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“Wrapped Up In Blue”What if I miss
the parade passing by
while watching the rain
fall from the sky
and don’t see all
of the clowns waving hi
because I was wrapped up in blue?
What if I ignore
the call of the wild
and settle for something
a little more mild
neglecting the voice
of my inner child
because I was wrapped up in blue?
What if the sun
shines on my face
while I hang it low
in a shadowy place
and I can’t feel the warmth
of its radiant grace
because I was wrapped up in blue?
What if the words
that I long to hear
are uttered from lips
I find so dear
but are washed away
in a river of tears
because I was wrapped up in blue?
What if I never
experience it all
while sitting precariously
perched on the wall
not daring to move
for fear I will fall
because I was wrapped up in blue?
But what if I smile,
join the parade…
Talk to the child,
step out of the shade…
listen more closely,
hear the love that I made…
I’d be happy, remembering you.
Life is full of what if's....most are pointless. Sometimes, it's worth it to question them....
Thank you to for her stock piece, [link]
And thank you very much to ~atomicsharkdesign for the use of his gorgeous Blue Rose photo, again! [link]
**NOTE!!** Thank you SO much to for her recommending this piece for a DD.
Original poem by me, © melanie joy 2008
I give permission to ~Unique-Manip , =PoetryPlease , and *Visual-Poetry-Club to display this in their galleries.
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Comments: 208
rabbit145 In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-26 19:59:19 +0000 UTC]
^_^ Not a problem. See you around!
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deviouslili In reply to ??? [2008-07-13 11:37:33 +0000 UTC]
Melanie!!! Congrats on the DD!! Holy hannah!! YAY!
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meljoy68 In reply to deviouslili [2008-07-13 19:14:04 +0000 UTC]
I was floored!!!!!!
Thank you, Stephanie.
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deviouslili In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 19:46:28 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome!! I bet you were!!
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FireDitto In reply to ??? [2008-07-13 10:31:02 +0000 UTC]
Lovely, and well deserving of the DD.
Thank you.
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meljoy68 In reply to FireDitto [2008-07-13 19:13:24 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I did get your note, btw. I will go check out the link and give it some thought! Thank you very much for that!
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FireDitto In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-14 06:37:16 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome.
And awesome. I'm glad you'll consider it =}
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chemical-rainbow In reply to ??? [2008-07-13 08:36:59 +0000 UTC]
Wow! This is one of the best visual poetry pieces I have seen. Keep it up, and I hope to see more of your daily deviations! You really deserve it.
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meljoy68 In reply to chemical-rainbow [2008-07-13 08:40:22 +0000 UTC]
I'm in shock. Thank you very much!! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
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chemical-rainbow In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 08:57:15 +0000 UTC]
No problem. I do hope I can critique on the poem itself, but I'm more of an art critic.
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meljoy68 In reply to chemical-rainbow [2008-07-13 10:10:21 +0000 UTC]
Feedback is good, I hope you feel comfortable enough to offer yours.
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chemical-rainbow In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-20 10:54:17 +0000 UTC]
I like the inquisitive tone used in your poem where it seems like the thing/person in question is very curious to know the answers. It gives a childlike questioning, and the way you divided the lines makes the flow of the poem good.
I really like to write in free verse, but I happen to be more of a person who writes and reads prose rather than poetry.
I told you I was an art critic.
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meljoy68 In reply to chemical-rainbow [2008-07-20 18:08:34 +0000 UTC]
I've tried to write in prose, I have a few pieces, but most anything I attempt has a rhyme in it somewhere...I can't seem to help it.
I do have a few pieces that are true free verse, no rhymes, no meter, but not many.
I thank you for the feedback. It was not critical in a way that attacked, for which I am appreciative.
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chemical-rainbow In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-25 14:27:17 +0000 UTC]
You are welcome. We all are good in different things. I feel happy that you appreciated my comment.
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SilentPlea In reply to ??? [2008-07-13 08:03:58 +0000 UTC]
OMG MEL!!!!!! You really got a DD! I'm so excited for you!!!! Congrats girl!
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 08:23:46 +0000 UTC]
WHAT?!??! Shut Up. You're kidding, right??!?
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SilentPlea In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 08:24:35 +0000 UTC]
MEL!!!!! YOU GOT A DD!!!!!!!!!!
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 08:33:27 +0000 UTC]
You're not kidding!! My fingers are stuttering!!!!
Omg.
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SilentPlea In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 08:36:14 +0000 UTC]
awwwww...I'm so glad that I was still on here when you saw it!
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 08:41:33 +0000 UTC]
How am I supposed to go to sleep NOW?!?! I had to send Melissa a note to thank her. I wouldn't have seen it if you and Erik hadn't said anything!! Thank you Shelley!!!
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SilentPlea In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 08:43:20 +0000 UTC]
I think sleep is gonna be hard tonight for you! I'll stay up and keep you company if you want
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 08:50:13 +0000 UTC]
I'm wired now!!
A DD....holy shit. And this is the first time I've had more than 2 pages of msgs....I know that sounds corny but it's almost as big a deal!
I love you guys!!!
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SilentPlea In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 08:51:48 +0000 UTC]
I'm so proud of you. I knew your stuff was good! Love you Mel!!!
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 10:09:25 +0000 UTC]
Oh my gosh Shelley this is insane!! Someone actually downloaded it to their mobile phone... I'm floored, truly. It was nice to know my friends liked what I wrote, but wow...
And I love you too!!!
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SilentPlea In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 18:04:45 +0000 UTC]
somebody downloaded it to their phone? that is so they could see it all of the time...I bet it's their background. are you still in shock today?
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 19:10:24 +0000 UTC]
Uh huh!!!! I had 123 new favs this morning... I can't type anymore, my fingers have gone numb...but I am not complaining!! I don't think I've felt this giddy about writing since my very first sonnet won a contest...in 1983!!!
You guys rock, you know that right?!? I have some of the best people to call friends!!
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SilentPlea In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 19:24:55 +0000 UTC]
uh oh...Mel! will this take you to lalala? how will you be able to write sad now?
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 19:39:07 +0000 UTC]
OH no!! You're right?? What will I do??!?!
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SilentPlea In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 19:41:03 +0000 UTC]
what a terrible obstacle to overcome
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meljoy68 In reply to SilentPlea [2008-07-13 20:28:20 +0000 UTC]
I know! *sigh* I will have to find a way to get sad, I guess....
NOT.
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ecamouse37 In reply to ??? [2008-07-13 07:27:00 +0000 UTC]
very pretty and the poem was was great
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impurfektion In reply to ??? [2008-07-12 19:54:52 +0000 UTC]
Ok. You went and did it. I am sitting here literally with tears in my eyes. One of the most beautiful pieces I've ever read ... anywhere. I am almost speechless. I can't even begin to describe how this touches me. It is a wonderful reminder to live life and not ... damn I really don't know how to explain it. The depth of feeling this provokes. It's amazing, Mel. I hope you don't mind if I print this out. I'm off to find a tissue. Thank you.
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meljoy68 In reply to impurfektion [2008-07-12 20:17:53 +0000 UTC]
Well heck, Melissa...now you went and made ME cry! Wow...Thank you seems really lame. I'm extremely flattered that you found this so moving. This was one of those moments when I didn't really do anything but let the words come. I was just a tool...
And yes please, by all means, print it!
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impurfektion In reply to meljoy68 [2008-07-13 00:46:29 +0000 UTC]
Printed. I shared it with my husband and he said, and I quote ... "this is really good. Your friend has some major talent."
Just thought I'd share.
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meljoy68 In reply to impurfektion [2008-07-13 00:47:35 +0000 UTC]
Oh wow. I'm giggly.
Thank you for sharing that! Tell your husband I said thank you, too!
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mdandree In reply to ??? [2008-07-12 15:38:44 +0000 UTC]
I have to tell you again that this poem was the most inspiring piece of prose/poetry i've read in a long time!
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meljoy68 In reply to mdandree [2008-07-12 19:43:39 +0000 UTC]
Thank you sounds so tame. But thank you!
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mdandree In reply to ??? [2008-07-12 15:13:48 +0000 UTC]
That was the best writting i've seen yet on DA! It made me wish I could have come up with those words myself! Very well written!
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meljoy68 In reply to mdandree [2008-07-12 15:19:12 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much!!! That made a nice start to the day!
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