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Published: 2005-10-19 00:28:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 143; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 2
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Once upon a time,I was born into the world
My eyes could not open
To see the reality that would uncurl...
Raised like every little child had been
Loving all the smiles I was able to see
But when I was 6 someone came up to me
And said, "Here, take this. It's a gun."
If only the sun had shone
Would I have rejected the gun
Once upon a time,
I grew up with a gun.
My mother had died
And my fears had multiplied.
I wish I could go out and try to help
But for now I'll hold on to my weapon and wish for the best
And I must make sure these fears don't digest
Once upon a time,
That gun could have been helpful.
I could have fled
And given it to someone who could use it
Without being sinful.
If only the sun had shone
Would I have gone out and defend
What once was the life of an
Innocent young child.
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Comments: 10
CodebreakShyOutsider [2006-12-19 02:37:14 +0000 UTC]
Then I guess I'll change it into a poem.
And this thing is as old as Musashi looks, ok?
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Duck-san In reply to CodebreakShyOutsider [2006-12-20 23:40:17 +0000 UTC]
Hey, you did change it into a poem!
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CodebreakShyOutsider In reply to Duck-san [2006-12-21 02:06:40 +0000 UTC]
Indeed.
We need a Bando emote.
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Duck-san In reply to CodebreakShyOutsider [2006-12-20 23:39:38 +0000 UTC]
You wrote this 30 years ago? Just joking.
LOOKEE
Kurita but thin
jyuumonji
You know who it is.
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Duck-san In reply to CodebreakShyOutsider [2006-12-20 23:37:13 +0000 UTC]
You weren't born 30 years ago.
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CodebreakShyOutsider In reply to Duck-san [2006-12-21 02:06:02 +0000 UTC]
Can you at least acknowledge the implication of a hyperbole?
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Duck-san [2006-12-18 22:38:08 +0000 UTC]
Advanced Critique blah blah blah. And only I can say mean things to you because I'm your best friend XD.
It sounds really cool. However, it seems to be more like a poem... but I was never much of a poet so I wouldn't know. Who's the mystery person who's attention you're trying to attract?
And have you been reading too much Eyeshield? I think Hiruma is getting into your head. And so is that orange water pistol.
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Distorted-Lullaby [2005-10-19 11:06:37 +0000 UTC]
wow .__. I really like this...it's just like...wow. I love the meaning and how you put the stanzas together...really love this @_@
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CodebreakShyOutsider In reply to Distorted-Lullaby [2005-10-20 01:02:15 +0000 UTC]
Thank you!
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