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Sleeper77 — Kidnapping Storm, Part 1 - Fear's Blindfold, 7

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Published: 2014-09-04 02:05:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 3780; Favourites: 31; Downloads: 106
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Ororo changed her mind.  She realized that any attempt to snag the taser would leave her too exposed.  She leaned back slightly, planning to deliver a swift kick.   Her eyes focused on the taser purposefully, intending to mislead her opponent as to her move.   Her reflexes, not yet fully recovered, proved unable to fulfill her wish.   Instead she executed a clumsy kick, which Lady Yeesha easily parried by stepping to one side.  She then grabbed Ororo's leg by the thigh and suspended it in mid-air, while her other arm delivered a fist against her temple.  Storm groaned in pain as stars blinded her vision.   Lady Yeesha noted her reaction.   One hand still pinching tightly into Ororo's raised thigh, her other delivered a flurry  blows against which Ororo offered no resistance.  With each new impact Ororo's muscles slackened further.  Her fists uncurled, her arms hung limp beneath her shoulders, her knees buckled and collided against the other.    As if tired of speed punching her head, Lady Yeesha released the leg in her grasp, and pivoting, worked over her belly, her fists punching into her like alternating pistons. 

Ororo staggered into the back of the van. Her eyes, glazed over, never saw the incoming boot that caught her under the chin.   Her mind, already descending into quiescent submission, registered the impact like an order to shut down and turn off the lights for the night.  Another right hook followed, unnecessary as it was.  Lady Yeesha wanted to ensure she was not feigning her helplessness. The back of her head ricocheted against the door with a sickening thud.   Ororo slid down the van, her bare flesh screeching against the surface of the door like fingernails on a chalkboard.  She was completely unconscious before she hit the pavement.  Ironically the bio-pulse taser was within easy reach, but it could do her no good now.    The fight was over for Ororo.
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Comments: 13

jimbor [2014-09-05 18:36:21 +0000 UTC]

Since you requested feed back and input I do have an idea to share.
After Lady Yeesha   gives Storm that beating ( and releases the faux police man  and maybe he colects some pay back - or maybe lady Yeesha  prevents him saying he has not earned  that privilege)  ,our beleaguered heroine is rolled up inside the  mat on the van  floor  which is then tightly strapped around her .
Lady Yeesha orders this as an extra precaution.
Of course this move will totally stress out the  claustrophobic heroine.
And make it harder for her  to deal with whatever  is in store for her at her destination
What do you think?

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Sleeper77 In reply to jimbor [2014-09-05 20:07:44 +0000 UTC]

I like that a lot!  Rolling up Storm inside the mat would be a devious move.  I think I would have a difficult time illustrating that, but words can suffice.

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jimbor In reply to Sleeper77 [2014-09-05 20:13:35 +0000 UTC]

Pleased that you liked my suggestion
I understand about the image .
I believe words can do the job.

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xitres [2014-09-04 15:13:11 +0000 UTC]

Nice kick!

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Sleeper77 In reply to xitres [2014-09-05 16:11:29 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!  There's more (kicks) to come!

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gytalf2000 [2014-09-04 14:18:43 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic series!

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Sleeper77 In reply to gytalf2000 [2014-09-05 16:10:39 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!!!

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jimbor [2014-09-04 06:16:20 +0000 UTC]

Yikes !
This one is harsh.
But well done .
And entirely plausible
And very effective
Storm's change of tactics ring true
And her bodies inability to execute the new ( some what desperate)  move she had in mind is entirely likely given all that she has been through sounds right ,as does the move itself . To my mind that was just the sort of tactic the character would try ,under the circumstances
Lady Yessha's  devastating moves against Ororo  and our unlucky heroines reactions to them are very well done ( I hope my own writing will be as good when the time comes to write a similar scene in my story) The villianess's final coup  de grace where that left hook bounces her skull off the back of the van " with a sickening thud" and  "nails on the chalk board sound her body makes  as it slides down against the back of the van  were great story telling touches .As was the bio shock taser being within easy reach of the heroine , though it is too late to do her any good
This was a great installment .
 Thank you for it
I really enjoyed it.

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Sleeper77 In reply to jimbor [2014-09-04 14:01:34 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you liked it and appreciate your thougtful feedback.  I just noticed that I left out a couple of words here and there.   For whatever reason my proofreading abilities seem to work better after I post something .   

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jimbor In reply to Sleeper77 [2014-09-05 05:22:20 +0000 UTC]

 I also want to mention that I thought the phrase describing Lady Yeesha's targeting change, deciding to got to work on Ororo's taut ,toned  yet vulnerable belly " Her fists punching into her like alternating pistons" was very good and really conjures up a devastating image .
Well done .
I know what you mean about "after the fact" proof reading . I have the same problem .
Personally I find it a little embarrassing
Hope my feed back was useful
Hope you are able to continue this story

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Sleeper77 In reply to jimbor [2014-09-05 20:05:25 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!  Beginning next week my little bit of free time will evaporate for the short term with family matters.  I plan to do some work this weekend on it.

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jimbor In reply to Sleeper77 [2014-09-05 20:15:54 +0000 UTC]

Understand about real world considerations
Look forward to the results of your weekend work.
really enjoyed everything you have done so far with this project..

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jimbor In reply to Sleeper77 [2014-09-05 20:11:43 +0000 UTC]

I understand about real world considerations.
very much appreciate the work you are able to do .Look forward to the results of your weekend work

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