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Published: 2010-07-09 13:35:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 665; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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Edit: Critiques closed on this one. Please critique the latest WIP.WIP present for a one-to-one worker... critiques encouraged. I realize the head is too large, would prefer a redline rather than a "the head is too large", other than that written critiques are appreciated.
It's a horse btw. Still have to draw the tail in... and lots of other details. Will move to scraps later.
Original WIP has nips but I don't want mature content on my WIP so edited out that's why boob looks weird.
Acrylics.
Next WIP below
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Horse. Unicorn probably, if I get the write mood for it.
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Ooh, okay. Thanks for the answer.
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I can try a redline if you want-is the body directly side on, or at a slight angle?
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Oh man... I wonder if I still have my reference for this piece... damnit. One minute.
Oh thank god I add these things to my favourites.
[link] ... I scrunched it up a bit and anthro-ed the legs a bit, changed the angle of them to fit in the background.
But it seems to pretty much be directly side on save for the legs which are angled a bit towards the viewer. Or are supposed to be anyways
Thank you for the offer, eager to see
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Ok, redlining it at the moment-is the right leg still supposed to be crossed over like in the reference picture? Because I'm having a hard time seeing where it goes if so, it seems to be either too thin to fit, or as if there's a wrong bend in there somewhere-yellowing over the straight lines gets me this: [link]
My eyes aren't the best, so I might be missing something 
I'm doing a version with uncrossed legs, but can edit/do another later if they were supposed to be anyway.
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Clearly I've been staring at it too long, it's starting to look normal
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Took 'slightly' longer than said/expected, but here it is:
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Green line was the human foot outline, took my own photo and used it as reference for the legs/feet placement. As for the feet, I added in another bend/what looks like a joint, the part between ground and first bend from the toe (not sure if it was there before, couldn't really see)
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You went out and photographed your own feet!? You are committed to giving an amazing redline, aren't you!
Thank you, that looks about right!
When I finish the piece do you mind in the description I have a link to the redlines (if you also don't mind me saving them to imageshack) with your name attached? I like to do that with my art for some reason
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It's not like it took much time or effort, and if I'm going to be giving anatomy advice to others, I'd like to be certain it's actually correct
Feel free! Glad I could help
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Ha you know I had to get the original out to see what I was doing. I smudge things that I don't know what the hell they are usually 
This is what I intended: [link]
I think. Somehow that doesn't seem much better than how you saw it. I'd like to believe I didn't draw the foot like that.
It looks okay when you don't outline it but when you do
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Ahh I see! Not long after posting I wondered if that was it, but the legs looked too thin, so just carried on with what I was doing anyway
This is what I have for the rest of it:
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Two heads, the second is better and probably closer to what you wanted. This was used as reference: [link]
Hope it helps some
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I seem to have a problem drawing horse legs too thin, I got that same critique on my other horse picture.
I actually like the first head better.
I do want! But I would feel bad to ask you to do a second redline of the feet. But you are completely welcome to, but let's just say I absolutely do not have any expectations for you to.
Is there anything I could do for you in return?
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In that case, since I apparently forgot to link already, this was the first horse head: [link] The green line underneath was a human head size, if you were wondering, so I could get a better idea.
And sure, I'd be happy to, it will just be later on since I've to eat and do some other stuff for a few hours now. It's no problem-it's so rare for people to ask for (and actually accept) critique on DA I'm happy to do it
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