful lineart! Keep up the great Inktober work c:
Hope I could help!
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Thanks! It does - I'll have to remember that in the future. :3
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Hello! A little late to the game here and others have covered the bulk of things, but I'd like to comment on structure a bit.
When dealing with water like oceans, the horizon will always be the eye line for level, square images. So if you're looking at a giraffe, the mid-leg will be eye line, so 3/4 of the giraffe is above the horizon (eye) line. With this in mind, looking at a lake or pond means the background includes terrain which must be above the water level. Standing on the shore puts you either looking down toward the lake (high horizon line) or across the lake (eye line below tree/mountain tops). I'll spare you a breakdown of 2 and 3 point perspective in this when you start tilting your viewing angle.
Anyway, lets assume the eye line is along the top of the flamingo's back. OK, this means you're looking down slightly at the flamingo (no problem here) in profile. What's the water background doing then? You've got the shoreline as a tangent to the bird's back, and the water line is tilted. Not a problem, just a consequence of a tilted head viewer, or the far lake shore is closing toward the viewer. Some more detail could sort that out. But if the eye line is the top of the bird and shoreline, the viewer is looking up at the head. What's behind the head? More ground! Is that a sloping hillside perhaps? Rolling hills maybe? This could really use a touch of sky (between some hills on the right for balance) to even out the scene and complete the illusion of depth. The water is great but can't carry the illusion by itself. Plus, the lowering viewing angle would become more and more a mirror of the terrain behind it depending on the situation.
Here are some lake images: www.bing.com/images/search?q=l… Note the colors and details vary significantly depending on the situation and background.
Good luck!
PS - Don't let vision issues dissuade you from painting. You bring your own view of the world to life for the eyes of others to see. Once upon a time a famous, elderly painter had cataract surgery, and discovered a whole new depth of blues and violets, because the eye lens cuts off that end of the spectrum. His work became much more vibrant because of it. Use what you have and work with it your way.
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You're very welcome! Cataract lens replacement surgery helped my father and some other people I know. Good luck with everything and I'm looking forward to seeing your next works.
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First off, I want to say you nailed the water texture!
For example (and I apologize if this doesn't help; I realize it might not because of how red-shifted the entire piece is; most of that purple, blue, and green is actually very desaturated, almost grey and you may find them indistinguishable):
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Ohh I see. Sorry about that. 
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Nice drawing! Super eerie and atmospheric. I also really like the composition and your shading. Well done!
As for the hands, I feel like the main issue is not so much the foreshortening but how masculine they look. Maybe I'm wrong, but personally, I feel like childish, plump hands would work much better. They would provide a nice contrast to the demonic aspects, just like her little dress does. Just making the fingers a little shorter and wider would do the trick.
Hands and feet are extremely difficult to get right, but luckily they are also the only model that you always have available! Just draw your own hands and feet for practice. Try different poses, use a mirror if you want. That's the best tip I can give you. I know it might come across as a no-brainer but the best way to get better is through practice c:
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I'm still learning how to draw and can't really pretend to know much, but I'm always happy to help others get better if I can. So feel free to contact me if you have any further questions. Or need advice on any further drawings c: (I try to check this journal on regular basis, but I respond much quicker to a ping or note xD) Unfortunately, I don't really have any super quick tips. Though maybe these tutorials will be some good pointers:
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I finished these pieces, not sure about the colours. Can someone tell me if they're odd or not?
Another thing:
I also think that the clouds look weird on the "Ava" piece... But, not sure what.
If something else seems odd on these, please let me know!
Cheers!
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Cheers, mate! That really helps! ^^
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I feel like there’s something off with the composition with this and I just don’t know how to fix it. Please help.
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Hello, I agree with Atramis it's an interesting piece. Interesting style in all honestly.
The composition isn't that bad. I think your problem indeed is because of her bouquet who is cut off a bid but in a way, I think you can pull this off in the end because your focus point isn't the Boquete but her kissing the flower. (lips and flower)
Personly I think the reason why the composition is slightly off for you will be the point of interest falls away to her hand/chin instead of the flower she is kissing or the bouquet (if the bouquet supposed to be your focus)
I think at this point you want to tell a story inside this drawing thanks to her to hold a colourfull bouquet and kissing a colourfull flower while the red blood is dripping out of her mount.
She is drawn in white and grey tones. What tells me that she might be got hurt maybe, duo love. And the flowers might represent hope for the future. And even if you had another story in mind I think it's a strong subject.
But then we come to the composition part. Where you want to get this story even stronger.
If I would look at this I would say, just bring her position a bit more to the left and down. And then you get that part on one of those Golden ratio lines. And this part of the story will capture your attention very strongly.
I don't know if you do know about the Golden Ratio in artworks. Or work with those but it can help very well with portrait arts like these.
It's actually something like this hackernoon.com/golden-ratio-in… A lot of photographers and designers/artist do work with this. And it's quite useful to make this image even more powerful c:
I hope this will help you a bid.
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Thanks so much for your reply, especially about the Golden Ratio!
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You are much welcome c: I hope it works out for you.
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That's a very interesting piece! Reminds me of Rappaccini's Daughter with the poison concept.
I think the problem you might have with the composition is that the bouquet doesn't really fit in your canvas. You might want to experiment a little with moving the hand so that she holds the flowers closer to her chest? Another way to handle that would be to make the flowers more vertical. This would make them fit in the canvas and also give you a nice sense of symmetry with the character's body.
Hope that helps c:
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Thanks so much for your advice
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the quality is crap (and there is a spot where i dropped some gum ironically in the hair that won't go away) but overall how well do you think i did?
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I am new to digital art so I decided to draw doing some super simple drawings for practice. I found that pixel art has two of the components that I would really like to focus on. Color and shading.
What would you say the strengths and weaknesses of my image (the one on the right) are?
What would you recommend for further steps for self improvement?
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I'm not really sure what kind of digital art it is that I want to get into just quite yet, since I am so new to the medium, but I will take your advice and not be afraid for some sharper shading contrasts
Thank you!
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