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BCRich40 β Improving Skills - Part 15
Published: 2012-10-09 19:33:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 39974; Favourites: 354; Downloads: 494
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And it's finally here!I have really mixed feelings about this comic. It feels like I have taken a step backwards, but in the other hand, I can see the improvement in so many levels. So if you can't see any improvement in this comic, I swear it's still there! It's just not visual.
The last panel was pain in the ass. I basically had to create Twilight out of nothing, because the sketch sucked so much. There's some annoying minor flaws, but nothing too serious.
I have nothing else to say about this part. There's nothing special, but it's needed to carry the plot forward. Next part won't be a long one either, but I'll write a journal entry about that during next few days. I believe there will be some major changes.
And if you would be so kind, could you point out any grammar mistakes you can find from the comic? That would help to improve my English skills, and it would make reading more comfortable. Thanks!
Enjoy!
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you don't even sound like a brony.. because the first thing the fandom and the show teaches is to avoid being judgmental and critical of other people/ponies, also who cares if its an alcohol there's been no harm from them drinking it so just leave the fact alone also like I said in another comment,
the combination of "wing-Boners" and Blushing is completely fan-made so there's no evidence to support any of it leading to erotic arousal. yes there is blushing in the show but the two are rarely ever combined.
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A brony is a fan of the show, nothing more. What you're describing in
"because the first thing the fandom and the show teaches is to avoid being judgmental and critical of other people/ponies"
are just common characteristics of a brony, not the arbitrary guidelines and regulations to getting and maintaining ownership of a brony licence (because there are none).
Not that I ever claimed being one.
"also who cares if its an alcohol there's been no harm from them drinking it"
Remember the part where Twilight states it can lead to death or death of brain cells? Yeah, case closed.
Besides that, it's obvious that the creator is attempting to Rainbow Dash in a aroused state. Why even argue? Its like arguing the color of the sky.
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"Twilight states it can lead to death or death of brain cells?" isΒ only earthen facts, you wouldn't know what affect it would have on a animated pony.
"Besides that, it's obvious that the creator is attempting to Rainbow Dash in a aroused state."
is also just a implied fiction, all Dash did was ask for Cider and the Creator (Character) answered by supplying it.
Also if you claim not to be a "Brony" why are you reading this comic in the first place?
I never said anything about "guidelines" you merely implied that as you have been this whole time.
also (as a joke) the sky is only that color because of the earth's oceans reflecting light at a much lighter tint.
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These "earthen facts" seem to have carried over to these animated pastel-color horses pretty well, minus the drama. The fact that it was further reinforced within the next few panels undermines your argument.
If that wasn't an aroused state, I don't know what is. It is SO obvious.
How in the world did I imply being a brony? By being here? Yes, I exist and have interests, so I must be a human. That is how much sense that makes.
*Facepalm* I never asked WHY the sky was blue, I was comparing what I was talking about to the stupidity of arguing what color the sky is. (It's blue)
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I didn't say Dash wasn't aroused, merely that there might be more than one reason for her Wings to stiffen.
Also the scriptwriter/drawer for the comic only showed Dash in a woozy state after draining the mug.
You didn't, I was just pointing out where you were commenting and there's nothing wrong with that.
And finally I'll just lol, because I did put in brackets "as a Joke" for your last statement because I thought I'd mess around a bit.
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In this fandom, sudden puffed up wings and blush is used to indicate arousal. There is nothing else. That is all it means, and all it can mean.
Then they went on to state that Dash had three others after that. Frankly, I'm surprised that Dash isn't dead. That stuff must have been WAY watered down.
For the record, I have neither confirmed nor denied being a brony. That was a parable of an argument to something brought up earlier.
I guess I didn't see that.
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Dash got drunk because she asked for fresh cider...
Twi was wondering about it and looked what alcohol is...
after a while we got to part when Dash asked what alcohol is and Twi probalby annoyed explained it by showing her...
as she said "I need break after all this madness" and since she knew what gonna happen and in book was "a huge amount of alcohol can..." so as Dash was still alive we can agree that one mug is not huge amount...
so reason to getting drung in fist place can be both explaining and relieving stress after what happened (I do it time to time too and its quite effective...)
Its mentioned that Dash had more than one mug, but didnΒ΄t noticed exact number... maybe I missed something?
And you are suprised that Dash isnΒ΄t Dead? We donΒ΄t know how much alcohol was in there as Cider can have 1,2 - 8,5% ABV (alcohol by volume) ...if we agree on some middle way... 4%... its like our 10Β° beer and after 4 beers its not something that gets you drunk to act like them...
And you canΒ΄t argue by that they are smaller than humans or something since the mug is scaled to their size not ours...
I would say, you are either brony or something that could be offensive because 1. you were here and 2. your avatar
anything else I missed?
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I'm not sure what your point was, despite reading all that. Alcohol is different for equines? What?
By the by, horses actually have an affinity for marijuana. I'd have thought that would be used instead of alcohol, but whatever.
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Well...I think the whole My Little Pony think is closer to humans than horses...
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They eat grass, are vegetarians, wear saddles, and all have towns with bad horse pun names. Nope, they are definitely closer to being equine.Β And these are just the reasons I came up withΒ off the top of my mind; there are bound to be many more.Β
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but their diet as been seen in few episodes remains the same... its complicated... everypony can have their own opinion on this...for me, there wasnΒ΄t a mistake
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Already the art style has boosted dramatically (far past my art skill). I also love your background gags.
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I LOVE how Twi is laying down in that last panel! You, good sir, are AWESOME!
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I'll do you one better Rainbow, Panel 9 Twi is just as adorable as Sleeping Twi is.
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Sleep, and dream of the Dash . . . or maybe just of not being hung over.
Or maybe dream of a time when I'm not kind of weirding myself out with my usage of definite articles. All these statements about "the Dash" just feel slimy against my fingers as I type. But I can't stop.
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Ouch.Sleeping like that must hurt,I tried that before and got a really sore neck.
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i had to sleep like that for about a week cuz i was sick and sleeping any other way made my insides hert and after that my neck felt awful
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3 4 and 5 is halerious because twi didnt even ask for the bucket and he gave one to her anyway because of hangovers
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Sorry, Twilight, but all of you in there was CUTE!
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Puking has never been so adorable!
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I never thought seeing a pony puke would be adorable but....
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Anyone else thing hung over and sick Twilight is super cute
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it remainsme of my firt time drunk...... it really suck hahahaha
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Y'know, I wish I could *poof* away a bucket of vomit. Instead of actually having to deal with it.
By the way, your doing great on improving both the art of the comics and your English. Keep up the hard work and you'll be fine.
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This comic is wonderful! Can't wait to see the next part.
P.S. Oh, Twilight... You're adorable, even with your head in the bucket...
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These series are amazing and you have improved soooo much!
The absolute best thing in my oppinion is dashies folded wings, they look so powerfull and majestical!
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lyra's speech bubble panel 1
all right is generally spelled with
two words
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Um... not to jump into conclusions... but the most times I saw "alright" it was as one word.
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That might have been the truest looking bad hangover in MLP comics evah.
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Yes she is Dashie but I think you should give her a bath. It would be easy with Lyra having magic.
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...Am I bad person when I think Twilight having a hangover and basically fainting is one of the cutest things ever? I mean, I still feel bad for her, but DAMN she's so cute!
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FWIW... I like it rather alot. I think you really did a great job of capturing TS' utter misery and hang overness.
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I know some things you're getting better at facial expressions, of course your drawing and your english
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I love the part where Twilight is sick :-p
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Yes, yes she is cute when she's sleeping.
Nice work. I'm really beginning to like the underplay of the relation of the ponies to the omniscient creator. Has it been fun, or just a good experience in general putting it together.
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I have to say, this is well executed.
As for changes, there is only 1 thing I would change, and it's kinda minor...
In panel 8, dash does a lot of talking. His head is facing Twilight, kind of implying that she's talking to her, which she is, but in the second speech bubble.
One can deduce that rainbow is talking to Lyra, because she says 'you and Twilight', with lyra being the only one dash could talk to, except twilight.
I originally thought rainbow was talking to Twilight, but realized otherwise when considering dash's words.
This is a little confusing for the viewer. As a general rule of thumb, unless the panel is an action panel, or a lot is taking place, draw the panel as it would look like at the state of the scene.
If a scene is too complicated to be represented in a single panel, at the start, perhaps split it up.
Some people get around this by drawing the head in different poses, though that can look downright weird and confusing.
Perhaps panel 8 would be best split up into 2 panels, one focusing on Lyra + Dash, with the other panel focusing on Dash + Twilight?
Comic structures are sometimes hard to get right, though I haven't done any yet.
As always, well done, and keep up the good work.
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Haha, then ending. I can't stop laughing.
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Twilight looks like a pony in need of a backrub or something.
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