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Sylvie and Taryn look to the rebuilding of their town after a horrible series of riots devestate the city center. Plans are in place that will see it better than ever before.Related content
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When had Cindy turned into a mermaid? Please show me where this is written.
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snore23.deviantart.com/art/Merβ¦. That's where it all began.
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Yeah, well, now I knowΒ how Megan, but not how Cindy turned into a mermaid.
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Cindy turned in pretty much the same way. I got pretty rushed when I finished it.
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Side note: I've been retained to create a story telling how Cindy made it to being a mermaid. If I receive permission, I will post it on this account.
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I really like this chapter. You have created a bigger picture. The emotions of the town are now starting to show instead of just a small few. Awesome job.
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A well thought out look at Taryn and her feelings on what happened. I'm glad you wrote that
conversation between her and her mom. You suprised me with the bit about the saddle, but you showed that Taryn is still recovering from her feelings of "rape" at being ridden and controlled
by Nightshade. As for Sara, her actions show a guilty persons trying to make amends.
A great and touching chapter!
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Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.
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You are welcome. I mentioned Taryns feeling "raped" to , and I applauded you for your bravery in tackling such a subject in the previous story. You have handled
quite a few sensitive themes very carefully, and with heart.
I'm glad that it was addressed in this chapter. Looking forward to what is coming up. Keep up the great work!
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