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Misstridd β TFP : The Energy (FanComic) Chapter 5 - PG 6
Published: 2014-07-17 14:48:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 2580; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 0
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Sorry for rudeness but your status ain't normal if a robot turns his back to your face, friends.tdarciuboltr.deviantart.com/arβ¦ <-----Previous and next -----> tdarciuboltr.deviantart.com/arβ¦
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I'd have the same reaction as you if a robot turned around on me like that XD
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Ok now I understand WHY Nanoshot doesn`t like his brother
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Looks good ^^ haven't been following the series but it has definitely struck my curiosity :3
The only grammer errors I spotted were:
"Do you know making fire?" Which would probably be read easier as "Do you know how to make a fire?"
"You can sleep after I warm up you." = "You can sleep after I warm you up." (the you was simply in the wrong place ^^ )
And "Tomorrow we will arrive your home." = "Tomorrow we will arrive at your home." (missing the at ^^ )
Other than that the comic looks great :3 it has a nice flow to it and the only reason I'm confused is that I came in on the fifth chapter. I will definitely be looking at your gallery to find the rest to find out about the characters and such. )eep up the good work ^^
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Thank for helping ! I'm really grateful 
Actually, I wanted to update other pages because they look so bad but here is my comic folder. You can look at it. I lined up in everything oldest to newest :3
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Note to myself : Really these pages need update...eugh
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You're very welcome ^^
Yeah, they could use an update but I would save it until you finish the comic ^^ that way you have a little less stress from everything
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My mother says this, too. I don't know why but I think, IΒ stuck on details so much XD
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I can understand being stuck on details XD it's just a normal part for a writer or artist. :3
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Yes and this is not a good feeling
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Yeah he turned his back to my face and I dreamed a lot of bad thing because of him XD
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