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PROLOGUE PAGEEEE. I didn't want to add one, but I feel that this comic is complicated enough to need one. I also want to try and avoid confusion. But if you don't understand something here, it will most likely be explained in the comic. Or you can ask. Whichever.
So yes, not such an exciting page, sorry! >_< But once I have some other things out of the way, I will be uploading pages, hopefully regularly. I wouldn't want to waste the summer not working on pages.
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Thanks for comments, favs, and those who read and enjoy this comic! Also, critiques are very much appreciated!
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Thank you! And I used this font- [link]
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awesome! Thank you so much. I've been looking for a font like that for a long time
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Interesting back story, can't wait for the next page! c:
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Ooh, this looks really interesting!
The storyline is great already, and the past-tense, this-is-my-story idea makes it even more intriguing - I can't wait to read on!
If I may make a few slight critiques? I know you requested it, but some people prefer to be asked first
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Thank you! And no, in fact I'd love it if you'd critique! I'm glad are excited for the next page. :3
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Okay, here we go
The background choice is really cool and effective - even if it's only a stock texture, it's still well-chosen and effective. When added to the faint luminosity behind the text, it provides an exciting, enticing image, which was what drew me to look at the page in the first place - well done on that count!
Now, onto the text itself; overall, the summary is short but effective, and as I said before, it draws the reader in well. You've managed to capture the essence of what is clearly a very complicated, very diverse storyline in a few short paragraphs, which is no mean feat! Punctuation is also good, barely any mistakes ^ .^ The last line/s work quite well, with a sudden finish, but perhaps it's a little over-working of the ellipse? It just seems to go on a little with all the "Nearly... Obliterated... Nearly... Wolved..." - but don't take it to heart!
Along the lines of grammatical improvement, here are a few more changes that could have been made - not many, and you did really great; they're only small things
Each individual species' hang on a thread to each individual species hangs on a thread due to no possessive apostrophe needed for 'species' and the fact that the sentence refers to singular, 'each individual', the 'hang' needs an S.
Simply kill the living specie off to simply kill the living species off - just a typo, I think ;]
Each species is 'blessed' with one of their species to each species is 'blessed' with one of their own - just to avoid excessive repetition of 'species'.
And my life to, has nearly passed to and my life, too, has nearly passed - correcting the 'to's; when you're saying it in the context of 'something else', it's 'too', not 'to', but you probably knew that!
Now, that may sound like a lot, but really this is great, and you've done so well. If you go through any piece of literature, by anyone - author or artist - you'll come up with a dozen mistakes like this. Considering, you've done really well!
Look forward to seeing more!
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Thank you very much for the critique! The corrections you made are very helpful. ^^ And yes, the word "specie" got repeated a lot...
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No problem - trust me, it was as much fun to give it, and I know how much it means to receive one
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It for sure does mean a lot. ^^
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