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YouInventedMe — given up by ghosts
Published: 2009-08-31 19:32:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 7260; Favourites: 138; Downloads: 38
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I want a wreck Ican connect with
some un-
settled sun
to be sung
and soon strung
from
strings
previously
unattached
a heartsong
plucked
in resplendent
collapse
breath snatched
in gasps
hands clasped
spanning gaps
and gulfs
engulfed
in our
grasp
a long longing
that laughs
as it lasts
we'll make
memories
(a thing
ofthe past)
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breath snatched
in gasps
hands clasped
spanning gaps
and gulfs
engulfed
in our grasp
a long
longing
that laughs
as it lasts
This whole piece is beautiful, and this is my favorite part. Which, due to your splendid form, is like saying I like the middle of a sentence better than the beginning or end, but that's not really what I meant.
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thankyouthankyouthankyou!
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Excellent opening and closing strophes. That really resonates, wanting a wreck you can connect with, and then making memories a thing of the past. You're quite adept at capturing the universals of human experience.
P.S re the author's comment: I say, yes. He most certainly should, I assert that it's the only gentlemanly response possible given the circumstances.
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The logic of it is infallible.
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shouldn't be too hard to find. love your logical comment.
this poem almost reads like an esoteric audition.
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Love the sounds! You're so good with them :]
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love the artist's comment. oh, the dilemmas of a writer.
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I love this! great compositions you got out there. I always wished to read about the term "strings attached" in a poem therefore thank you! it was beautiful! your Author's Comments is very funny at first read, but I hope it's not a sad case.
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oh, it's always a sad case.
and thank you, love.
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it should be a never! never a sad case with shiny Shane
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It was weird. I started this poem with "I'm not going to like this..." and ended it with a
breath snatched
in gasps
hands clasped
spanning gaps
I love the casual nature of the rhyme.
we'll make
memories
(a thing of
the past)
I just. Liked this?
Also, your artist's comments made me smile for some reason. I'm in the weirdest mood, apparently.
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haha
glad to have turned you around
and I'm always in support of
weirdness
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I like 'un-/settled sun' and 'strung/from/strings'
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i remembered my need to breath when i was finished reading.
beautiful as always.
(do you listen to sage francis at all?)
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thanks
and I do indeed
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This is really, really fantastic. I read it out loud twice....possibly my favorite of your poems so far.
Yes, I'm a fan
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your comment put it into a total different perspective for me...the unknown character. It is really good!
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makes me think of lake-side thoughts.
beautifully done
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I could feel the rhythm in your poem, and those words are truly fantastic. You have a true talent; I look forward to seeing more of your work.
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very much appreciated
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breath snatched
in gasps
hands clasped
spanning gaps
and gulfs
engulfed
in our grasp
a long
longing
that laughs
as it lasts
is my favourite, but the whole things skims like a cold rapid over smooth rocks...
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I'm no such thing
but I appreciate the sentiment
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once again..i adore youre poetry..i adore you.
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mmmm... do you send out all your invitations in gold leaf?!?!
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just yours, love
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My mental ears thrummed with joy when they heard this. Love it, love it, love it. <3
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