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Published: 2005-06-05 14:38:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 33; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description Enter the mind that holds me captive,
But remember to keep the escape route clear.
Hold onto something to keep you stable,
Tread careful and quiet so that it doesn’t hear.

Try to hold on as your sanity escapes you,
Don’t worry the exit’s not too far.
Once you reach for the doorway
And step out and breath you’ll realise how lucky you are.

It’s gripping your head,
Ripping you apart,
Twisting emotions,
Hurting your heart,
Breaking your bones,
Turning you to mush,
Stopping your breathing,
But wait-shush!

It’s heard you; it’s searching,
It’s seen where you are,
Run! Escape! Get out!
Take a left at my heart’s scar.

Search for the sign and don’t look back,
Don’t let it seek and capture you too.
Open the door it’s not too far,
I told you not to come, but you wouldn’t listen would you?
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Comments: 8

Kamuela [2005-06-06 14:58:14 +0000 UTC]

Breathe=breeth breath=breth ^^ nice poem

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xpythonx In reply to Kamuela [2005-06-06 15:13:29 +0000 UTC]

Breathe=breeth breath=breth...wah??????

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Kamuela In reply to xpythonx [2005-06-06 15:17:49 +0000 UTC]

Breathe (spelling) = Breeth (pronounciation)

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xpythonx In reply to Kamuela [2005-06-06 15:18:51 +0000 UTC]

thats not how you pronounce it *sigh*

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silver-sanity [2005-06-05 20:04:01 +0000 UTC]

I like it! im not really a poem critique but i think that the first two and last verses are the best.

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xpythonx In reply to silver-sanity [2005-06-06 15:14:30 +0000 UTC]

thanks ^___^!!! and also for the help on the problem with the invisble deviation! i will try that now!

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Mogjitsu [2005-06-05 15:56:03 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I really love that, especially the "Take a left at my heart’s scar" it just stands out so well, and nice double concepts.

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xpythonx In reply to Mogjitsu [2005-06-05 16:44:15 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

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