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SoImStillUnsureA Promise She Made With Death
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Description She was conceived on the edge of a mirror,
lined with pretty white lace,
that burned the inside of her parents' nostrils.

She was born with a hole in her heart,
that the doctor's never noticed,
and no one bothered to fill.

She met Death on the playground,
when kindergarten was bending her bones.
Enticed by the glinting of his scythe,
as it preyed on a malformed baby rabbit.
She made a pinky promise with him,
swearing that she'd never forget his face.

He came and went,
swayed by corpse breaths
and east-coast winds,
but always leaving her alone.

He showed her how to hurt,
in the worst kind of way.
And each time,
he paid her a visit,
he'd take someone back with him.

She often asked where he would go,
when his curled claws would drag her mother,
her father,
her sister,
and every love she'd ever fallen for,
into the darkness that he crawled from.

All he'd say,
was that she'd find them again someday,
and that he would take her to them, personally.

But as February,
of her fourteenth year,
threatened to consume her whole,
burying her in the snowdrifts and icy winds
of its cavernous belly,
she saw him for the last time.

Without a second glance at her,
he swept her ink colored rabbit
into the crook of his scythe,
and turned his back on her.

For six years,
she waited,
for the promise he'd made.
To see all the ones she'd lost
to his bony grasp.

She had no friends,
no lovers,
no kin,
no pets,
only waiting,
alone,
for the day that he'd take her home.

As she withered into her twenties,
back breaking,
and hair graying,
not from age,
but from the weight of the world,
she began to lose hope.

He was all she'd ever known,
and now,
even he had left her alone.

She wept for him to take her,
as she slept in alleyways,
stained with his fingerprints.

She begged for him to find her,
as she fell on the steps of a church,
whose doors she couldn't approach.

She whimpered for him to save her,
as she stumbled,
heart cold,
and stomach hot,
to the edge of her iron-wrought balcony.

As the ice,
and the concrete,
gathered her into their embrace,
finally,
he came for her.

A twisted smile,
on torn and rotted lips,
and his scythe lined with frost,
and her blood.
He gathered her into his arms,
whispering that all was well,
as his cloak pulled darkness down to close her eyes.
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Comments: 285

SoImStillUnsure In reply to ??? [2011-03-20 03:28:54 +0000 UTC]

It was referencing her parents' usage of cocaine, but thank you.

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Atropaean In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2011-03-20 03:46:36 +0000 UTC]

ahh got it

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RavenBlackfaith In reply to ??? [2011-01-22 04:12:49 +0000 UTC]

its rlly good i luv it awsome job!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to RavenBlackfaith [2011-01-22 06:15:41 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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jazzydragonfly3 In reply to ??? [2011-01-20 01:51:23 +0000 UTC]

Great job

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to jazzydragonfly3 [2011-01-20 02:33:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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BFRyuu306 In reply to ??? [2011-01-02 19:06:37 +0000 UTC]

i love it!!!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to BFRyuu306 [2011-01-02 21:30:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you ao much!

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BFRyuu306 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2011-01-03 00:53:25 +0000 UTC]

yup

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Skillet-Fan In reply to ??? [2010-11-21 03:04:19 +0000 UTC]

OMG!!!! amazin doll!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Skillet-Fan [2010-11-21 03:07:39 +0000 UTC]

Glad you liked it. Thank you.

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JingHigurashi In reply to ??? [2010-11-07 17:50:33 +0000 UTC]

It's rare for Poetry to compete with the pretty pictures on Deviant, most of it just gets brushed aside. Yours didn't.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to JingHigurashi [2010-11-07 19:11:04 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you so much! That's so flattering. I`m glad you enjoyed it.

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DarkWings512 [2010-11-06 22:15:21 +0000 UTC]

I am jealous of you usage of metaphors.

Just wonderful. <3

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to DarkWings512 [2010-11-06 22:45:16 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thanks so much!

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DarkWings512 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-11-06 23:11:49 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome~

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mellowghost [2010-11-06 16:24:28 +0000 UTC]

I didn't get the bit about the mirror in the beginning.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to mellowghost [2010-11-06 22:04:28 +0000 UTC]

She was conceived on the edge of a mirror,
lined with pretty white lace,
that burned the inside of her parents' nostrils.

The pretty white lace that burns her parents' nostrils is cocaine. Often done off of mirrors. It was just the intro of what kind of life she was born into.

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mellowghost In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-11-07 04:17:35 +0000 UTC]

AWESOME! That makes perfect sense now!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to mellowghost [2010-11-07 04:25:00 +0000 UTC]

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Jinai In reply to ??? [2010-11-06 09:06:39 +0000 UTC]

"But as February,
of her fourteenth year,
threatened to consume her whole,
burying her in the snowdrifts and icy winds
of it's cavernous belly,
she saw him for the last time."

Typo there, do you see?

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Jinai [2010-11-06 22:40:20 +0000 UTC]

Yup! Thanks for pointing it out.

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Jinai In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-11-07 11:51:49 +0000 UTC]

Anytime!

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ShadowWolfDreamer In reply to ??? [2010-11-02 16:42:01 +0000 UTC]

I've come back to read it at least 7 times. It is amazingly well written, and the words and thoughts used are well expressed. Honestly, you'd have to be famous by now.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to ShadowWolfDreamer [2010-11-02 18:58:13 +0000 UTC]

B'aww Thank you so much! That's so flattering.

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MissAllys In reply to ??? [2010-10-28 19:00:38 +0000 UTC]

Doesn't make any sense at all, but that's just the best part.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to MissAllys [2010-10-28 21:15:25 +0000 UTC]

Well Thanks!

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shadowdragon4 In reply to ??? [2010-10-28 03:57:45 +0000 UTC]

Awesum. ^^ Very nicely written~

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to shadowdragon4 [2010-10-28 03:58:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much.

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shadowdragon4 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-28 04:08:13 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely no problem. ^^

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Maestro-Kavi In reply to ??? [2010-10-26 22:17:48 +0000 UTC]

Very lovely.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Maestro-Kavi [2010-10-26 22:21:53 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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AleciaMaria [2010-10-26 09:22:06 +0000 UTC]

It was very interesting and unique. But maybe you could have done more with it, that's just my opinion though. I still liked it anyway

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to AleciaMaria [2010-10-26 13:16:46 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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born-gorgeous [2010-10-26 06:58:11 +0000 UTC]

great!! i didnt get the bunny bit at first because i think i read it wrong, but then i got it! its awesomee!!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to born-gorgeous [2010-10-26 13:17:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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born-gorgeous In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-27 07:00:09 +0000 UTC]

anytime!

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Fozzymillow In reply to ??? [2010-10-26 00:39:29 +0000 UTC]

Even though this was very sad it was very, very well written.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Fozzymillow [2010-10-26 01:16:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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greenargyleninja In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 18:34:03 +0000 UTC]

This could make a graphic novel.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to greenargyleninja [2010-10-25 22:42:19 +0000 UTC]

Oooh...purty Thanks!

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CyberPhantom [2010-10-25 18:18:47 +0000 UTC]

It reads well. It doesn't clunk.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to CyberPhantom [2010-10-25 22:42:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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OoOEmotionOoO In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 18:04:31 +0000 UTC]

that is so sweet!!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to OoOEmotionOoO [2010-10-25 22:42:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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Chorus-Angel In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 17:41:43 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is breathtaking,
I really enjoyed reading this!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Chorus-Angel [2010-10-25 22:43:31 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thanks so much!

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Chorus-Angel In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-27 17:24:49 +0000 UTC]



x

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ThaiArtist In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 17:28:02 +0000 UTC]

lovely,,,doesnt need to make sence

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to ThaiArtist [2010-10-25 22:43:40 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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