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Vegetabelle — 'Unremarkable'
Published: 2012-08-04 01:20:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 429; Favourites: 11; Downloads: 1
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The notebook paper and tea stain base layer was created by and the paint textures and font are available on PicMonkey.comRelated content
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I personally love the background and the colors of text. Poetry has its visual aspects and also placement of words. Here the visual aspects are remarkably well highlighted. Good job. Same with the font and font size.
Now about the poem. Since the poem is so customized, the first line makes you think that the dream you had is this work itself ans its first line is your dream's first line. The rest of the work with its meaning and depth is good enough and has a deep and interesting meaning. It depicts what is the thought, vision of many artists.
Not to be called unremarkable. YET, the ending does not do justice to the poem in my opinion. It is just too abrupt and other than people having known this feeling, it does not induce that spark in the reader.
That is all.
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Thank you! That is actually incredibly helpful. I appreciate the constructive criticism. It helps me improve!
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I hope it does. I am always honest about comments 
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The watch was my pleasure. ^_^
I'm glad you're honest. I'd rather honest criticism than false flattery.
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Haha that is my statement
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I think your words will always be worth remark.
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