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Published: 2010-08-11 10:21:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 9286; Favourites: 92; Downloads: 30
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Edit: This is a redone version. All pages will go through this process
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Aaah there it is^^
Sorry guys I didnt upload it yesterday...
But we wanted to upload English at same time as German^^
Page 5... I dont know... I am nearly finnished but Elise was away yesterday night... dont know why I will get the backgrounds...
To that point... enjoy this page
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First bubble:
-"Cause I kown" should be "'cause I knew" or "'cause I had known" (unless you want to say "because", there needs to be an apostrophy in front of "cause")
-"all who stand" should be "all who stood" or "all who withstood"
-"any way" should be "every way"
-"for they" at the end should be "them"(you don't need the for)
Second bubble:
-"Shiro showed up again who fled to the forest while the big fight" would sound better like this "Shiro, who had fled to the forest during the big fight, showed up again"
-"Brang me as the new alpha of our pack, the full report" should be "Brought me, the new alpha of our pack, the full report"
Thrid bubble:
-"long" should be "a long"
-"fealed" shoulod be "felt"
-"be a good alpha to the pack" it would sound better with an "and" in front, but I don't think you need it
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Random question... Why do the other wolves have markings around their eyes, but he doesn't? The wolf telling the story I mean, Sorry, I forgot his name XD
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well the markings just come up when they have big emotions
razer though is the only one who dont got any
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Ohh okay 
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yeah I am to lazy to change xD
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So....sad! The first panel is very touching. He looks so sad! And I don't know why, but I really like the design of that other male wolf.
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W-w-w-.....WAAAAAAAAAAAH! 
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will be said in next pages ;D
I think in... uhm about 3 pages^^
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Poor poor wolfie. I'm loving the comic so far. Good job!
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xD
wait for next page
there will be some cuties^^
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Ooh ooh yay!!! Puppies??!!!!! I wuv them!!!
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damn I have told to much xD
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Weeeeeeeeee! Heheh, I has ze information!!!
Naw I'm kidding lol ^^
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