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CloudNumber8 — I'm Really Not Okay
Published: 2012-06-06 21:33:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 18077; Favourites: 991; Downloads: 259
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When I whisper of my woesHow can anyone hear
When the din of their own lives
Is ringing in their ears
Forcing a smile as they glance
Frown as they look away
Please somebody turn around
I'm really not okay
You refuse to see the signs
A deluge of denial
Drowns out my facial features
The absence of a smile
Obliged to ask how I am
Your concerns I allay
But then again I would do
I'm really not okay
Hold back the transparent tears
A dam of repression
I'll be damned if anyone
Sees through my confession
Slowly my world unravels
Life's tapestry will fray
My pain has been tailor made
I'm really not okay
I write poems and stories
Keep a diary with me
Leave it in public places
Hoping someone will see
And tell me how they have read
Up to the present day
Hold me close and say those words
Are you really okay?
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I'm happy you're out of the feelings expressed presently, judging by the journal entry.
But i have to risk becoming a devil's advocate for the whole comment avalanche.
Everyone's feeling depressed in somewhere their time of life, feeling lonely and misunderstood. When about 16.. -ish. So one feels neglected and wants someone to reach for their inner self and really listen and help and so on. But noone seems to do it. Why? Why should they? The world should need you, even in a tiniest way, fot it to reach out to you. Make this first move and you will never be alone or wanting.
And also you've got to have yourself to have for yourself. Bit of a mixup there. Nobody owes you anything. Especially emotionally. Be your own master and the master of your inner self. Then you will love, or at least cope with yourself. And after that go and become needed and wanted by others. Be useful to the world. And the world's your aphrodisiac mollusc. And become someone to reach for the others and drag them out, or better show them the way they might get themselves out of the gloomy moist self-pity they're in. And they become useful.
Read Marcus Aurelius. Good stuff. Helped me much once.
P.S. Good luck with Bee. I know how love gives you wings. Or at least makes you climb a tall building and thump your chest roaring happily.
Cheers.
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hey there
thanks for the comment. I suppose i like to think that maybe if people see they are not alone in their feelings they wont be ashamed of them. So therefore they wont be afraid to ask for help. When i was writing this too i wasnt just thinking of people with the average teenage angsty type problems but those who have more serious issues that they cant so easily be dragged out of.
thank you again
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This wuz soo beautifully writin. It's makes me soo sad. lol. It's amazing though. I luv it! It makes me think of the people out there who are actually like this.
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Feel like there's a piece of me. "Forcing a smile as they glance. Frown as they look around" and the part with diary, stories and even poems, yeah. I really like that one.
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thanks Wiki
I am glad you like it my friend
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thank you! you are being very nice to me today
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This almost perfectly describes how I'm feeling today... thanks.
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and thank you for taking time to read it and comment. I appreciate it a lot
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Mhm, just returning a favor. n-n
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I really like your simple rhyming scheme - it gives brainspace for the message you've conveyed very fluidly.
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My feelings exactly. I love how I can relate to this. Also, it's written very well, and I like your use of words.
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Thank you very much. I write inspired by feelings i had or have now but i love that others can relate. Its the point of dA really i think. Bring people together with poems and art
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Yes, that's why I love it here : )
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This is great Collin! so true - when people ask this question do they really want to hear the answer? "the din of their own lives is ringing in their ears" -
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Thank you for the comment Judy. I hope you dont mind me using your first name, i saw it on your page
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I really love this poeam, it relates to me so much and I can understand it perfectly well.
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thats important to me. I try and write them to make them understandable
thank you
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Your welcome for the watch and comment.
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Very touching. Very much the way I feel lately.
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sorry to hear that, but looking at the people who have commented on this poem so far your/ we are not alone in our feelings
thanks for commenting
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Sadly that's true. I've learned the hard way that it's important to take notice of other people's pain, struggles and sorrow. Their woes are just as important as my own.
You're welcome.
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i love this. yet i find it sad that some people are afraid to say how they really feel. if only they could have a caring shoulder to lean upon
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yeah, its such a shame. If everyone just looked after 1 person each we would all be ok
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yeah 
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wow..im not really into poetry but this is amazing
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thats great to hear, thank you
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really great writting^-^ i liked it a lot^-^
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thank you very much
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THESE FEELS... I know them too well. I love this.
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welcome, It was a nice poem,
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it's wonderful! I can remember taking my book with poems with me so someone might read it! it's really well written, I love the rhythm and the words you use and I can really relate to it! I don't know much about writing but I really like it <3
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