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Tinselfire [2019-08-30 22:13:29 +0000 UTC]

Hello there.
I came from ProjectComment , but I see you have gotten some excellent feedback already, so apologies in advance if I repeat something.

The lighting is bright and nice, conveying a good atmosphere of the great outdoors on a sunny day. The direction does not seem consistent, however - for example the lighting on the leg is very uniform, giving the impression of a curved hose as much as a jointed limb. A shift in value like on the shawl/heuke would have conveyed the shape better.
The colour and lighting of the background scenery shows good depth with the shift towards blue and lavender in the distance. Perhaps the shadow of the tree line is somewhat dark, as contrast - especially in unbroken lines - easily draws attention, but that is about it. The horizon is however very low compared to the characters: Looking at the faces of both horse and rider, the horizon would be somewhere around the shoulders. But since the background is comparatively abstract compared to the foreground, that could also work as a stylistic decision: A blue background to make the earthy chatacter pop, regardless of how the construction of the scene would work in reality.

The saddle assembly is a bit unclear. Zooming in it seems there is a coat-coloured harness - although it could be the hard shade behind the foreleg - but it mostly looks like the saddle sits loose on the saddlecloth, and wouldn't make sense for the harness to pass underneath.
A squirrel seems an interesting decision. Orange makes for a good contrast against green.

A note on the title: In English "marching" refers to movement on foot, usually to a beat. It is more specific than "marcher" in French - though my French is a bit rusty, so could be wrong.

Lastly as has already been mentioned, the presentation with the sprigs of wheat is superb.

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fluoroid [2019-08-08 05:17:15 +0000 UTC]

Hello, I'm from ProjectComment !

Seriously, kudos to you in a traditional painting. That's really impressive as I usually only see traditional paintings of landscapes or portraits. This is so legit that you approached this scene in such a permanent medium.

Something you might consider for your next project is the rule of thirds. Generally referenced in photography, this rule greatly impacts art in general and can definitely affect any image in any medium. If you were to divide the painting into three even columns and rows, your current image is close to the intersections but not quite enough to be convincing. As seen here. You might try something like this instead. Bringing the character's face to the intersection and the building in the background down to the opposite intersection helps the viewer's eye move in a circle between them, keeping the viewer going between the two points of interest rather than being distracted by other shapes leading them off the canvas.

In this particular case doing something such as moving the canvas would in turn move the birds to the edge of the painting which you want to avoid. Edges draw attention but can lead the eye off the composition. In the case of the horse at the edge of the painting, it works because it and the character are the primary point of interest unlike the birds which are simply added as minute details. While the addition of the birds is nice, if you were to recrop the image as I suggested in the second reference, the birds that close to the edge would only serve to distract from your main characters.

Your greater rendering of detail in the wheat at the foreground is fantastic and really portrays a sense of depth of field. While the finely defined (stalk?) on the bottom left hand corner currently leads the eye to the character's foot, I would suggest it could be even more instrumental in the composition if you were to point it in the opposite direction to add greater containment of the main focus, ie. the horse and human.

Just keep in mind where you place things in the image and remember, the objects that fall of the intersections of each column and row will get the most attention. Use it to your advantage in either placement or framing. You're already skilled but being more intentional in your placement will increase the visual appeal of your llustrations even more. ^^

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JustALittleAmerican [2019-07-25 03:57:14 +0000 UTC]

I like all the colors in the shading.

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Raidark94 [2019-07-23 16:57:20 +0000 UTC]

Cool ^^

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Eye-of-Tichodroma [2019-07-23 12:49:14 +0000 UTC]

Nice touch with the wheat in front of the picture! I also like how the colours of the character's clothes match those of the field, it creates a sense of a bright and serene atmosphere. The one thing that doesn't look quite right to me is the birds - the extreme size difference between the ones in the front and the ones in the back as well as the arc in which they seem to fly give them a sense of dynamic movement that is good in itself but to me it doesn't quite fit calmness of the rest of the picture. They seem to come right at the viewer when a calmly flying flock might have been more fitting.

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EshiSnu [2019-07-23 05:55:17 +0000 UTC]

Hi, I saw this in the Project Comment folder and I thought I would leave a comment on it.

I don't think I have seen any one do a traditional painting of their OC. At least, not yet.  Its usually digital and I see a hand full of drawing. This is a unique piece. I commend you on your abilities and that you made a painting of your OC.  Your character reminds me of a medieval painting. 

I rather like that you have your OC off to the side.  It adds a lot of character and off sets the picture and gives visual interest. It lets the view get a feel of the personality. The positioning of the subject matter is important and says a lot about the story, environment and the character. I also like that you put some thing in the background and used the size of the character and the background to create a sense of depth and distance that the character has traveled. 

I had a couple of suggestions for your painting. Just a few little things that would really help to make this really stand even more.  The first being I would have had the building in the back, moved over towards the right side. Because, it's in the center, and the character and horse are to the left, it makes left side seem visually heavy and a little cluttered. I think the right side just needs a little more balance by having some thing there.

The other thing that I noticed is the horse seems a bit lager than an average horse? I am not familiar with your character or the type of horse Citrine is, so, I could be wrong about the size. Other than that, I think your proportions are okay.

I hope my comment help in some way. Thanks for sharing your art and your OC.

Keep it up! 
 

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Burke23 [2019-07-23 05:54:25 +0000 UTC]

Sweeeet

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RaySaysHi [2019-07-22 23:52:49 +0000 UTC]

WOAH!!  THIS PAINTING IS SO GOOD!  I absolutely adore it!  Great job! 

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