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SoImStillUnsureA Promise She Made With Death
Published: 2010-10-24 18:08:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 12525; Favourites: 544; Downloads: 144
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Description She was conceived on the edge of a mirror,
lined with pretty white lace,
that burned the inside of her parents' nostrils.

She was born with a hole in her heart,
that the doctor's never noticed,
and no one bothered to fill.

She met Death on the playground,
when kindergarten was bending her bones.
Enticed by the glinting of his scythe,
as it preyed on a malformed baby rabbit.
She made a pinky promise with him,
swearing that she'd never forget his face.

He came and went,
swayed by corpse breaths
and east-coast winds,
but always leaving her alone.

He showed her how to hurt,
in the worst kind of way.
And each time,
he paid her a visit,
he'd take someone back with him.

She often asked where he would go,
when his curled claws would drag her mother,
her father,
her sister,
and every love she'd ever fallen for,
into the darkness that he crawled from.

All he'd say,
was that she'd find them again someday,
and that he would take her to them, personally.

But as February,
of her fourteenth year,
threatened to consume her whole,
burying her in the snowdrifts and icy winds
of its cavernous belly,
she saw him for the last time.

Without a second glance at her,
he swept her ink colored rabbit
into the crook of his scythe,
and turned his back on her.

For six years,
she waited,
for the promise he'd made.
To see all the ones she'd lost
to his bony grasp.

She had no friends,
no lovers,
no kin,
no pets,
only waiting,
alone,
for the day that he'd take her home.

As she withered into her twenties,
back breaking,
and hair graying,
not from age,
but from the weight of the world,
she began to lose hope.

He was all she'd ever known,
and now,
even he had left her alone.

She wept for him to take her,
as she slept in alleyways,
stained with his fingerprints.

She begged for him to find her,
as she fell on the steps of a church,
whose doors she couldn't approach.

She whimpered for him to save her,
as she stumbled,
heart cold,
and stomach hot,
to the edge of her iron-wrought balcony.

As the ice,
and the concrete,
gathered her into their embrace,
finally,
he came for her.

A twisted smile,
on torn and rotted lips,
and his scythe lined with frost,
and her blood.
He gathered her into his arms,
whispering that all was well,
as his cloak pulled darkness down to close her eyes.
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Comments: 285

Aeyun In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 17:16:32 +0000 UTC]

It's funny how I allways come across your writings, read and fav, and then get surprised when I find it again in my Messages...

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Aeyun [2010-10-25 22:44:29 +0000 UTC]

Well I'm glad you enjoy them.

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CutDownTheStrings In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 17:16:09 +0000 UTC]

This is so haunting. This is honestly an amazing piece of writing.
I think I know what's going into my favourites!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to CutDownTheStrings [2010-10-25 22:45:24 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you so much.

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KittyKillAll-Art In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 16:39:24 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful in a dark kind of way. Thank you for sharing this lovely writing with us.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to KittyKillAll-Art [2010-10-25 22:45:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Ashcoholic In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 16:18:45 +0000 UTC]

Poor girl... experiencing death in her life. one after the other, until no one's left.. wishing for "death" just so she could see them all again.. to have him take her to them through death.. poor girl.. nice poem.. a lot of feelings into it.. nicely done!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Ashcoholic [2010-10-25 22:47:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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msmist In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 16:18:03 +0000 UTC]

This is absolutely gorgeous. I am in awe right now- it's so beautiful and discriptive and just...wow.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to msmist [2010-10-25 22:49:00 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it.

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Kinthinia In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 16:13:44 +0000 UTC]

It makes perfect sense. I was half expecting this to be the zombie story you polled about but it wasn't. I really enjoyed. The imagery is simply breathtaking, and the emotion is there with a little suspense, waiting to see if Death would keep his word or not.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Kinthinia [2010-10-25 22:52:43 +0000 UTC]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you!

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JamFisher In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 16:13:35 +0000 UTC]

Holy SH*T! This gave me goosebumps, it is so amazing! I think I am gonna read it again now, just because!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to JamFisher [2010-10-25 22:50:34 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you so much!

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JamFisher In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-26 13:54:52 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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zephyrwolfen In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 16:13:22 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful work - I love how it conveys the way death's been with her all her life, and the way it's written is just brilliant <3

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to zephyrwolfen [2010-10-25 22:53:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.

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zephyrwolfen In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-27 10:57:18 +0000 UTC]

No problem at all, and I did indeed love it <3

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NIkly In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 16:00:06 +0000 UTC]

I think it's really good. You're really good at writing.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to NIkly [2010-10-25 22:51:08 +0000 UTC]

Aww, thank you!

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ItisjustI In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 15:21:33 +0000 UTC]

It's hideous... and I don't mean that as an insult. I mean... this was the most tragic, beautiful, heart-rending, ugly, meaningful, despair-inducing, incredible thing that I have read in as long as I can remember...

I wish I'd seen it Friday night, in time for Sleepout Saturday, a benefit event to raise money for the homeless...

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to ItisjustI [2010-10-25 22:55:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, so.

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ItisjustI In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-25 22:56:13 +0000 UTC]

I did, and you're welcome.

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darkharlequin11 In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 15:09:30 +0000 UTC]

Whoa! That is some powerful stuff!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to darkharlequin11 [2010-10-25 22:51:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Diamond-Shine In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 13:44:28 +0000 UTC]

Undescribably awesome.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Diamond-Shine [2010-10-25 14:01:25 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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Diamond-Shine In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-25 20:50:18 +0000 UTC]

Huh, thank YOU for sharing.

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HugoMasters In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 13:01:06 +0000 UTC]

very twisted and very enjoyable

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to HugoMasters [2010-10-25 14:01:41 +0000 UTC]

Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks.

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EpsilonVIII In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 10:57:27 +0000 UTC]

Excellent work! I'm glad she got what she wanted, even though it was a grim thing to want.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to EpsilonVIII [2010-10-25 14:01:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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MonsieurCrazy [2010-10-25 10:31:19 +0000 UTC]

It's a beautiful story, in a haunting and tragic sort of way.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to MonsieurCrazy [2010-10-25 14:02:05 +0000 UTC]

Very.

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Vurquoise [2010-10-25 10:20:20 +0000 UTC]

this makes me so sad, but it's a lovely piece of literature (:

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Vurquoise [2010-10-25 14:02:24 +0000 UTC]

Sorry for the sadness, but thank you.

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Rayoson In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 09:00:05 +0000 UTC]

Reminded me of a story drawn by an artist, in a compilation for Dark Horse: Facebook Vol.2
I think. A well typed poem all in all with beautiful workings of telling a short story with perfect placement and spacing. If whenever and artist considers to draw a story to this, they'll be blessed to fine inspiration easy to find from reading this.

-time take all, but time gives all

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Rayoson [2010-10-25 09:08:56 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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toosexyformyshirt In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 08:20:54 +0000 UTC]

wow, this is really good, :]

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to toosexyformyshirt [2010-10-25 08:22:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much.

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DJChocolate-Lover In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 08:19:01 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow, this is brilliant writing.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to DJChocolate-Lover [2010-10-25 08:23:00 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Vampire-Pheonix In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 07:40:21 +0000 UTC]

amazing just simply amazing well written i love the way its formed and presented great work again

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Vampire-Pheonix [2010-10-25 07:52:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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Vampire-Pheonix In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-26 09:18:03 +0000 UTC]

you're very welcome ^-^

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stilldo230597 In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 06:52:50 +0000 UTC]

i love the death.. and this is greaaat love it

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to stilldo230597 [2010-10-25 07:01:47 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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stilldo230597 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-26 08:16:30 +0000 UTC]

ur welcome

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Morna In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 06:06:15 +0000 UTC]

simply beautiful, this tells quite the story

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Morna [2010-10-25 06:10:36 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much.

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