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Published: 2009-08-31 19:32:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 7260; Favourites: 138; Downloads: 38
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I want a wreck Ican connect with
some un-
settled sun
to be sung
and soon strung
from
strings
previously
unattached
a heartsong
plucked
in resplendent
collapse
breath snatched
in gasps
hands clasped
spanning gaps
and gulfs
engulfed
in our
grasp
a long longing
that laughs
as it lasts
we'll make
memories
(a thing
ofthe past)
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I can almost see you rapping this one as I read it. How nice to see rhymes being used without making me want to throw up.
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oh you.
i can't pick a favorite part
so i'll just mention how much i love
the whole thing.
(ps. i love it all.)
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i just love saying this aloud. it's so much fun. great job!!
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i lied.
sometimes frequent rhymes makes magic.
this may be one of those times.
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dfkldjfg THE SOUNDS
i read it out loud at least a thousand times
well, maybe only like five. amazing amazing amazing. the rhythm is ridiculously great and... yes. the sound repetition. yum yum.
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i love the way your writing moves.
and talk about some alliteration.
well done
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yes i spent the majority of this summer accidentally on hiatus.
i made it through half of my devWATCH list of deviations before developing what i believe to have been a stroke.
suffice it to say that the only prolonged damage seems to be a twitching in my eye.
haha.
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oh em jee. 
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thanks, dearheart
whatever order works best for you
is fine by me
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Well written 'n quite superb, I'd say so myself.
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As always, words cannot express how it makes me feel. So I'll just add it to my favorites.
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absolutely beautiful!!!
and in response to your authors comment he should be writing about a tree who whispers to him about you, which i guess in essence is writing about you. so yes.
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haha thanks, love
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anytime cutie pie!
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something about your writing makes me want to fave every single fucking piece.
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and feel free
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we'll make
memories
(a thing of
the past)
bravo
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hands clasped
spanning gaps
and gulfs
engulfed
in our grasp
Stanzas like that are why I'd stalk you if I had the money
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I'd be willing to chip in
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And this is where paypal comes in handy
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Ha ha! This is a very likable poem... something about it reminds me of quick-played jazz and wandering thoughts, like dust... Well done!
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That was cool. I really liked that piece.
a heartsong
plucked
in resplendent
collapse
Really good stanza.
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Yep, memories are a thing of the past. As is knowledge, which is made from past experience. We only own the present really! Swift and sonorous poem i like it
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thank you for both
the compliments and comments.
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I agree with Shane, this could be a manic chant.
The last stanza is punnishingly good.
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