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There isno way
to escape
the sadness
of the soul.
It is an
unfulfilled
desire, trying
to deny this
overbearing
loneliness.
I pushed
you away,
into the corners
of my mind
where the memory
of you died.
-Brian Shuffett
June 19th, 2010
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Wow, thank you! That means a lot to me!
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The structure fits to the emotion very powerfully, though I didn't find myself moved by the words themselves until the very end. The last two lines were brilliant.
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In fewer than one hundred words, you managed to convey such sadness and loneliness. Now that's poetry at its finest.
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Thank you so much! I truly appreciate it!
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Signing your name and the date made me think of a tombstone because of the last two lines. Very sad
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Oh wow! I actually put my name and date on all my pieces. Sort of a "copyright!"
Thank you!
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Well, a lot of people do that, just in this case that's what it made me think of.
You're welcome. I checked out your prof and couldn't help but add you to my watch list. Shakespeare rocks
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[link] check this... coming soon the second chapter XD
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You are most welcome.
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I like this. It's well written and I can certainly relate to it. =]
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Again you have hit exactly what I'm feeling. You found the words I can't right now. Great Job!
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So eloquently spoken... The whole thing is beautiful in the way it rings so true...
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Wow, thank you so much!
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Oh Sweetie, don't you fret .............
its out there for you .... i just know it...
someone that appreciates you for all you are, someone who understands that your sometimes silence and standoff ness, is the artist in you and will embrace that part of you with love .... and with respect .... and with support ..... BUT in your grief, you have such profound words . i love this its raw and awakening and so full of emotion ..... As always, I LOVE IT ...... You continue to amaze me, you haven't let me down yet ....... just keep writing out how you feel it really is therapeutic, and in turn, you share with us ..and we are grateful .......
Always Yours, Terry
P.S. (you continue to inspire)
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Thank you Terry! You're too kind! I truly appreciate it!
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The only part I really liked in this poem, which was the ultimate climax of it was the very last stanza and its ending line.
That is what made this piece very impacting and is what made me decide whether or not to accept it into the Group, and so I have.
Your work will only get better; continue to write, fellow poet.
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Thank you. I actually had the first two stanzas sitting around for a couple weeks. It wasn't until today that I came up with the final stanza, which is most likely why it seems to have no transition.
Thanks again!
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Impressive how many things you are saying with so few words
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Thank you! That means a lot to me!
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