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zephyrus7 — The Cockpit
Published: 2005-05-19 21:14:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 208; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 7
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Description I am inflating.
My head is a fat balloon,
And my heart, a pressured spring.

Listen - they are laughing.
Naked ugly boy is grasping chunks of air
In vicious hands, while shackles gnaw at tender heels.

Mr. Larynx, you struggle like
A lost baby, blind and scared,
Reaching out for mother dear.

But darling! She stands on the balcony,
Crumpled slips clutched in her fists.
She is beating on her britches.

Livid ugly boy, a trembling vase
Is plunging from the ceiling
And shattering in your throat.

Regurgitated broken glass;
An angry flock of seagulls
Has erupted from your mouth.

Sweet eyelid curves peeled back,
Mother's eyes are crying with glee,
As young men jeer in the frenzy below.

Projectile assaults escort their taunts, for,
Come dusk, lacklustre public lives
Grow tired of weary, ugly boy.

Birdsong yields, while southerly winds
Set chimes to croon to the sun's escape,
And footsteps fade into the night.

An ominous cloak of shadows resists
The piercing stare of a backlit moon,
Wherein lies lifeless, ugly boy.
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Comments: 12

angea [2005-07-11 23:41:40 +0000 UTC]

incredible. my concept of it is someone choking to death, but ehhh, I'm sure it's more (or completely different from/)than that. and as everyone else has said, YOUR IMAGERY IS SIMPLY AMAZING!

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the-beastie [2005-06-17 19:41:13 +0000 UTC]

That poor ugly dude. This is so bitter-harsh, and yet painfully morose.

"Listen - they are laughing.
Naked ugly boy is grasping chunks of air
In vicious hands, while shackles gnaw at tender heels."

Loved it loved it. "grasping" is perfect here - so close to 'gasping', what fantastic use of a double meaning. I love the gnawing and the "tender heels", your imagery is superb. Great stuff, really.

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zephyrus7 In reply to the-beastie [2005-06-19 13:34:55 +0000 UTC]

Glad to hear you enjoyed the poem (though I'm not sure if 'enjoyed' is the right word).
Thank you for your kind words

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princepoo [2005-06-07 17:52:25 +0000 UTC]

Naked ugly boy is grasping chunks of air
In vicious hands, while shackles gnaw at tender heels.

a little abrupt, but not detracting from the poem. the distraction almost adds to it.


Livid ugly boy, a trembling vase
Is plunging from the ceiling
And shattering in your throat.

i love that image. overall, it's very sad, but with fangs, such a vicious misery.

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zephyrus7 In reply to princepoo [2005-06-07 19:25:57 +0000 UTC]

Hehe thank you very much for the comment! Yea this is a completely different style to how I usually write. Nice to see it was reasonably effective

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TigerEyes04 [2005-06-04 20:46:16 +0000 UTC]

I really get quite a picture from this, very good poem I love the imagery I get from it. definitely

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zephyrus7 In reply to TigerEyes04 [2005-06-04 20:59:09 +0000 UTC]

Again, thank you! And I hope you enjoy all the others just as much

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TigerEyes04 In reply to zephyrus7 [2005-06-04 21:12:19 +0000 UTC]

I did

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IrishHippiePoet [2005-06-02 21:47:22 +0000 UTC]

i liked it a lot, you have suck a flair for this, and tis a thing I really wants!!! Gah.

>.<
Hilary Vida

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zephyrus7 In reply to IrishHippiePoet [2005-06-02 23:53:25 +0000 UTC]

Hehehe, thank you very much for the wonderful compliment! Maybe I should try some more of this style.

Do you have another deviantART account? Because you have exactly the same avatar as someone else I've seen before, but I can't remember who...

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feelinhungry [2005-05-21 02:36:05 +0000 UTC]

I'm afraid I'm not deep enough to entirely understand... I do, however, love your wording and imagery, as always.

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zephyrus7 In reply to feelinhungry [2005-05-25 11:04:50 +0000 UTC]

And as always, thank you

I'm all dried up at the moment

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