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Opinions, critique and tips are welcome!! Let me know what you think about the page as it comes to panels, bubbles, readability of the text, colours, composition, atmosphere, story plot whatever. Help me improving the quality of the novel XD
And I have to explain something; the white one is a male! He looks rather fine build and is relatively small, because he's a south European (Alpine) type, while the others are Russian cheederians; bigger and stronger build - also the females (like the green-eyed black one).
Cheederians are enormous felids; a horse sized mix between an Oriental cat, tiger and Eurasian lynx - see here some refs: [link] , [link] , [link] and , [link] , [link] .
Special thanks to , as beta-readers, my cats Jayto, Neo and Nintu, the many other cats, tigers, Eurasian lynxes as models and of course all the people on DA for helpful tips!
Art, Cheederian species, character and story by me. Please don't copy and/or use it without my permission!
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just a suggestion: instead of saying "this betrayer" in the second panel, i would put "this traitor"
it just seems to sound better to me as a reader
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Haha he is - he's also one who has not really a good 'theory of mind'
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Thanks! Good! - I keep submitting once a week - at least for chapter 1 - after that I take a few weeks break I think before I continue with ch.2.
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Okay, i can understand that. Just keep up the good work and I'm sure everyone will agree, you deserve a break
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great page, great technique - but i just donΒ΄t get the story... can you explain it to me? please? agian? xD
sorry to waste your time xD
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Thanks for giving your opinion btw! It always helps to know what people think about it.
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oh, i love your style ^^
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Just read it again - all elements are hidden in the pages. It's more or less supposed to be 'not easily readable' as in - the story is complex and it must be a challenge for the readers. Hope it's not to difficult though...more becomes clear later. The essence is that a cheederians and northern hyenas compete with each other (say fight) - and that a young cheederian has been growing up among hyenas to do 'missions' by his own species (cheeds) - here his mission seemed to fail.
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ah, okay, thatΒ΄s just what i wanted to know, i didnΒ΄t even understand that!
but iΒ΄ll look after the little elements
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aw then maybe you read to fast?? Its meant to be more or less literary - meaning it's not an easy kidstory. See it as a challenge
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okay, iΒ΄ll do ^^
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I think you should be one of the artists for OFF-white ^^
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Or just doing my own and try to 'get it through'
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Ahhh no this can't be the latest page! xD
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yep it is - new one comes today XD
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Awesome 8D
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Just stumbled across your comic and I really like it 
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Thanka!!ha no indeed - I llchange in the next pages in one of the fonts *akeli suggested - and after that I will change the older pages too, gradually. But thanks for saying that - the more I know peoples opinion the better!
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Nigras looks surely pissed o.o
And Shasha, wow, she's brave and honest! I really like her.
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Yeah - in the tense situation he lives in, the best and safest way for the cheeds was just to kill Yves. But yeah...he knows that that really hurts his daughter - but he's not happy with the situation at all.
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Then it's no wonder he's this angry. Hope he'll keep a cool head after all!
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I think if I was Sasha I'd want to slap light brown Cheed (forgot his name again, sorry).
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Thaldo - he's irritating his half sister bit 
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Oh my gosh, the motion in their faces *-* I love it. <3
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Thanks!!
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You're welcome (:
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Thank you Sasha for looking at and apprecaiting the best in someone even at the worst. Way to go girl. Yves you are a lucky man. 
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Thankies ehhe - that's good to hear!! oeh btw - I gonna answer your letter soon - I read it all 
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oh have fun and be safe! hahah! A hurricane just came through here...jeesh. I hope we get lots of snow this year! Send me some! lol! and yay! but of course again I say take your time but I am definatly VERY EXCITED!
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A hurricane? Hell - I hope not with thunderstorms? in case of thunderstorms I dive under my bed haha. Hopefully its more blizzards here. Im such a winteranimal hehe. But this weekend Ill try to answe4r y our letter - if my fingers want to type...
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I cant stand thunderstoms either but luckly as it stands now I am far away from the hurricane, in Florida Disney! And I am also a winter loving person. 
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I'm slightly confused... did i miss something?o.O
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I hide a lot of details in the story - making it a challenge to read - so it pays maybe to go some pages back and turn your 'theory of mind' on ...but agreed- there are a lot of things going on in one time, which will be clear later on.
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Ok, now i understand better ^^ ok *Theory mind mode activate* boup
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np - if you have a question or if things are vague, just ask me or let me at least know. This volume is my first, so I'm a bit figuring out how to make a graphic novel - so input from other people is really welcome! maybe my storyline is a bit too complicated ^^ - but I try to hide all the hints somehwere in the story
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Well for me the female chedarian told that they fell in love only to keep the white male's life safe. But really it isn't true. Am i right?
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not entirely
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Wow, i guess we will know more later xD
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.... if Nigras is Sacha's father ... well leave your daughter alone ! In another hand, I understand him if Yves is a traitor. Let's see what he'll say to defend himself ( like he was brainwashed ?)
Anyway, thanks for the comic !
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Nigras reacts so highly flammable because the situation is pretty tense- not only for Yves, but also for the cheederians and hyenas whole live there (too) close too eachother.Ha yep and just see what happens next XDD
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