bokubaka In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 05:32:07 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful... it sounds so nice.

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YouInventedMe In reply to bokubaka [2009-09-01 10:54:55 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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testsubjectLILY In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 04:58:10 +0000 UTC]

I personally reacted more to the author's comments than the actual written piece--but it's great too,
don't get me wrong.
Hahha. Keep up the wit

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YouInventedMe In reply to testsubjectLILY [2009-09-01 10:54:49 +0000 UTC]

thanks... I think. haha.

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Tuttlebird In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 03:04:44 +0000 UTC]

we'll make
memories
(a thing of
the past

I love the ending, very beautiful.

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YouInventedMe In reply to Tuttlebird [2009-09-01 03:07:01 +0000 UTC]

thank ya kindly

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Tuttlebird In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-09-01 03:13:18 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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IIIXII In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 02:15:01 +0000 UTC]

Wow. That's some slick verse there.
It all just rolled right off my tongue as I read it.
Great job.

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YouInventedMe In reply to IIIXII [2009-09-01 02:15:22 +0000 UTC]

much obliged

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luminousmoon In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 02:13:20 +0000 UTC]

the flow was wonderful

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YouInventedMe In reply to luminousmoon [2009-09-01 02:13:39 +0000 UTC]

thanks, love

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thebratprincess In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 02:06:05 +0000 UTC]

I know what ya mean.

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YouInventedMe In reply to thebratprincess [2009-09-01 02:08:10 +0000 UTC]

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choirsoftheheavens In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 01:23:52 +0000 UTC]

it is so
beautiful
and deso-
late but
it some-
how makes
me want to
try being
hopeful
again. is
that a good
thing?

loved it.

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YouInventedMe In reply to choirsoftheheavens [2009-09-01 01:32:10 +0000 UTC]

th
an
ks

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choirsoftheheavens In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-09-01 02:46:21 +0000 UTC]

no
pr
ob
le
m.

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GetYourGrip In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 00:08:06 +0000 UTC]

poetry. music.
fucking. beautiful.
either. way.

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YouInventedMe In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-09-01 00:08:33 +0000 UTC]

thanks, you sweet talker you

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GetYourGrip In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-09-01 00:11:10 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome, though i'm a sour walker.

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arliddian In reply to ??? [2009-09-01 00:05:28 +0000 UTC]

I love the way you use sounds.

Really like this one, especially that last stanza. Gorgeous!

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YouInventedMe In reply to arliddian [2009-09-01 00:07:07 +0000 UTC]

thanks a lot

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Garnet-43 In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 22:54:15 +0000 UTC]

Like an avalanche of tongue-twisters.

Touching, in a breathless sort of way.

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YouInventedMe In reply to Garnet-43 [2009-08-31 23:55:14 +0000 UTC]

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b1gfan In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 22:09:36 +0000 UTC]

Would you be my wreck to connect to Shane

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YouInventedMe In reply to b1gfan [2009-08-31 22:10:29 +0000 UTC]

I already am!

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b1gfan In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-08-31 22:13:26 +0000 UTC]

*gasp* I always thought so

Somehow, even when I don't want to be right, it hurts too much to be wrong.

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spoems In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 20:56:01 +0000 UTC]

wow. it really moves around in the domain of sound.

i would almost put this is spoken word cat. it has such an old beat jazz style it would be great to hear you say it aloud.

"a heartsong
plucked
in resplendent
collapse"

boy do i feel this.

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YouInventedMe In reply to spoems [2009-08-31 22:02:47 +0000 UTC]

thanks, shane

as always, this is meant to
be read aloud. in fact, in that
way, I suppose I could submit practically
every piece of my writing under spoken word
(from a certain point on), as the line breaks
& spacing are almost all based around the
vocal delivery.

I read aloud as I write.

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CaronCecilia In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 20:55:42 +0000 UTC]

very, very nice work...

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YouInventedMe In reply to CaronCecilia [2009-08-31 22:01:40 +0000 UTC]

thanks, caron

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slmuse In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 20:53:47 +0000 UTC]

I wrote about him once and he wrote about her, then I stopped writing and now I'm singing ... That's the way of it I suppose :/

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YouInventedMe In reply to slmuse [2009-08-31 22:01:33 +0000 UTC]

what a world
what a world

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slmuse In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-09-01 06:20:09 +0000 UTC]

I love it of course ... your words I mean.

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selinergene In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 20:44:41 +0000 UTC]

we'll make memories.

amazing as usual

i love everything you do.

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YouInventedMe In reply to selinergene [2009-08-31 22:01:20 +0000 UTC]

thanks, love

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ladyshadowrage In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 20:27:16 +0000 UTC]

Perfect.

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YouInventedMe In reply to ladyshadowrage [2009-08-31 22:01:14 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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leebeeloves In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 20:21:04 +0000 UTC]

incredible. <3

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YouInventedMe In reply to leebeeloves [2009-08-31 22:01:06 +0000 UTC]

<3! thanks

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avfc4me In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 20:02:04 +0000 UTC]

I've had that same thought with different pronouns...


Another dreamy piece. The move must've suited you...

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YouInventedMe In reply to avfc4me [2009-08-31 22:00:57 +0000 UTC]

I'm still not sure how the move
has gone...but the words they
keep on coming. haha.

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Vertigo84 In reply to ??? [2009-08-31 19:58:53 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful ^_^...I don't get your author's comment though lol

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YouInventedMe In reply to Vertigo84 [2009-08-31 22:00:23 +0000 UTC]

haha thanks

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