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when he asked me how i wanted him to build the house,i answered him truthfully.
i said i wanted the pillars to be made
of pages from every book ever written,
curled in on themselves until
they could hold a roman arch.
pour words, strong and weak, into
the earth instead of cement-
let it be flexible to adapt
to pressure.
build the walls from the ground up
through prose supporting the bricks
layered by memories forged
along the path we took
to arrive at eden.
tilt poems into pyramids above
our heads, ceilings just high enough
to be within earshot of every
laugh we'll ever make.
empty emotions into a template
of a window and slide it into
place without a way to get it
back out.
after i was done, we stood on that
vacant lot, ambiguous thoughts
flitting across his face and down
into my fingertips.
he told me i was crazy.
he told me i was beautiful.
he told me he would build it.
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Comments: 80
LiliWrites [2015-08-21 05:41:24 +0000 UTC]
Nice work here! That end really brought everything together. Congrats on the DD feature!
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StarlightComet In reply to LiliWrites [2015-08-21 15:26:33 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!Β
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stargirl2791 [2015-07-29 04:13:27 +0000 UTC]
i don't know if i'm crying or drooling or flying but this is freaking incredible. Β i was hooked from the second stanza on..... wow.
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StarlightComet In reply to stargirl2791 [2015-07-29 16:07:02 +0000 UTC]
Oh, thank you very much! I'm happy it evoked such a response from you
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stargirl2791 In reply to StarlightComet [2015-07-30 00:54:17 +0000 UTC]
*rereads and rereads and rereads*
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peaseblossoms [2015-07-21 18:59:15 +0000 UTC]
Congratulations!!!! this is BEAUTIFUL and you absolutely deserve the DD <33333
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StarlightComet In reply to peaseblossoms [2015-07-21 19:02:09 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much
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peaseblossoms In reply to StarlightComet [2015-07-21 20:51:58 +0000 UTC]
You're so welcome!!!!!
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Blacksand459 [2015-07-21 15:17:39 +0000 UTC]
Suffice it to say...that this poem resonates with my me.Β
Congrats on your DD!! Β Outstanding piece of writing.Β
I love this stanza especially:Β
tilt poems into pyramids above
our heads, ceilings just high enough
to be within earshot of every
laugh we'll ever make.
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StarlightComet In reply to Blacksand459 [2015-07-21 16:36:42 +0000 UTC]
I'm so, so glad it has such an impact on you, thank you
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StarlightComet In reply to wispy-blue [2015-07-21 03:11:51 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much
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Katieline [2015-07-20 19:46:18 +0000 UTC]
Now THAT is poetry. (also one of the few DDs I've ever agreed with)
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StarlightComet In reply to Katieline [2015-07-20 20:06:17 +0000 UTC]
Aw shucksΒ Β I myself didn't really think it was anything special but I'm really glad you think so highly of it!
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LindArtz [2015-07-20 19:46:12 +0000 UTC]
Love it!! Brilliant work, very much deserving of a DD! Congratulations to you!
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StarlightComet In reply to LindArtz [2015-07-20 20:05:32 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much I appreciate the support!
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DubiousTemp [2015-07-20 16:29:42 +0000 UTC]
I really loved the last line. Congrats on the DD.
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StarlightComet In reply to DubiousTemp [2015-07-20 18:11:29 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much
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Wells-And-Things [2015-07-20 15:13:33 +0000 UTC]
A very well deserved DD. This poem is outstanding and beautiful. A true statement toward the beauty of words.
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StarlightComet In reply to Wells-And-Things [2015-07-20 15:28:52 +0000 UTC]
Oh, wow, thank you so much
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Masumamirza [2015-07-20 14:20:11 +0000 UTC]
Wow....great idea.....Nicely penned....Keep on writing and keep on sharing with us lovely .....Check out my poems too...I hope you will find the enjoyable
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StarlightComet In reply to Masumamirza [2015-07-20 15:13:34 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much, I'll definitely check some of them out when I have the time!
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Sagittarianism [2015-07-20 13:00:31 +0000 UTC]
It doesn't need any more. It speaks volumes as it is.
Beautiful piece. Never stop writing.
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StarlightComet In reply to Sagittarianism [2015-07-20 15:13:00 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much, I won't
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Sagittarianism In reply to StarlightComet [2015-07-20 18:49:18 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome. Yay!
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Gryffgirl [2015-07-20 10:38:00 +0000 UTC]
Very beautiful poem, which I truly appreciate as a bibliophile! Β Congratulations on your DD!
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StarlightComet In reply to HaganeSora [2015-07-20 15:12:33 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much
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StarlightComet In reply to Lintu47 [2015-07-20 15:12:24 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, you too!
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Lintu47 In reply to StarlightComet [2015-07-23 11:48:17 +0000 UTC]
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul [2015-07-20 07:29:54 +0000 UTC]
Absolutely beautiful Congrats on your DDΒ
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StarlightComet In reply to Mrs-Freestar-Bul [2015-07-20 15:11:29 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, I'd actually forgotten I'd written this
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul In reply to StarlightComet [2015-07-20 15:32:22 +0000 UTC]
I'm happy someone found it
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brassteeth [2015-07-20 07:13:01 +0000 UTC]
god bless him for building it, and for allowing you to dream...
Nice piece, congrats on your D.D!
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StarlightComet In reply to brassteeth [2015-07-20 15:11:09 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much!
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RogueMudblood [2015-05-13 14:46:09 +0000 UTC]
This is an excellent piece. I love the imagery you've used here, and I really like the way you can feel the emotion. Thank you for sharing this.
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StarlightComet In reply to RogueMudblood [2015-05-13 21:10:49 +0000 UTC]
Oh, thank you, I'm glad you liked it so much
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NykiiLynn [2015-01-21 14:31:04 +0000 UTC]
i LOVE the ending. OH MY GOD its so beautiful.!!!Β
great jobbbbbbbbb DDDDDD
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