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Published: 2005-12-31 18:56:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 490; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 18
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Description Hypocrites in poetry
Liars versed in rhyme
Stories tell of traitors
Wanton, faceless crime

Comparisons are useless
A scapegoat in the sea
Of excuses, of hopelessness
Of tired and empty pleas

Wishes for forgiveness
Cast out to the sky
Build clarity between us
Before our bond will die

Can't ask for your friendship
Tell me face to face
The tie's already broken
Poised in a fitting place

An unfamiliar feeling
Your back facing my heart
Whisper goodbye, as I cannot
Fate's ribbon cut apart
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Comments: 12

Tsukasa24 [2007-06-13 00:39:02 +0000 UTC]

i like this one, very fitting to todays socity

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isis-amataeru [2006-01-08 16:29:57 +0000 UTC]

;o; waaaah ur so talented with words~ u should write more poetry ne I feed on it! x3 really lovely and deep in describing human nature and it really reminds meh of Sasunaru *i'm in teh craze mode u see* xD You started out with a verse that really makes u think and then u wrap up teh angst, remorse, and misery with such a fitting last verse >o< pang in heart once again x3 I adore it so much~ awesome work like always Raspberry-chan~

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Raspberry-Heaven In reply to isis-amataeru [2006-01-09 00:20:00 +0000 UTC]

I don't blame you, I'm pretty much in permanent SasuNaru craze mode. *grins* You know, maybe I should post more poetry. Thank you so much, Isis!

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yaoi101 [2006-01-02 08:16:01 +0000 UTC]

very nice^^ me likey very much. Kinda deep(though I not sure I know)...not something you'd expect out of someone your age...though you're in your angsty years, arent you.

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Raspberry-Heaven In reply to yaoi101 [2006-01-02 16:50:03 +0000 UTC]

*laugh* I love the way you put that! It is the angsty years, isn't it? Thanks for the comment and for faving it.

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SypherXFoxx [2006-01-01 13:24:47 +0000 UTC]

OMG SO GOOD! and it rhyrmes! (suprised cuz i cant) lol HAPPY NEW YEAR!

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ayra-sasunaru-addict [2006-01-01 05:35:01 +0000 UTC]

Jo welcome!

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ayra-sasunaru-addict [2006-01-01 03:56:44 +0000 UTC]

Happy New Years Eve! Omg this was so well done!!!!!!! OMG OMG YOUR SUCH A AWSOME WRITTER!!!

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Raspberry-Heaven In reply to ayra-sasunaru-addict [2006-01-01 03:59:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much. ^^

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Sakura-Tora [2005-12-31 23:46:36 +0000 UTC]

Ooh! I love it! +stabs anybody who dares say they hate it+
Great job at rhyming, and awesome poem.
Happy new years!!!

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gyakuten [2005-12-31 20:10:51 +0000 UTC]

merry new years eve, heaven ^^.
wow, last one for the year ...and it rhymes so well. as soon as i started realizing it, i thought that things sort of contrasted each other but still fit each other, in a really good way.

"Can't ask for your friendship
Tell me face to face
The tie's already broken
Poised in a fitting place"

yea..that's cool :]

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Raspberry-Heaven In reply to gyakuten [2005-12-31 20:12:10 +0000 UTC]

Happy new year's eve to you, too! And thank you very much. ^__^

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